Genius. Prodigy. Magus. Powerhouse. Unbalanced. Crazy. All words used to describe Twilight Sparkle at some point through her life. This is the story of her life, and of those close to her.
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I realy enjoyed your descriptions and explenations about spellcraft and the Nightmare. The moon must be praised! And appearently, the sun not touched, if you like to keep your appendages.
Subtle take with the other elements by the way :D *looks to the bloody corpses*
But just to get you right: Celly is taking a nap since two months and pony Vietnam against a form of bipedal ambush hunter kitty is working as to be expected?
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Yeah, I'm a master of hidden clues and messages. It amazes me you deduced they were the elements, really. I thought I was too good.
That's a pretty good summary, yeah. One month since the last chapter. I've thought about starting to date sections, but I'm split on the idea.
Well now, will wonders never cease? Someone's finally paying attention to basic safety by using paint instead of easily-smudged chalk. It's such a joy to see someone taking simple precautions.
There is something to be said for formal ritual circles, once the initial preparations are completed you only need apply magic to the circle to invoke its effect. In particular, commercial teleportation networks benefit massively from this paradigm, as do emergency response systems both civilian and military.
Yeah, Twilight's never been a particularly talented oneiromancer, the immaterial nature of the discipline is really something more suited to Trixie. You can't expect rigid forms and concepts to work, you need to be able to flow. Twilight's never flowed a day in her life.
That's because they are. Dream magic brings forth the mind and spirit unbound by mortal flesh, for better, and for worse. By panicking, by loosing her sense of self, she is quite literally coming apart at the seams. Horrible way to die really.
Did she? Are you sure she gave you the dream?
Mrrh
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Years of Roleplaying and reading abstruse novels do that to you 😅
And it is allways a delight to find things that fit together, espacially if they were hinted at about a year in advance, or in some cases ten or twenty.
Well, i think its not first time when NM use Twilight*s image for torturing Celestia.
And i think NM already know about plan with Elements of Harmony, and now this is not option.
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Also have to be careful about replacing hardware-based safeties with software-based ones, otherwise you end up with things like the Therac-25...
Just out of curiosity what's your take on the gender ratio? For example, is it an even split or skewed in one direction; are there defined gender roles; like stallions being expected to do all the physical labor and mares being in charge of administration and ruling? Last question on the topic, is polygamy considered normal in this AU or is it more monogamous relationships?
I know this topic is not really a key theme in this story but I like this AU and am a little curious on what the world (Equestria) looks like, outside of the current story. With that being said feel free to not answer this question or leave it very open ended. I would understand not wanting to fence your story into a certain idea.
I just found your story, read it alll the way through. AND I WANT MORE!!
On a side note, what is up with the repeated mentions of her horn being licked???? What is the heck is that referencing??
I keep thinking it has to do with her connection to her mother? I dont knooooow
Again, the characterizations, exchanges and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I especially appreciate Twilight's reflections on taking the time to measure the circle in the floor of Luna's room, Luna's library in general and one book in particular that she was trying to go over carefully (which may, or may not have been similar to the magic books Sunset Shimmer used to keep in touch with Celestia [and, later, Twilight] in canon), the nightmare involving, well, Celestia (with the ominous warning included) and Twilight's chat with Cadance with the former offering to help and the latter allowing Twilight to assist Raven.
I am most definitely looking forward to more of this.
Yeaaaah, this is probably gonna need a few warning tags, if you haven't added them already, lol. :T
Also, something I've noticed that people do a lot is mistake the color of the Princesses' eyes. Even you've done it; mistaken Celestia and Cadance's purple eyes for pink, and Luna's teal ones for blue. I don't fully understand why this mistake is so consistent throughout fanfiction. (I don't mean to rag on you for it; I just don't understand how it keeps happening, is all. It could very well be a case of a common piece of fanon pervading the space and influencing people such that they think it's canon. I've seen this happen a lot before in different fandoms. A bit silly to get twisted over colors, I know; but for some reason it's something I've always been kind of nitpicky about as soon as I noticed it happening a lot around here.)
