It was like any ordinary day in Ponyville - the sun was out, the sky was as blue as ever, and the ponies enjoyed their lives in peace... of course things would change as it appears somepony new has come to town.
At first he may look, odd for a pony, he may act strange, and yes he can be a little insensitive about a couple of things but you can't blame him... can you?
At least he's okay in Pinkie's book, sadly though he may be worse than Pinkie; I mean who doesn't love puns, can appear out of the blue by just mentioning him, does the impossible, carries items of immense power, is wise for his young age, is stronger than your average earth pony, is quiet and collected then raving mad and emotional the next... I mean he seems pretty okay... though he does have an ego problem, much worse than Rainbow's... he keeps on referring to deities and omnipresent beings...
...Oh and he keeps mentioning about him being from a faraway land not known in any maps and sometimes can act very weird if you either lie or assume things about him...
This all sounds like he makes himself to be some sort of god?... Is he a god?...
...Naaaaahhh...
Story Theme Song: Castle On The Hill
(This story takes place before the actual story begins by a month, around August 1st to August 31st and more.)
(Its not necessary to read this to understand the main story, rather this is further information about Eclipse himself and the changes he's brought to Ponyville before the show)
Milestones:
12-30-19 - 6,000+ Total Views, nice.
17-07-29 (I can't remember the actual date or what I wrote here as the real date, but I'm guessing its, 07-17-20) - 100+ Total Likes, ayeeee.
10-10-20 - 8,000+ Total Views! CELEBRATIOOOOOOON!
06-02-21 - 10,00+ Total Views, Booyah!
U have my attention. :D
That's a double negative. You basically said "I hope he decides to leave here"
Sooo... where's the bear cub?
Though it's minor, I appreciate that a side character like Mayor Mare is getting some scene time, even if it's for the sake of tracking the progress of the procedures to starting a business. It also sets the style of writing if you're bouncing around scenes to track Celestia, nice touches of dramatic irony as characters' thoughts drift to the MC. So you're seeking to have over-arching story plots that result in a web of intrigue that forces everyone to ask "Who are you really, Eclipse?".
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*claps hands and points* This guy gets it, but yeah it gets to that point a little, that and this is the starting days of Eclipse in Ponyville/Equestria, so a lot of curiosity will rise from the surrounding ponies about who Eclipse is and what kind of effect he'll have to them all. I know it can be forced but this is Ponyville, Pinkie keeps track of anypony new, and especially somepony as "odd" like Eclipse, he's different in the sense that he isn't like any normal pony - he can be distant, quiet, and a little insensitive to the point that he doesn't act like any average pony. It'll get more interesting once this story and the other one continue, but for now, indeed the question is "Who are you really, Eclipse?"
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Oops, gonna fix that real quick, nothing to see here
Heh I really like thus. It feels like a mystery novel without the bloody murder and only with a 'who is that stranger' theme. Fits with Ponyville, the town of awesome weirdoes and non-discordian chaos.
*KAFF*
I fOrGoT tO TrAcK!1!1!!!11! THIS MUST BE CORRECTED. *SCREECHING*
*ACK* GET THAT CONDESENDING ATTITUDE OUTTA HERE.
Looking good, although I have no idea what it crossover with. Track it for now.
Hold on! That was very un-Pinkie character here. I kind of expect her to send invitation to everypony - especially the one this part was for - in town before even starting the preparation.
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Pinks was in the moment, that and I needed an excuse as to why and how Fluttershy brings Eclipse to the party
Cadance: Auntie what are you doing?
Celestia: Oh, lovely niece. I just try to see if this stallion can drag my faithful student out of her room.
Cadance: But that is my job! Who is this stallion? Hand me the info and I will do the rest.
Isn't Twilight being here a typo since this is supposed to be before the other story?
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Thanks for spotting that, I also re-check for additional mistakes
oooooo whomst is this????
