This story is a sequel to I Am (No) God: Month 0
The Summer Sun Celebration 1000-Year Anniversary - an event that would forever change all of Equestria, as six average mares would soon become the heroes of Equestria... Except it isn't about them; this story resolves around a stallion who was present for such an event but not only had a role in it... but just... "appeared".
Destiny is a fickle thing, many believe fate happens, things happen... Some say there's a greater force in play that does the slightest actions to change our lives... So what happens when that very power is living just down the road.
Story Theme Song/Arc 1 OP: Don't Stop
Arc 2 OP: The Shield and the Sword
Timeline: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/825197/i-am-no-god-timeline
Story Artwork: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/894389/iang-art
Character Bios: (Direct Link) https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Rug4oFgvLCnZxrghCkOe389k3ty5gXa481jWj1SkXqY/edit?usp=sharing
(Blog Link) https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/900300/iang-update-data-inanis
Story Chronology: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/1004596/iang-story-chronology
Updates: (08-24-18) Holy banana shakes, its only been seven hours and already this story got twelve likes, several people already added into their favorites, and I haven't even got to reach the third chapter... Who are you people and where is my usual readers?
(08-24-18) I GOT FEATURED! YEEEAAAHAAHAHAHA! And I whole lotta favorites, and one watch too; thank yeah all for enjoying this story!
Update (03-12-18) The new cover of IANG
(07-16-20) DAMN! WE GOT FEATURED AGAIN! Only took two bloody years and we got featured a second time!
(01-13-23) Ay yo shite! I got featured a third time after only posting my latest chapter, and the date too though could not have made it even better! HILARIOUS!
(11-24-23) Wow, I posted what is equivalent to a mini-chapter, and somehow I got featured... not going to lie, but whenever I seem to get back to posing is when I get featured... this needs some experimenting later.)
(04-11-24) Ohhh featured again, Noice.
Milestone: (25-08-18) 1000+ Total Views
(25-08-18) 50+ Total Likes - Just what the heck people, you're all making my heart beat more than usual, and I'm getting the shakes! THE SHAKES!
(02-09-18) 1000+ Views of the old original first chapter
(20-09-18) YES YEEEES YEAAAAAAS *kicks boombox to play music* 100 likes baby! *insane evil laughter*
(??-11-18) Reached 1000+ Views of the current first chapter... don't know what date, but yeah
(14?maybe-11-18) HOLY SNAP, I got to pay better attention... welp reached over 100+ likes, oh and reached 5000+ Total Views too
(25-05-19) Over 10,000+ Total Views, another record breaker!
(01-11-19) 15,000+ Total Views, let's keep wracking up that number even further!
(09-12-19) 200+ Likes, now we should reach 300.
(31-01-20) 18,000+ Total Views, WOOHOO!
(21-03-20) 20,000+ Total Views, awesome!
(16-09-20) 30,000+ Total Views, WE GETTING HIGHER AND HIGHER NOW!
(02-01-21) 35,000+ Total Views, the first milestone record for 2021! LET'S REACH 40,000!
(30-03-21) AH FREAKING YES! 40,000+ Total Views in just two months from the last milestone! GO BEYOND, 50K TOTAL VIEWS!
(29-05-21) 5,000+ Views on the first chapter, we've come a long way since then
(13-11-21) So I was a tad busy, but now I got the chance to check - WE REACHED 300+ Likes, GO BEYOND!
(03-02-22) By the deities, we've reached 50,000+ Total Views! Can we reach 75,000+ and BEYOND!?
(17-09-23) 75,000+ TOTAL VIEWS! TIME WE REACHED 100k!
Well this is certainly interesting... I'd like to see where you go with this!
Me when I meet a pretty girl
This story seems to have an interesting plot and I'm actually really intrigued about it. I really want to learn more about this Eclipse, seems like an interesting guy/pony with even more interesting powers. Can't wait to see this be expanded upon.
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I have to agree.
I like it :3 please continue :)
Intriguing... If you like this story so far I suggest this Story :0 https://www.fimfiction.net/story/350532/revisiting-lessons
what crossover mate
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Its a crossover with my own characters, from my OC universe - this particular character plays a very "omnipotent" role in it
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Wut?
Lives in a small blue building?
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...Okay, so... First chapter review...
You have completely lost me as a reader. Now don't get me wrong, I understand completely what is going on. However, I have absolutely no desire to continue reading.
