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just a casual dark/horror/au writer who happens to like ponies. i also do the occasional light fic.

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a mare living Ponyville named Buttercup Rose has a horrible secret; something she has never told anypony, not even her own sister; that secret calls herself Scarlet Knife.
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Suicide tag for the last two chapters.
I'll try to get a new chapter out every week, but for now, have the first two chapters on me! :twilightsmile:
oh, and warnings below for anyone who doesn't want to read about a psychotic killer.
warnings: torture scenes, suicide
inspired by the Killerrarityverse, Cupcakes, and some of my own ideas.
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Congratulations! If you're here, then that means you found one of my really old fics from when I was still just starting out as a writer! This is a good story (for my skill level at the time that I wrote this), but was written a whole three years ago, and I've since made a much better rewrite of it.
Go read it below!
Fractured Mind
Go on. Go read it!

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 6 )

CRAAAAAWWLIIING INNNN MY SKIIIIN!

I rate this four stabs out of five stabs :ajsmug:

9497981
Thank you! Is there anything you would suggest I do?

9498672
The story has a fantastic structure, and describes situations very well, however, I feel as though some of the dialogue doesn't have much meaning. What I mean by this is the 'build up', for example, when Buttercup decided to go a see Twilight, she immediately, after a few sentiences started to yell, and stormed out. In my opinion, that should have required more mental debate, as she was already focused on telling her.

9499220
Oh, okay. I'll take your advice and edit that chapter. (By the way, that was Lavender's idea. Not Buttercup's.)

9499220
Heyo! I just thought you might like to know I've made a rewrite of this fic that better addresses the issues you told me about.
Fractured Mind
Sorry for this being so late, but this is the moment I finally remembered to post things here about the other version.

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