"Dear Princess Celestia,
It's been a long time since i last saw you. Perhaps you could tell me why you locked me up?"
and then, Celestia visits.
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now with a reading by Sockless/TheBenBlast: Trapped Reading
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just a casual dark/horror/au writer who happens to like ponies. i also do the occasional light fic.
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Very well written, but I’m a bit confused as to Celestia’s motives.
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in this particular alternate universe, i planned for Celestia to have encountered some sort of dark force in the past, and the thing is choosing now to unload all of it's darkness on her, in the process making Twilight lose her consciousness. i'm not going to tell exactly what she did to Twilight, because that would defeat the purpose of the mystery end.
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So it was left ambiguous?
(in reply to FanficReader920 cause i pressed the wrong reply button by accident
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yup.
I'm confused . What happend at the end ? What did she do ?
. . . I want more . . .
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if this gets enough likes/faves/whatever the positive reaction for this site is (50-60), then i'll make a sequel involving Celestia.
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Good luck with that. Some stories are lucky to get fifty likes.
Well done. Life seldom presents unambiguous and complete answers and I'm glad there are still some writers who can leave the reader thinking.
Twilight goes to the darkside, and Celestia sent her to Tartarus before she could succumb to it is all I got from this. And I absolutely hate when authors take the chickens way out of not explaining what happened by calling it a mystery ending.
As I call it. Faved. But only just.
This just made no sense. I have to leave a downvote.
Spacegirlss12, I really like your style of writing. You leave the reader not only pondering the what, the how, and the why, leaving us to want so much more of the backstory. Well done, so hope you provide a prequel that continues with your great style of intrigue.
Completly torn.
On one hand obviously Celestia is just as or more "corrupt" then Twilight, and Luna knows it but doesnt give a damn since she too is probably corrupt. But that leaves the question why they even locked up Twilight...
On othe other hand its a good short mystery.
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And as a result it ruined a decent concept because you couldn't be bothered to write a decent end.
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It's more that with years and years of life, the weight of their life weigh's down. Never forgetting, yet always retaining.
Madness seeps into their mind corrupting them eventually taking them over, but either
1. Through perseverance and will these old beings learn to live with their madness balancing their light with their dark until a NightmareMoon happens
or
2. Eventually by living along side their madness does one just goes back to being sane. Learning that being sane or insane are not so different the same that dark and light are not so different
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But if you give in and live along your maddness you end up killing everyone around you like Twilight wants to do and would do if she was given the chance.
NMM was Luna giving in to her darkness/madness because of her anger and jelaousy .
There is a difference between light and dark, sane and madness. If there wasnt one then it would all be the same.
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thats kinda the reason Celestia locked her up
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Thats my point i mean, the 2nd option of "just wait it out" isnt really an option, especially when you deal with powerful crazy alicorns that can black whole landscapes into nothing.
This isn't a "mystery" ending. This is a "what the $%&# just happened" ending. And that tone was confused, not horrified
The premise was good, but that's about it. We need more of Twilight's thoughts. We need more argument between them. We need SOMETHING of Celestia's motivations, some hint at her current state. A mystery isn't supposed to be a vague, no idea what's going on type of thing; leave that to the eldritch. A mystery is supposed to give you enough clues for you to figure out what's going on, or at least get a vague idea. This? This isn't a mystery ending.
This is crap.
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I want to like that post two more times.
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Definitely would like to read this with more detail. This is kinda like the exciting movie trailer!
Any plans on doing more with it? Definitely holds promise! ^^
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If I do, it'll be after I finish the Goddess of Winter and the prequel describing Chrysalis' reform.
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Awesome possum! I'm definitely gonna check your other stories out!