Opening Up

DrakeSlayer #1 · Aug 23rd, 2018 · 4 · 2 · All Of It ·

on one hand, I’m glad there is no horse fucking
on the other hand... I would expect Sunset and Applejack to be fucking a horse in a clop fic...

hollowblade

hollowblade #2 · Aug 23rd, 2018 · 8 · 2 · All Of It ·

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One of them involves a horse.

Yay!

She doesn't fuck the horse.

Auh.

Yumberduddle

Yumberduddle #3 · Sep 6th, 2018 · 1 · · Just A Little More ·

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good story

Barley Citrus

Barley Citrus #4 · Sep 7th, 2018 · · · Just A Little More ·

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Thanks
I'd love to hear what you liked about it if anything stood out

Yumberduddle

Yumberduddle #5 · Sep 7th, 2018 · · · Just A Little More ·

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dont care for the drinking, i mean im not a teetoler or anything but its not in character for them. but i liked the chemistry u write between them, and i like sunset's personality and the realistic reactions she has as a former horse, and that theres a natural attraction she has for mares since she was a pony but its like a background sexual attraction that is intermeshed with her current human-lesbian sexuality rather than the primary, focused part of her sexuality, like a lot of other stories would do. i like it was more a subtle thing instead. also, MAJOR bonus points that it was a mare that sunset and aj were experimenting around and on, for some reason every story that has sunset or anyone else in equestria girls be into horses only uses stallions which is equal parts YUCK and NO. lastly i like that u kinda just captured this perfect moment of heat and desire and pleasure in humping, cuz its like, fucking urself against someone hot is AMAZING but so many stories (probly cuz most of them r written by guys lol) act like thats just minor foreplay for toys and fingering and so on, and its like, that stuff is fucking great of course, but a good humping? also fucking great

thats probly way more then u needed and not very helpful but there u go. also ur writing is overall pretty good

Barley Citrus

Barley Citrus #6 · Sep 8th, 2018 · · · Just A Little More ·

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Ey, Im glad you gave detail here.
And yea, i tried to add in alot of subtext about them as people, so im glad you could enjoy some of the subtlety.
Personally, Ive always thought AJ would fit perfectly as a drinker.
Also, yea i love the chemistry between these two, its alot of fun to write
Thanks, I'm always happy to hear feedback

Breakfateschain

Breakfateschain #7 · Jun 15th, 2019 · 1 · · Just A Little More ·

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Where does this fall in the continuity?

Barley Citrus

Barley Citrus #8 · Jun 15th, 2019 · · · Just A Little More ·

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This actually comes at a later point
The continuity is not caught up with it yet

Rune Soldier Dan

Rune Soldier Dan #9 · Mar 9th, 2020 · 1 · · Just A Little More ·

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Oooh, my.

I don't read much clop, but this felt great and it 100% started with it not being yet another bestiality fic. Maybe it's that I'm a sucker for EQG AJ, or that your descriptions of her beautiful buffness were really sexy. Maybe it's them working up the courage to share their kinks, or just having a cute SoL day together that happened to involve sex. One way or another, this was a great time, and I'm glad I found it. Thank you for writing.

Barley Citrus

Barley Citrus #10 · Mar 12th, 2020 · · · Just A Little More ·

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Thanks for taking the time to comment
I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^-^
I hope you find more of my stuff that you enjoy

Godzilla boy

Godzilla boy #11 · Mar 30th, 2020 · 1 · · Just A Little More ·

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I hope there will be another after this chapter.

Barley Citrus

Barley Citrus #12 · Mar 30th, 2020 · · · Just A Little More ·

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This is part of a larger continuity, so there will be more both before and after this story
It won't all involve these two though

Godzilla boy

Godzilla boy #13 · Mar 31st, 2020 · 1 · · Just A Little More ·

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Sunset shimmer is going to fuck applejack Some more and go streaking around the field and go skinny dipping in the pond the pleasure each other sunset shimmer loves applejack and applejack loves sunset shimmer.you know.

Barley Citrus