• Member Since 25th Nov, 2014
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PumpkinPie59


Just a writer who loves cartoons. Thorax and Pharynx enthusiast. Also, I love Embrax.

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This story is a sequel to There’s a Time and Place, Pharynx


Thorax and Ember are now in a relationship and want their kingdoms to trust each other. Trying to hear the concerns from both sides, they hold a meeting and invite Princess Twilight for help.

Unfortunately, diamond dogs have plans of capturing the changeling princes and their allies for an unknown revenge scheme. With the help of a regretful diamond dog, Pharynx escapes, and it's up to him and him alone to rescue the others

... well, technically, he's not alone, but how could Fluttershy help him with something this dangerous?

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 15 )

You make me happy.

This is gonna be good. :D

Finally! :pinkiehappy: I've been waiting for this story a few months

9334585
Yeah, it took me about 7 months to write it so :twilightsheepish:

I’m glad the waiting didn’t make you uninterested. I got frustrated several times just writing this first part lol

This was disappointing. But at least you tried.

9425873
If you're gonna make a comment like that, at least say why you think it's a disappointment, instead of being a vague jerk.:flutterrage:

9425873
I'm sorry I disappointed you. It can be quite difficult to make things flow well and to make the characters realistic. I don't know what exactly you didn't like about it, but I'll try to make this more interesting as it goes on.

9453709
Take your virtue signaling elsewhere. Nobody likes white knights.

9453816

To answer your fair question. The action descriptions felt rushed and fast. It’s understandable that you want to make the combat realistic, but you also gotta try to make sure that readers are immersed with the situation by taking your time with the fights itself. I realize that takes practice, so keep on trying.

Hey when do you think the next update will come for this story

Another story never to be finished :ajsleepy:

9453816
if you want i can try to help with the fight scene sometime

10054521
As I’m going back over this story, I’m starting to want to work on it again.

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