Genius. Prodigy. Magus. Powerhouse. Unbalanced. Crazy. All words used to describe Twilight Sparkle at some point through her life. This is the story of her life, and of those close to her.
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Fascinating. So Cadance is a fair bit older on this go around? Seems she gets as much out of her hard-loving lifestyle as a changeling might. I honestly thought Smooth Mercury was a changeling, a Chrysalis who had finally got wise to how many options are really open to her.
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That she is! I always liked the idea of an older Cadance, and it fit well with the alt lore I've put together for this. I also wanted Cadance to be more connected to her sort-of 'domain' than she is in canon, which comes with rad emotion powers.
I think this is a nice chapter. I did not notice any difference due to the editing.
I have to say you did a GREAT job on the exchanges and characterizations in this chapter. It took a while, but was WELL worth the wait. I particularly liked this spin on Twilight and Cadance's first meeting (both of them being initially cautious for different reasons, but genuinely bonding) as well as the possible foreshadowing for SHINING's first (official) meeting with Cadance. And, yeah, Cadance's notes on family resemblance concerning both Celestia's descendants AND Luna's was another really good detail.
Indeed, I will very certainly going to be looking forward to more of this. :-D
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That's a relief. I was actually quite worried.
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I'm glad you liked the interaction, I tried to do my best with it. I feared you guys wouldn't like her and the first interaction.
This story continues to be interesting. I love your world craft here, with each little detail I find out I want to know more. It seems you have put a lot of thought into this. Your version of Cadance was good and I loved the interaction between her and Twilight. Very much looking forward to the next chapter, keep up the good work.
I didn’t notice any glaring errors in spelling our grammar, so I’d say your editing is just fine. Excellent chapter, love the way you’ve portrayed cadance here.
Warning! Badass Twilight incoming!
Still jumping between tenses all the time i see.
But at least it still lives and is getting updates.
Ohh loving each character as there introduced.
Yay! I’m so happy your back your world building is amazing can’t wait for the next chapter!
Thanks for the great update glad this is still on going
Why Twilight is special, she is unified blood line decendent , neither Solar or Lunar she's both. She's Between Night and Day, Twilight.
Cadance looking like a prism to Twilight's magesight? Well yeah she is the Crystal Princess, all Crystal Ponies likely look like prisms, just not as bight as Cadance. Also Caddy seems to be channeling another Hasbro IP with her pop star persona, name!y Jem.
Also is one of Celestia's spymasters a Changeling? The burst of green flames after Shining passed his loyalty test seems to say yes.
Okay, this one has definitely caught my attention. Just randomly came across this right after a new chapter and I am NOT disappointed. I love the world building and characterization of Twilight and the rest. I cannot wait to see where it all goes from here.
This wonderful world is not dead, I was a little worried that like so many good authors, for one reason or another would vanish into the aether never to be heard from again. I seriously thought Smooth Mercury was a changeling until the reveal, and I loved the first meeting, so glad to see little Twi breaking out of her shell a tad bit. Also loved the use of colors and the tad bits of historical lore, can't wait to see what happens next.
P.S. if you desire some excellent historical lore for inspiration there is a YouTube channel called Historical Equestria that several years back did a series of documentary-style histories from various ages in Equestria (and Zecora's homeland) as told by one of the archivists from the Canterlot Archives (sadly, the person behind this series got a bad case of burn-out and as far as I know will not be returning). and I can also point you towards some excellent fanfics that take place in the distant past ranging from early unified Equestria all the way back to the ancient annals of pre-migratory ponies and just about everything in between.
Why this is not in Twilestia group?
Nice bit of Queen there, glad to see this update.
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Thanks, I put quite a bit of thought into it. If you want to share, what bits of lore are you most interested in? Anything a big miss for you?
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That's a relief!
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Danger! Danger Will Robinson!
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Yeah, it's something of a problem that I'm trying to grapple with, but obviously it hasn't worked. Glad you can manage to enjoy the story through that though.
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Happy you like the characters!
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Im also glad to be bad! Thanks for liking the story my man!
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So am I!
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Glad you're interested in Cadance. You'll eventually see crystal ponies under magesight as well. As for changelings, well, that's up to your speculation.
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Good to see I can still draw people in. Really hope you enjoy content as I make it.
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I'm glad you think it's 'wonderful', I do try to put a lot of thought in the background lore.
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You know, I just hadn't thought to add it. That's a good idea, thanks!