It has a sequel, does it finished, or not? Or is that a prequel?
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I'm writing the chapters for Month 0 in sets as some of the chapters in this story can be spoiler-material for the other story - Month 0 takes place before the main story, so I'm writing down future chapters for this per arc/seasons for the main story
This story, honestly is badly written. I have complains to almost every paragraph. Mostly just stupid or impossible things. I just hope that story will save it. Or time. But it's really low level right here. Also, pretentiousness. Or simply, fake coolness. It's just too forced. Maybe you can't actually see it yourself, but it's here. The idea is interesting, but if this just badly written wild-dream self-insert... I try to go as far as I can, we'll see. But having sequel whole not being fully published, whatever the reason, is already a bad omen.
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Uhhhh, whut? The main story is I Am (No) God, IANG: Month 0 is a prequel story, the purpose of this story is to explain several key points that later appear in the other story, and as to the writing, the story was closer to being with the old plot story, but I rehashed for personal reasons so all the chapters from this story are at least a year old and I haven't checked/edited them yet.
Now I'm not certain if you read this story first then the other one in order - not my decision which order you read them - but my focus isn't on this story right now but the main story which this follows up to. I'm not going to get mad how you feel about the story's grammar and how I written it, I mean I written this nearly two years by now, but mostly because I'm focusing on different things.
I had other people say there was several problems with the character, but I don't think you can fully put these assumptions without seeing the other story; at the time I was writing this story, I wasn't writing this character out of scratch or in the moment. I had this character for awhile and his personality and backstory is how I tried to portray in this story - both the current one and this pre-sequel. I wasn't forcefully make him look cool, this is his personality in general... and besides the purpose of this story is literally about Eclipse's first days in Equestria/Ponyville, before Twilight, so I don't know how it's a problem with it being how you say "forced" when the purpose of the story is suppose to be an origin story.
I really don't want to continue with arguing about this, I know there's some things I need to fix, but you can't assume you have things figured out immediately about the character with just one chapter. You can read the rest of the story and the other one, and you can make up what viewpoints you have afterwards with me, but please understand that I am still improvising my story-writing and grammar.
I hope you understand; if you have any further questions about the story or anything else, PM me or comment.
Fuxxing with the character creation sliders, I see? ;]
I hate these types of signs. You have no idea when the person left, so without noting either that or the hour of return, it's anywhere from a minute to half an hour (assuming they're not late).
Oh my goodness for a second there i thought that i had caught up with what was posted, oh my heart
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Don't worry, I'm planning to type more chapters after I finish the second arc on the main story, reason I don't just post the chapters for this story is because: One, spoilers to the main story, and two, busy with writing other stories.
*slinks out with tinfoil hat on*
Aliens!
*goes back under my rock*
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How bout now
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Again, I won't start writing on this story until Arc 2 ends - which it hasn't started yet - and as a heads-up, I'm currently on pause for writing, check my latest blogs to understand the current situation about IANG and all my other stories.
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Alright, it was a small joke. Cause the last guy that asked was a year ago lol
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Yeah sorry, though I do serious need to update the prequel now before it gets too behind schedule
Mountain Slayer. Thunder Lion. The Chocolate Axe. But you...? You may call him...Tiffany.
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*wheeze*
*laughs but starts crying because Netflix India doesn't have the full adventure time series or any other adventure time series*
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Alien indeed!
So he's been to at least one other alternate universe. Wonder if his destinations are intentional or guided by something else...
Celestia is catching on to the half truths quite quickly.
It's incredibly rude to to through someone's stuff, regardless of prior immediate assistance rendered. We forget sometimes how immature these young mares were...
Interesting, crystalmancy is a lost art in Equestria.
The colored text is kinda annoying, but whatever.
Is he... flirting with Fluttershy? 🙃
So he's not the only one who arrived. Good to know...
this story seems interesting
interesting story so far hope it continues
100th time re read reading this
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And now?