You state in the story summery that this OC is an omnipotent being, now this in itself isn't a problem, there are many good stories with gods as the MC, but instead of giving your character life... you rehash the first episode. Even worse, you followed it so closely that if you submitted this to anyone outside of the fanfiction community they would accuse you of plagiarism, this includes me.
Let's move on shall we? This isn't going to be a very long review considering you basically took the pilot episode added a few lines and a character and served it to us saying it's basically good enough to get its own story.
Your OC could be replaced with a cardboard cutout and it would basically have the same effect on the story. What we, the readers, know about him is that he is friends or acquaintances with the Mane Six, and he is apparently an omnipotent being. I really hope you don't pit him against Nightmare Moon and make him lose, because that is pointless drama, and I would accuse you of not knowing what "Omnipotent" means. I don't see a "Dark" or "Horror" tag which I don't understand because you know, the whole omnipotent thing. I am somewhat reluctant to say I'm curious to what your character has in store for Nightmare Moon considering she is not omnipotent otherwise she would never lose.
I have no more time to write this review, but that is okay, considering I hit all of the important points. Good day, I will probably never read this story again.
Megabyte97 is correct in his/her analysis of the story, but I would add that your POV handling needs work.
Who saw this? If no one saw it, how do we, as readers, know it happened?
The best stories are those written from a consistent POV, and the number of POVs in a story is a direct reflection of how complex the story is going to be.
In this case, the POV characters are Twilight and Eclipse, yet we are artificially isolated from Eclipse and so him in limited encounters. Whose POV was it when Rainbow suggested Twilight would run away?
A better start would be Twilight at the Part asking if anypony knew where Eclipse was? And then each of the ponies who saw him could put in their recollection of the event and ending with them saying he's probably at his shack.
Of course, that would cut the size of this chapter down by nearly half, if not more. Which would make for a better read, though.
Umbrum?
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Good connection, but its more closely to a dark purple the home Eclipse lives in
Wasn't not isn't.
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Great start! I can't wait to see what else you got for us!
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Thanks for spotting that; I plan to re-edit any grammar or story-wise mistakes that may become counter intuitive
Good start, btw in the first chapter you wrote 12 pm aka midnight then 11,50 a couple of hours later.
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12pm is noon
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I see what you're trying to explain, and I won't argue about your points, everyone has their say on what they think of something. The reason why this looks so similar to the first episode is actually explained on the story; in the brackets that written under the story's summary, the first and second season of the show will have the chapters very similar that'll happen in the show - with the inclusion that Eclipse is there in some fashion - the reason why he isn't doing much right now actually pertains to important facts about him.
One is that he is indeed an omnipotent entity, but not the omnipotent entity of this world; he does have his powers but because he doesn't understand this world enough, he's keeping a low-profile and watching things from the sidelines to better understand things - imagine travelling somewhere you're unfamiliar with so you study the area, what kind of people live there, and see the best approach to do things. Eclipse from what I can say so not to bring spoilers, is seeing what kind of potential the Mane 6 and the beings of this world have.
The second reason is actually not revealed yet; the first and second chapter mentions Eclipse isn't from Equestria so it shows he is new to Equestrian customs, I already planned writing an origin story about Eclipse first arriving in Ponyville a month before Twilight arrives to Ponyville and NIghtmare Moon/Luna's return.
And another thing - while this is spoilers, I'll keep this as minimal as possible - his personality is that he's "lifeless", "empty" which is why he feels like your average background character; he's trying to make his appearance as insignificant to the other characters as possible. I already foreshadowed several strange things about and around him from just these two episodes alone - his "pet" bear cub, him almost knowing about Nightmare Moon's coming before even Twilight, and everything else about him.
And while the idea of hearing a character being omnipotent means they're either egotistical evil, all-powerful all-knowing, this... isn't like your average omnipotent entity. Eclipse Light -
the name he goes by in Equestria- is a very seclusive character, in more ways then one, so it doesn't mean he needs to be this Deus Ex Machina character, he has flaws like anyone, and past failures and guilt that weigh heavily on him, and just because he does have the power annilliate any evil in Equestria with a single glance doesn't mean he'll do it. I can't say the real reason he's in Equestria, again spoilers, but let's say he will do what he can to guide the Mane 6 from the shadows, but similarly stay out of the way, but near the S2 finale... things won't be so calm anymore.This is as far I can say, anymore and I might over-speak the bounds of spoiler territory; I am fine that you'll stop reading, I'm glad to gain some criticism once in awhile. Whether I use it to better improve the story enough depends, but thank you for your review and your thoughts.