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Cross Freddy Mercury with Gem and add ponies...
I'm still very intrigued and spellbound by this story, such detail I have always liked the whole Cadence can see into the hearts of ponies and most importantly how they react to this worlds Twilight.
Need more. I need to know everything turns out well. I can't wait for more.
Nice. ^^
I live this story and this was an amazing chapter. Cant wait for the next, like usual.
Your work always contains a certain uncatchable beauty in it, something that tugs on the heart's strings and leaves me wanting more, making each wait for another chapter an agony. This is the best way i could come up with to how to describe how good this story is.
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Who doesn't love a bit of Queen.
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Auntie said you can't hurry love!
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Happy to see you still enjoying it! I've always thought the details of Cadance's abilities were important and wanted to expand on them in the story.
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Nice.
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You're making me blush! Glad you like it so much. I'll endeavour to not make this wait so long.
Nice.
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In hindsight, I see why that one would be confusing. Fixed. Thanks for pointing it out!
Nice update!
Interesting, specially the bit on Sunset. I do love Bacon Horse, but I hope this Twilight can be strong enough to endure her and help her get her due redemption.
Maybe this encounter is a herald of good things to come. This older, more experienced cadence with greater emotional powers might be just enough to help Twilight heal and even surpass cannon's mental strength.
Ahhh foo, hit the current chapter.
Thoroughly enjoying your renditions of magic in this one :D
Fascinating throughout. I love this take on Cadence, especially her behavioral similarities to a changeling. Wonderful bit of irony there. Definitely looking forward to seeing her help Twilight heal.
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I, too, enjoy Bacon Horse. Glad you liked the chapter. Cadance will certainly have a large role to play in the future!
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Always nice to have one's work appreciated! Anything, in particular, you like about the magic?
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Thought it was ironic myself! There are more trials and tribulations coming, though. Unfortunately, not everything can be smooth sailing!
That moment when you get to the end of the chapter and see there's no next button:
*insert Vader Scream.jpeg*
Memes aside this is a really excellent story. The characters are very well put together and moving and their story feels like its going places. Celestia feels a bit too flash-backy to really be functional in normal day-to-day life, but that might be because of Twilight, if it is you might want to show that soon-ish.
Nepotism might be a bit too much of a theme to just drop due to how it kicked everything off with Twilight and the other kids, but I can't tell if you're trying to kick it off stage or just kick this particular instance off stage.
Twilight herself is well built and sympathetic, its very easy to imagine Celestia all but saying she should have been Luna's student, in the arts if nothing else. This Twilight with the creativity Luna has in this setting sounds like something to see, though with the allusions to her being descended from both bloodlines I wonder what she would learn from Celestia of her specialties.
Though Celestia seems to see negative bits of herself in Twilight's current demeanor, but she's also not exactly unbiased.
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I don't want to comment too much about Celestia's flashbacks, but I will say that you're spot on about it being severe enough to begin affecting daily life.
Due to the contexts of the chapters so far you haven't seen too much of the results of the investigation, but it does have an impact!
I'm glad you like this Twilight and agree that Celestia would think she would be a good student to Luna. It's always good to get good feedback about Twilight's character in this, as its something I constantly second guess myself with, or sit around for ages thinking on if she would do this thing or that thing, etc.
Glad you like the story!
It's 3 hrs past my bedtime(I have to get up for work at 3a.m.) but when I logged in for the first time in about a month and saw an update I had to read it. I've got a few updates but this one I couldn't wait to read once I knew it was out. :P I eagerly await where you take it. Also if you're interested I'm sure you could find any number of folks willing to help as editors & or proofreaders. Just say the word.
I love this story. Please don’t stop!
I'll continue to read this story it's actually very good you have a lot of talent so keep on writing. It can only ever grow
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Tense is probably my biggest issue, yeah. It's just difficult for me for some reason to recognize it when I read. Maybe I've just had the issue for so long that I can't see it anymore? I'll probably look for an editor for specifically that sometime, or someone to just teach me how to correct the issue. Either way, I'm sorry if that detracts a lot from the story.
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Don't plan to! I just find it hard to sit down and write. Writing at this moment, though...
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Thanks. Compliments like that keep me going, even if it's hard to believe them from my perspective.
Please come back soon
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Aye aye, Captain.
This is completely FASCINATING. I have never been more invested. I look forward to more!
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Thanks. Always like comments like this. Anything in particular you find fascinating?
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I am willing to be your editor if you are still looking for one.