This story is a sequel to There’s a Time and Place, Pharynx
Thorax and Ember are now in a relationship and want their kingdoms to trust each other. Trying to hear the concerns from both sides, they hold a meeting and invite Princess Twilight for help.
Unfortunately, diamond dogs have plans of capturing the changeling princes and their allies for an unknown revenge scheme. With the help of a regretful diamond dog, Pharynx escapes, and it's up to him and him alone to rescue the others
... well, technically, he's not alone, but how could Fluttershy help him with something this dangerous?
Chapters (1)
You make me happy.
This is gonna be good. :D
Finally!
I've been waiting for this story a few months
9334585
Yeah, it took me about 7 months to write it so
I’m glad the waiting didn’t make you uninterested. I got frustrated several times just writing this first part lol
Sweet
This was disappointing. But at least you tried.
9425873
If you're gonna make a comment like that, at least say why you think it's a disappointment, instead of being a vague jerk.
9425873
I'm sorry I disappointed you. It can be quite difficult to make things flow well and to make the characters realistic. I don't know what exactly you didn't like about it, but I'll try to make this more interesting as it goes on.
9453709
Take your virtue signaling elsewhere. Nobody likes white knights.
9453816
To answer your fair question. The action descriptions felt rushed and fast. It’s understandable that you want to make the combat realistic, but you also gotta try to make sure that readers are immersed with the situation by taking your time with the fights itself. I realize that takes practice, so keep on trying.
Hey when do you think the next update will come for this story
Another story never to be finished
9453816
if you want i can try to help with the fight scene sometime
10054521
As I’m going back over this story, I’m starting to want to work on it again.
10521186
Sounds great
If you need an OC, let me know.
Oh no what a way to start off your story so it looks like thorax really wanted to make peace with the dragons so they called a meeting with ember and with a little help from Twilight and surprisingly Fluttershy and it looks like the dragon lord finally arrived things got a little rocky special with the other two dragons almost instigating the situation but then things really got worse when the diamond dogs attacked the kingdom and pretty much kidnapping almost everybody in the hive including the other dragon Twilight and Fluttershy thorax ember and pharynx things are not really looking good I wonder what's going to happen next
This sounds Epic good job.
I love the character setup. I’m excited to see where the yellow changeling and Coal end up. It would be humerus to have there inevitable yelling match be a hindrance to the captors. Either way I love the potential here.