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Yeah I'm still learning about POV, but to put your thoughts at ease, the POV is anyone and at the same nobody; I direct which needs to be addressed in the story and anything else I feel should be added to make the chapter interesting not straight forward and bland. All you need to know is the POV isn't first-person or second-person perspectives, third-person perspective more like it.
As for tags that megabyte97 mentioned, that'll evolve as the story progresses as I just started, and I said the first twenty or so chapters are a little E-rated so there's only cartoonish violence and not actual violence. I may add the dark tag for when things get serious - this is a really old project that I didn't had time to work on, you have no idea how many chapters I already pre-planned to make in the future... and I'm only on number three still!
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Ohhhhhh... You're one of those people...
You know what Omnipotent means... but you do not truly understand what it means for a character to be omnipotent. You do not have the right mind set to write a omnipotent being. Let me explain:
You are trying to write a character who has a mortal mind set... this is your problem. A problem that is so basic that it is truly hard to explain.
You state that your omnipotent OC has flaws... This is a problem as a true omnipotent being does not have flaws, they are THE GARY SUE of the story. If an omnipotent being has regrets they can turn back time and redo whatever made them have regrets. An omnipotent being can do ANYTHING! and that is where so many writers go wrong.
For your OC to not do anything, it is basically your character watching a TV show they direct, write the lines for and do the animations for. They litterally direct everything.
I have to go to work, I'll continue this later.
I think they’re trying to tell us something, but I just can’t decipher whatever they’re trying to say!
But that ending tho
Look up the youtuber pamtri. NOW. I mean, unless that is where you got this from.
Do I really need to say anything?
Edit: Whoops! Accidentally made a new comment!
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Okay, maybe I should be more specific about things; I planned making this story like months on months ago and while I only written a few chapters, and a small portion of the origin story so far, this OC character I had for years, since my first story and before I made an account on this site so I built a lot of hidden character development and personality that I would say is "unique" to him.
I looked up all three omnis' (Omnipresence, Omnipotence, Omniscience) and did further research about what makes a Deus Ex Machina character a, Deus Ex Machina character for years. What I'm conveying in both the story and this character is that he has all of this, but while having the mental capacity of any all-powerful deity, at the same time he's just like any young teenage boy; he acts like this due to how I originally built him as a character - again he's from my OC universe, but its not necessary to understand what goes on there to read all my stories, I add something from my own creations, give them whatever reason they end up there, and roll with it.
This story however is one of the few stories I planned LONG TIME AGO. Yes he can warp anything he wants in a whim like any Gary Sue or even beyond, but I'm not trying to build up some cheesy, clique - "I AM ALL-POWERFUL AND GODLY I CAN DO WHATEVER I WANT BECAUSE I AM GOD AND BLAH BLAH BLAH!" - the character I building up to, and wanting to show in this story is something close to ground but slowly building up to even grander heights.
I mean... its in the story title; "I Am (No) God", he doesn't want to be seen as one, even if in his world or any world he is. I mean while in the origin story his reasons for coming to Equestria are just a stepping stone, he like anyone begins to remember what is like to just live a life where you aren't praised as some higher entity, or hunted down for horrible mistakes and atrocities, or even to be taken down your pedestal so someone else can reshape everything you built in their own image. Another name I give the character of the story - and this is outside the story actually and close to himself as a character - "The One Who Rules On The Empty Throne"... speaks volume don't it?
...But this is just my character and I can't force it down everyone and say "he's better, yours suck" kind of attitude, where's the fun in getting some criticism. I mean sure it looks like I'm not writing him properly and I'm probably am writing him improperly and he's not seen as a Gary Sue, but this is just the beginning, and there's so much more to add to get things rolling, right?
I'm hoping you read this and respond some time, but take your time, I'll wait; sure he has barely any life in him as a character or isn't seen yet to being omnipresent, but then again... He could be just fooling you all. *grins maliciously*
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Okay I need to say this, but all your comments have been making me smile and laugh in joy! Its people like you who know how to react to something, in the best way possible
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EEEEEEE! Author spoke to us. Yes... we love Author. We wish Author to love us. Love us, Author. Give us your blessed atte-...
