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I am LOVING THIS!!!
This is one of the most intense military action stories I've ever read on this site, and it is AWESOME!!!
Please let the humans and ponies stand as equals in this one -- and fuck the 'Overlord' who said the humans couldn't retreat!
If you want this story to have a better chance of being noticed I'd recommend adding it to a group.
Humans Are Superior
And
Technology Is Magic
Is what I recommend trying. Xd
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Thanks for the suggestion!
It is my intention to begin adding this story once I have finished writing (in my files) so that it will at least be in the editing phase before a wider audience looks at it. I really don't want it to be put in a group only for my motivation for this story to vanish (because that's just how it is sometimes). I don't like seeing stories that remain in incomplete hell, so before I really try to put feelers out there, I'm going to make sure it has a written ending (besides the notes I put in my storyboards)
Glad you like the story so far though, always good to know somebody has an interest!
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Your welcome!
9689674
No, the humans aren't superior. Here, they are equals.
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Well thier kinda being superior to the changelings, it doesint say exactly what thier superior to in that group. The only real reason the changelings are winning is because of numbers.
I'm surprised how many downvotes this has. Because I think this story is AWESOME!!!
Well I just read the introduction of the invasion of Earth so this should be interesting.
So before I even read chapture 1 here are the list of things I'm hoping to see...
-Proper and competent tactics being adaptted and employed by NATO, USA, Russia and China but I believe the story will focus on North America.
-The proper use of Anti Aircraft Artillery (AAA) and Air forces that Earth has to deploy.
-The proper use of Artillery support and Rocket artillery.
-The proper use of Naval support with their heavy weapons platforms and carriers.
My opinions of things I want to see
- a Boeing 747-400 from British Airlines (not destroyed)
An amazing AWESOME chapter! Xd
That's fucked up about nuking cities, but if it happens to be true that changelings can turn people into changelings then as Walker said it was the right call to make, ......still fucked up thou.
I wonder if at some point they will retake D.C.
I look forward to more AWESOME chapters bro!
OOH! I hope we get some tanks!
Someone asked why this story has downvotes. Well this chapter is one of the reasons, author is literally writting a bad alien invasion movie, just like those you sometimes see on sci fi channel. Ee dont know how changelings came but now apparently it isnt from space, that means portals. You know what those are? Easy choke points. Second the author just wrote that india fell but somehow a disorganized us army manages to hold. There are a lot more bad things to write about but idk if it will fit
Tl:dr. Fic is bad, unless you like those ridiculous sci fi channel movies
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I've seen far worse. At the very least the writing quality is very good, and while some might think stories like this are cheesy I actually enjoy them. Especially good writing quality like this!
Now we need some low ranking Changeling Drones to seek asylum with the humans and ponies (after being interrogated and vetted)--but I don't think that's gonna happen...
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Cheesy? Its ridiculous. You are telling me that well trained and well equiped AND well organized millitary forces all over the world somehow failing to combat bug horses is good to you? The entire story is filled with plot holes and contradictions, how you fail to see that is beyond me. But calling this a well written story is an insult to stories that are actually well written.
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First off, the writing quality is good.
And as much as I love our military and technology I dont think they would be really prepared for millions of magic pony bugs launching an all out blitzkrieg on the world. Throw in the fact they can use our numbers against us by converting our own civilians into thier drone army, and change and sound like other people which you can't deny would play great havoc among our communication and sabotaging leadership [which in the story they have]. Is the story perfect? Of course not. There will always be holes in it, that's why it's called FICTION.
But hey! If you wanna go around calling peoples stories a pile of shit, and breaking thier Hope's and dreams of wanting to be writers then go the la di fuck head.
good constructive criticism is fine for it helps writers to try and be better. Being a hard ass prick that basically says it sucks and shouldn't exist, that's just being a dick dude.
You have a right to your own opinion, but so do i, and I say I like this story and it's good.
Hello readers, glad to see the wealth of comments. I'm using this to address a few points since it seems to be getting slightly heated.
1. I appreciate all of my comments (even the more negative ones) as they give me proper critiques even if they don't intend to do so. Reading the comments, I'd like your opinion; do you think this story would benefit from a short prologue/primer? It is my intention to build and expand the world of the story in one-shot spin offs, but if there is a common belief that the story needs a more proper introduction, I am more than willing to post my primer and write up an introduction set before the invasion.
2. Building off the last point, I am of the writing mind that it is better to introduce the reader to the information as the characters receive it. Many of the concerns I see are with lack of information, and I think I need to state that that is intentional. As the reader, we have no more information than our characters, and the characters only have the information they can find. We don't really know the hows or whats, and it is the job of the characters to find the why's. I can always adjust my writing style if I have not been executing this properly, and I would like to see your opinion if the dialogue should be more expositional rather than interactional.
