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fallen starr


How can I be home and still feel out of place.

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Sweetie Belle has a new spell she wants to try out with her friends. Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon are bored and follow Filthy Rich to Sweet Apple Acres. When Sweetie Belle's spell goes awry, Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara pay the price. For them, it seems a fate worse than death.

They have switched bodies.

Now they have to navigate each other's world while working with their enemy to find a solution.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 11 )

Sounds interesting...

It’s a good start. All more on where you take it from here, hope you continue on.

Huk

Interesting, gonna track…

But, you may want to make it more clear who is talking when – after the spell misfired, the monologue was a little confusing for a moment.

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Thank you!

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True, this is purely set up, but I hope you like where I take it.

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If you mean the part where I've put put 'I' in quotes, that was to show it was Scoots body and her denial of the fact that she was no longer in it. I can't think of a better way to do it, but if you can, I'm willing to listen!

Sounds good a bit rush reading to me when reading it slowly but overall looks good!

interesting start looks li ke alot of hi jinks coming up

Huk

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Sorry for the late response - after rereading this, I take back what I said earlier - I think it’s okay now… Must have been sleepy when I read it for the first time.

School was absolutely, finally, blessedly over. I chanced a glance back at the screaming fillies in my wagon as we raced through the streets of Ponyville. The weekend was ours. We had a mission. Sweetie Belle had been reading (nerd!) a spell book and found something she really wanted to show us.

I believe the nerd should be egghead

This sounds good actually


I was reading the um recap kinda

And would this count as Silver X Scootaloo shipping

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Eh, I'm not really fond of the term from anyone but Rainbow Dash

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Thank you! Although this is very much 100% not a shipping story.

8753899
Oh ok I can't wait to read it regardless

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