I’ve taken this way too far.
Thanks for the compliment!
Also, I do need to know: did you get that bone snapping thing from pamtri? ‘Cause his videos are creepy as *YEET* and have that bone snapping thing in them.
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Nah, just something I added as something Eclipse would do
*pat* *pat*... *patpatpatpatpatpatpatpatpatpatpatpatpat* *SMACK* Oh, Spike. Spike, Spike, Spike... Poor, naive little Spike.
YER AN IMBICILE.
Obviously, you must teach them to fear you. Here, I’ll help. Start off by glaring and showing dem chompahs, ponies are prey, and have this deep-ingrained fear of predators, which is what you are. You probably didn’t know. One of three fear responses will happen, however they will most likely not fight. They will most likely freeze or flee. At this point, if they have not frozen or ran off like the scared little WUSSIES THEY ARE... they’ll have either come to fight or are just raising their eyebrow. If they fight, scorch’em, they’ll run off. If they raised an eyebrow, run, you’ve just growled at The Oncoming Storm. You are now officially a demon. Don’t bother hiding, he/she’ll find you. Just run, and pray that they’ve not gone into a blue box.
hehehehe... just ask Pinkie, She’ll know... She’ll know. hehehehehehehahahahahahAHAHAHAHAHAH
Twilight, darling, answer me honestly:
ARE YOU ACTUALLY FIVE?
Etiquette, you disgusting pig!
Omnipotence, everyone.
HMMM YES I WONDER WHY
*honks nose* That’s Eclipse!
TL;DR GO COMIT DIE
Actual advice here: You’re allowed to put a question mark there. The rule is no periods.
That means “ ‘Spike, what are you doing?’ said Twilight.” is perfectly okay.
‘Final last ditch’ implies that they’ve last-ditch’d before, but you can’t last ditch more than once, I don’t think.
Try “I’ve been there; once was [more than] enough”
* [more than] is optional, well... extra optional. Anything in these types of brackets are for me.
Maybe “from his weight, bending and seemingly could break from the pressure”
Or “from his weight, bending and seeming to break from the pressure”
“Seeming like they could break from the pressure”
Maybe you like it, or could think of something better.
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It should also be "asked Twilight" instead of said.
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*record stops* rrrrfrrfrrr- HOW DID I MISS THAT?! IT SLIPPED THROUGH THE CRACKS. I am no longer worthy of the title editor-in-training (not that I ever was).
Thanks for catching that.
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No prob bob! :)
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I nearly died laughing at the Omnipotence apart; hilarious!
9132930
Thanks for the helpful advice, any way I can better improve the chapters is always needed
9132578
...let's go over your comment.
Okay... First off, "HOLY SHIT, IT'S THE ANGST GOD, RUN AWAY BEFORE HE CURSES YOU WITH 'THE EMO'!!!!!" Second, was your OC ever mortal? that is the only way that this:
makes sense...
Next point...
An omnipotent being does not make mistakes, they can commit atrocities, but never mistakes considering they can simply erase or undo whatever they did. An omnipotent being can also never be hunted down unless they allow it. If an omnipotent being never wants to be found they will not be found. Simple as that.
The picture you're painting me is that your character isn't omnipotent, he is simply very powerful.
Next point...
That title actually doesn't say anything about your character, I could think of five different ways to interpret that title and I haven't seen nearly enough of your character to make any kind of educated guess on why he has that title.
The problem, is that the moment you place a omnipotent being in a story... it becomes exactly that, even if you don't want to acknowledge it. If anyone learns he is an omnipotent being, then they will start asking questions, and the answers aren't nice in the slightest.
When your entire life is possible because a being likes your character, or your body, and once they get tired of it they could simply discard you like an unwanted toy and you wouldn't be able to do anything about it? When you realize you are nothing more than a puppet with the omnipotent being pulling your strings, deciding your fate, and nothing you do will ever get you away from his control?
This is why I don't understand the lack of a "dark" tag on your story. This is also why I feel as though your character is simply very powerful similar to Discord instead of omnipotent.
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That reminds me, will you eventually explain how he can handle his omnipotence without his brain violently imploding? Was he a god before he came here, and that’s the whole-reason-that-explains-everything-shut-up? Or is there something different? Because, a mortal brain cannot handle being omnipotent, knowing when anything and everything will/has/is happen(ing)(ed) at the exact moment it is/will/has happen(ing)(ed)? Does he retain his immortal brain (if he even was a god)? How?
