Twilight feels it's her duty to help her mentor on any tasks, especially ones that involve books. What she doesn't know is the Princess Celestia has called her to Canterlot for a much more romantic reason. How will Twilight react to the sudden revelation of her mentor's love, and how she manipulated and tricked her. But most importantly, how will she deal with not having a new book? More comedic in the beginning, more serious at the end.
A sequel to Everypony Has Secrets. You could probably not read it and still make sense of the story. Though I would suggest reading the story before reading this one if you want to understand the premise of this story.
Special thanks to prereaders: That_One_Brony and TeXXy
Also thank to: My friend Nolan who has helped me with some small details in various stories and for listening to me complain about everything.
Sorry about the story being on hiatus but I have to prepare for school so my upload rate is probably going to slow to about one chapter/new story per every 1 1/2 to 2 weeks. So please bare with me, I love writing these stories but my education has to come first.
1129476 Leave it "Incomplete". On Hiatus can discourage to read somebody. Uploading story 1 chapter per week or two is nothing unusual. Just keep the good work ;)
1130690 Thanks for the tip!
God, 'that' was an entrance.
1130863 Is there some sort of secret pun here, because I'm really bad at knowing when people are being subtle and when they're not.
No, no puns here.
Saddlebags, extra horseshoes, and socks. Lots of socks.
More comedy there, if you ask me.
1130696 Because honestly, if they're tracking it, they want it to be sooner, but it doesn't really matter when it updates, as long as it does. Just keep writing great stories!
This is pretty OOC. Twilight was the one to want attention from Shining, not the other way around! And I doubt that a single book changes that.
This gonna be good...
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1132087 I do. No matter if there's a special book or not, she wouldn't brush off her brother because she's that excited. She was the one to get mad at Shining for ignoring her before, remember?
1132284shes also the one who went buck crazy over being late due to a letter of her lessons which can be applied to her love of the princess or learning both of which apply here also cadance was evil in that episode remember she wasn't being jealous she was being right and shining was brain washed
1132333 She can be random, but her acting like that towards her brother seems very OOC.
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I rest my case.
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If it helps, I'm willing to edit.
note that i think i'm probably voerloaded myself with fics so expect delayyyyy
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Soo... many... books... -twitch- Don't blame her for telling Shining to get in line for her time.
Good story, by the way! I've enjoyed the cartoonish touch you have in here. Very good story! Didn't catch any grammar mistakes or anything, seemed very solid. I'll be waiting for the next update, even if it is forever(a week is a long time when you're bored). Hope school goes smoothly for you!
Also, poor, poor, Celestia... She doesn't know how bad Twilight is going to take there not being a book.
1133926 Thanks, but no thanks. I already have two editors/pre-readers/proofreaders. Appreciate the offer though.
So, Twilight needs rubber gloves?
And you should give your proofreaders a lashing. There aren't many blatant errors, but the phrasing is a mite awkward throughout. Most of this is due to incorrect or questionable usage of commas, like in the following:
Using her magic, she calmly opened the top of both suitcases, she immediately stopped humming and jumped back at what she saw what was in the smaller one.
This is an example of comma splice. What you have here are two separate sentences joined with a comma. Replace that second comma with a semicolon, period, or add in a conjunction after the comma. I too do editing for fanfics, in case you couldn't tell.
So, I won't go through and edit the whole thing, I just want you to be aware of this when you're writing.
1134224 Thank for letting me know. Both of them were fairly busy at the time so you have to cut them some slack.
Oh, no doubt. And this isn't something that many people would be likely to point out, preferring to stick to simple issues like typos. I should've made it more clear that I said that in jest; I don't want to insult a fellow editor.
1134249 They were able to point out all of my grammar and spelling errors so that's a good job in itself because I type really fast and don't both double checking. They deserve medals for the job they do.
The rubber gloves were really glaringly odd. Also, the series of disasters preventing Twilight from just leaving normally seemed overblown - yes, even by Twilight Sparkle standards. If I had to name one specific tidbit that seemed over the top, it was her destroying half her filing cabinet.
Once the princess enters the picture there is no telling what Twilight will do.
Maaaan, you tempt me with, like, twilestia goodness, and then...and then you make me wait to get any of it?
What kind of monster are you?!
Just kidding!
Or am I?? Keep up the good work, dude.
I LOVE YOU
edit: I LOVE YOU EVEN MORE. So anxious right now!
1135200 Rubber gloves are standard lab equipment.
1139328 (Twilight+Book Promised)+No Book+Celestia=You're the worst mentor ever/RAGE.
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I can't even... that picture... the pun... I take back everything I said
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its ok i still like you
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This story is making me doubt if Twilestia is the best ship... or if its TwiBook...
1148326 The book is a lie! gameinformer.com/cfs-filesystemfile.ashx/__key/CommunityServer-Discussions-Components-Files/14492/3806.50517-_2D00_-crying-filly-twilight_5F00_sparkle.gif
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heart broken by a book... new level of nerdness
1148430 Eeyup
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Doesn't this all look very out-of-character for Twilight Sparkle?
And unproofread?
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I'm quoting this from the description
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Yet she wrecks them carelessly, then proceeds to go on a hissy-fit (instead of trying to examine and repair the damage), causing more damage, followed by more damage... and she hasn't even left for Canterlot yet, at that point!
1161654 It's a love/hate relationship. I can't tell if you're being serious, sarcastic or passive-aggressive.
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Trying to be serious. But to put it in a different way: Twilight Sparkle was forced rather far out of character in an effort to start the story off funny, failing in the process. It happens, nothing to be ashamed of.
The story got better when things started properly taking off.
1161738 Well I was going for a "Out of the norm excited" state, I'll say it worked. Trust me there's much more stupid comedy to come, and also laser light shows. I'm starting to think I should have added an Alternate Universe tag to it, oh well.
*sigh* I see, another troll fic. Congratulations, ya got me.
Now I gotta find a new, REAL, Twilestia story.
1172133 THIS ISN"T A TROLL FIC. I JUST MADE THE DECISION TO MAKE IT MORE COMEDIC IN THE BEGINNING. YOU'VE MADE ME UPSET, THANKS A LOT!
1173207 Hey I love Comedy, everything needs comedy. This however is waaaay too over the top to be a serious fic. I mean, this "everything thing going wrong in an insane way" gimmic you're running is so far over the top it doesn't even remember what the top LOOKS like anymore.
1173365 Two things went wrong, one was slightly over the top and the other one was a slice of life-ish one. This is usually the part of the conversation where I would tell someone to go shove it but you've made me sad.
Somehow Twilight still managed to screw it up.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png Also I'll be on my flight back to the states for the next 14+ hours with no wi-fi. Sorry if this chapter isn't what you expected, I just had to do one from the perspective of the Princesses.
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Some spelling and gramatical errors, but hey, all in all a good fic (so far)
The whole hidden bunker thing seemed unnecessary, and just plain weird
"Sorry but your book is in another castle..." in my own had what follows is "... but your princess is here."