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Thicc comment. Paint is a lot nicer than chalk for things like this, yes. Interesting theory on the dream tho. Glad you liked the chapter!
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Blrgh
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Happy you liked the chapter. Interesting idea, there.
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I actually did spend a bit thinking about this. I think RGRE is pretty fun personally, but I came to the conclusion that I would have had to started putting it in the story way before chapter 11 - which is when I started considering that. There are significantly more mares than stallions in Equestria, however. As a result there are some gender roles differences, but I'm still considering how to integrate them - Equestria is going to be a fairly equal place in that regard.
I think the only area they will lack in this regard is their tolerance of homosexuality, which is briefly mentioned by Cadance in chapter 7 in the line; 'The poor mare, she probably thinks she would be strung up.' When she is thinking about the maid uniforms and how Celestia most certainly enjoys the view as much as everyone else. I might get a chance to get into it, but I suppose it's not much of a spoiler to say that Smooth Mercury took after her real-life inspiration, and that portion of her life was looked upon very poorly.
As for polygamy, it will probably be the norm with some exceptions. I like the idea in my head, it will just come down to if I can depict it well.
I don't mind answering questions like this since it will be a bit before it comes up in the story, but relationships will eventually be a prime theme of what is happening. Glad you liked the story!
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It's referring to part of the incident, a recurring event for her, thus it represents the incident for her in nightmares. Horn-licking is certainly a thing in my universe, and it was done inappropriately to her.
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Glad you liked it! I was a bit worried that a few things wouldn't come across. I think a few things may have been lost in translation, but you guys still liked it.
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I actually repeatedly check eye colours and ended up being conflicted. If you look at the close-ups of Celestia's eyes, they are both purple and pink. The same with Cadance's. I ended up making their eyes the same colour. As for Princess Luna's, yeah they are more teal in the show, so fair. I'm glad you liked the chapter.
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O. I hope it is good sad.
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Someone is asking the real questions. Ones that I will adore exploring and revealing more about so I can hear y'alls opinions on it. Love comments like this, glad you liked it!
Edit: Also, Catalan is a separate continent from Griffonia.
I feel like Nightmare Moon was using Twilight to get to Celestia, but there was some kindness there, also.
I've heard there are two good ways to approach a world with magic in it- Hard Magic and Soft Magic. And I think you've achieved a wonderful hard magic system. There are rules and descriptions and I feel like I can see it all play out in the right amount of detail. It was very easy to get hooked into this story and I can't wait for more!!!!
But don't worry about getting chapters out faster than you're able. No-one's gonna worry if you post it sometime in May. Post as you feel comfortable <3
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Hm, I suppose that's fair if you account for things like shading and the ever-popular pony iris gradients (even if Celestia's eyes have never looked pink to me, and Cadance having pink eyes is just Too Much Pink in general). That reminds me of whatever the hell kind of mess Applebloom has got going on... I mean, it's pretty, but what the hell?? Maybe sectoral heterochromia is just really stinking common in ponies, or something?
Pretty good story, my only qualm is about the M rating. While depression,sex, rape, and probably battles do come up, as of now I don’t feel like it has quite passed the T rating. Oh well, keep up the good work!
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I finally admitted to myself that it definitely was soon, though. I'm glad you like the story.
Edit: It also means that if I want to I don't have to worry about exceeding the T rating.
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Yeah, I ended up not pushing for that goal, I like to sleep too much. It's nice to hear that people appreciate the magic system.
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As the author mentioned, the horn licking was part of the abuse her teacher did to her in school. In this AU, it would seem that licking a unicorn's horn is an erogenous act.
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I think rape alone is plenty to qualify for a mature rating. shit's heavy yo
I figured only Luna could easily walk between dreams. I figured it was a mix of her special talent, a millennia of practice, and skill.
I'm fine with everyone else having a hard time with it and or having a hard time understanding Luna's intent, but it's still my understanding that she's is a goddess of dreamwalking. That she alone holds the most power over this realm, even if she herself can still be destroyed by the dream world which is still greater than herself.