Sorry if this confuses you or if you think it’ll be giving too many spoilers to answer or if you just haven’t planned that far yet. I’ve confused myself with this so if you don’t want to answer then
.
Wonder if Celestia would recognize this bear cub? Has she met Harry already?
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To megabyte97; I kind of chuckled at the angst-god thing, but both you and flutterboot give some good questions and pointers about the story's character. I could just continue writing and let you see how things play out, but to give a better written description about "Eclipse" and how omnipotence plays a strong role with him, I'll start with this - indeed he can avoid being chased down and doesn't have any problems facing against other entities that dare question him, and as for the whole "anyone makes mistakes part" I meant that in another entity's perspective, to him it doesn't matter if it seemed wrong because he can just decide to reverse it all, but when he leaves stragglers - purposely or un-purposely - from worlds he decimated or out-right 'wiped from existence' then he starts to gain a pretty hateful gang of various characters looking to wrung his neck for different reasons.
He wasn't always omnipotent, but through past events he became what he is, and if there was a chance he can step down from this role he could... but sadly he can't. Yes, I said I never want to be seen as omnipotent and yes all omnipotent will and still need to be looked this way... let's just that's how things in the story are being played out right now, I mean you the readers know he ain't some earth pony that looks odd, but the characters don't so I'm writing like everyone who encounters him are just ignorant into what is literally an all-powerful deity, and that the atmosphere of story is all sunshine and rainbow before dropping it down like a steep rollercoaster of twists and turns.
Another thing I can better explain why Eclipse isn't seen as all-powerful is that I'm writing story like this - imagine each season of the show (not every season, there will be a finale at some point that connects with the show) is a stage that both the characters and world are at; S1 is the Bliss Stage where everyone is living their lives as they normally would any other day, then there's an Ignorance Stage, Realization, Doubt, and finally Acceptance, but that's the best I can say without entering spoiler territory.
I also mentioned vividly that he's from an "OC Universe", so this isn't just a crossover with Equestria and some other entity, but rather Equestria, that entity, and the world he comes from/rules over. This isn't spoilers rather important details about the character so there's nothing to worry about me ruining the plot of the story - trust me that's the last thing I want to do. Eclipse Light - that's the name I'm going with for now - in his own world, is a omnipotent entity ruling over a vast world full of a unique energy that an average mortal would literally be torn asunder and vanished from existence permanently; if A, weren't a rare few who have abilities allow to safely use and gain access to this world; B, have a strong "Aura" or life-force (this doesn't meant they have to be immortal, it just means their at a point that you can compare them to heroic figures that do the impossible); or C, are themselves deities or omnipotent entities.
This expanse he rules over I'm dubbing The Void (this is unrelated to anything else called "The Void" and is pure luck that I picked a name that I DIDN'T... know was being quite commonly used at the time); a sort of barrier between realms (aka universes, aka multiverses) that is also used to traverse other worlds with the right know-how and power. Safely travelling between worlds means the less chance of you ending up in the actual Void, but if you do however end up in it then you either are unlucky or lucky depending on that entity's powers - let's say someone like Celestia, the Mane 6 (after they sacrifice the elements) or other characters like Goku, Superman, or even Saitama can traverse it safely, but anyone considered below then they'd disperse particle by particle until every ounce of their existence, whether its someone that knows them personally or heard of them to literal physical evidence of them would vanish and while this sounds a bit overpowered, their is a way to reverse but its really difficult to return someone from the Void's ever consumption of what's considered "weak-worlds". The Void on itself is a force of nature so destroying it would mean destroying all worlds so unless your Thanos, you don't want to do that; his powers are like any omnipotent with a few things added - because the Void is like a literal highway across various multiverses, he has access to these worlds whether they're blocked by something or not; there's no correct way to properly measure his power as The Void is a bottomless well of power that he can control and he can use, and his signature ability is to gift a piece of himself to others, this however can have two things happen - spoilers though so I can't say - but one of these things is that those with a piece of himself are the only entities that can gain access to a portion of the Void's power and can fight him on equal footing.
I'd like to continue on what else to write, but I think that's all I can write - this character while a few of my older ones is still incomplete as there is still holes I need patch about him - so for now I'll continue write chapters until I reach a point to start explaining things. I also will release the origin story that answer some questions about him about why he's in Equestria and other things.