3. This is really just a note that I may not update so frequently in the coming weeks. I recently got switched to a 6 day, 12 hours shift at work and it is slowly killing me. So, my updates may be pushed till August, when I intend to quit before I go resume my college courses.
4. I'm always ecstatic to see comments! Positive, negative, I don't care! I have thick skin and I am teaching myself to look for silver linings, so I'll take the interactions I get. Hit me with what you think needs improvement, and what you like, I'm all ears (though you may not see EVERY criticism reflected in the story, since I do have my own direction for this puppy.)
In sum, thanks for reading! I hope you enjoy where the story (and wider universe) goes in the future!
Hot diggity damn!
This is one of the most intense cliffhangers I've ever come across!
Honestly I was NOT expecting him to turn into a changeling, thou I admit the colossal drama I can see happening is endless!!!
But what the heck is gonna happen now? Like celestia said his mind will remain his own but his body will not. I guess he could 'change' back into his human self, but it wouldnt really change what he has become. Will he still remain leader? Imagines seeing a human turned changeling leading a human army to victory.....that's kinda cool actually. Xd
I'm really anxious to see what happens, bring on more AWESOME CHAPTERS!
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What exactly does number 1 paragraph mean?
Wait, your gonna quit the story in August!?
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My bad, lemme clarify so points.
First, the 1. paragraph is a question on how you would like to see the world expanded. Would it be a preference of more stories (though I am already working on a few ideas, so this is probably going to happen regardless), or would you like a primer, which I define as a set of rules/settings/character lists that essential describe the "rules" of the world (i.e. what technology is acceptable for use, how do the different groups act and interact). Said primer would act as a setting descriptor, both for my stories, as well as stories written by anyone else interested in playing with the universe.
As for point 2, I mean I'm quitting the job in August. While I intend to wrap up this story (so I can work on the sequel/ prequel/spin-offs) by September, I am by no means gonna quit the world, characters, and I won't leave this story incomplete (neither literally, or story wise). It will have a complete ending that intends to stand alone while also baiting future content.
I Hope that clears things up slightly!
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Clears things up great! Xd
I'm ok with however you wish to proceed dude.
You now have me tracking this story.
I will assume the pony survived the shot
Standard combat loadouts will not suffice in this instance.
3-6 mags is not enough here
Maine has a submarine base, several national guard bases, including one in the capitol, Augusta, one in Bangor next to the airport, plus several coastguard stations, and a fair bit of infrastructure for large ships. We also have the shipyards the navy and coastguard get ships from.
The Colonel shouldve immediately asked for the password when he saw 'Celestia' by herself.
It was his failure that resulted in this.
When more AWESOME chapters?
Moooooore
Wow it's alive...and I completely failed on doing that military and situation review I was talking about months ago and I need some sleep so it will not come out for the foreseeable future at least.
IT'S BACK!!!!!!!!!
This certainly was an interesting chapter, my OC in his current state could be a good source of support.
A new chapter! YAY!!!!
no more combat? But that was kinda the best part of this story.
While reading about psychological effects and coming to terms with change is very interesting, what about the war? I wanna read what happens!
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Yeah, the way the story turned out, the combat kinda fell to the wayside. If you are interested, I began work on the Five hour project, which will be 90% combat. I'm hoping to have a bit of that out in a week or two.
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So it's a new story taking place in the same war?
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Yes, before the events of this story. A series of shorts I am working on follow events after this story.
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Sweet! Cant wait.
I could so tear into Luna after she starts the second part starting with a nice hard and proper smack and then going into the reason you suck speech.
This was a good story, your welcome.
I feel like it’s room for a sequel
Ps just saying
He’s falling for her
So fing cut
I would like to see an image of this
Honestly, this story is really enjoyable. It gets to much flak for what it is.
Just a piece of advice. When in the feild or the armory you dont salute an officer
Fuck you too, Luna.
That was extremely idiotic of you.
This is just dumb. US fell in a day, but ponies held out for centuries? Why weren't they overrun? Misanthropic garbage.
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Like stories of those on the front lines during the last days of the war.
this was the best story ever short, but it brought out many emotions that hit home you did great you keep on making stories.
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Well thank you for thinking so! I know this isn't one of my more popular pieces, but I rather enjoyed writing it and had a few more ideas for in universe I may still do. Hopefully they live up to the original.
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Since you're not dead does Echo Sierra Bravo mean anything or was it called that because it sounded cool?