Hon hon hon... a neew chaptere, leyt us see! (continuing as I read!)
Did you see it? *ILLUMINATI INTENSIFIES*
Of course, he’s just saying this for the sake of the readers! [...what? Stop looking at me like that!]
Sake of the readers! SAKE OF THE READERS!
Now, for the pilot episode of “Eclipse Always Knows What to Say!”
*GASP* AAAAAWWWWWWWWWWW su cyoot!
Also, isn’t this a thing that hypnotists do? *gasp!* ECPLIPSE IS BRAINWASHING THE MANE 6 *CONFIRMED*
Oh my. I have had a story idea somewhat similar to this for the past 4 years or so, and even a similar concept for a character (though the details between the two are drastically different).
I have only read the first chapter, and I agree with megabyte97 that it doesn't really grab and hold my interest. I skipped over about half of the chapter because it was just episode 1 copy-paste filler, and instead tried to focus on your character and the lore you've built around him. He is the most interesting thing in the entire chapter, and even that kind of falls flat. I get what you're trying to go for, but the way you're presenting it isn't doing so in an engaging and interesting way.
And, I'm just going to get this out of the way since it might come off as a bit mean, this is probably one of the most pretentious stories I've read in a long while. Eclipse Light, though messily being given vices to avoid the "Gary Stu" classification, instead falls into something of an edgy fan character. I don't mean the idea is, I mean what you've done with it is. Having him be this character who is very friendly with everyone else doesn't give us a sense of his outlandish nature. It instead feels like he's just forced to be friends with them because it's cool to have your OC be that, whether or not you even intended for that to happen. The beginning is Ayn Rand levels of pretentious, rather than being epic and foreshadowing. I assume that's what you were going for. Oh, and that random name drop while he was helping out the bird was really confusing and irritating. Maybe it's because I don't know enough about the character to truly be invested in him or that I just don't understand at all, but this really doesn't feel like a good character.
Oh, and the grammar. For the most part, the grammar's pretty solid throughout, but there were still quite a few hiccups. Really, the worst example of a grammatical error in the first chapter was "there were also a large storage building," which is just a tense error. Overall, I can relate to your idea of having an OC be inserted into canon lore, but really try to make him feel more like a good, well-rounded character rather than an edgy OC (again, intended or not). I don't know if you've improved these errors in later chapters, but I hope you have, and I don't believe I have enough investment or motivation to continue. Best of luck, never stop writing.
So he's visiting Zecora?
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Thanks for your input; yeah I need to re-edit a few things. As for the relationships with the girls, he's more of somepony the girls know while out of the five (not including Twilight because he just met her) Fluttershy and Eclipse have a true friendship, while Eclipse knows them through Fluttershy. I'm planning on making an origin story that shows Eclipse coming to Ponyville a month before the events of Nightmare Moon return, but yeah I see how he can be an edge lord, but he's actually... well emotionless is what I'm portraying him - again its better detailed in the origin story - so while I can understand how a lot of people are going to be confused, but for now the thing everyone needs to understand is that I'm giving as little information about Eclipse and only showing the barest of clues for everyone to compile, but after the S1 chapters are through is when the origin story comes out then things will make some sense for a small part.
It's alright if you don't continue to read, I plan to recheck and fix any problems for the first three chapters, but thanks for bringing some errors I missed.
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*pulls out a radio* Jeffson... get the knock-out gas, we got a smart one
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*runs away while screaming "Applejack is best pony"*
hehehehehehehehehe... This chapter was very enjoyable. (Don’t feel like being silly right now though*, maybe when it’s not midnight)
*not sorry
I think this is better than the original one. The events were slightly diverted from the canon - like Twilight did reserch on stranger's cutie mask instead of Nightmare Moon. And now this strange pony already went ahead of her to the Everfree Forest. Wonder if he would encounter the Mare on the Moon first?
So his cutiemark looks something like that ? http://www.hyperflight.com/images/hyperstar_two-pentacles.gif (without circles)
Eclipse light sounds like a badass now!
No, smart.
Hmm...
...
I can’t seem to find anything to joke about, this chapter was super duper serious. But
DAMN
THIS NEW ECLIPSE IS AWESOME. I mean, the other Eclipse was great, but this one is Great,
CAPITAL G!