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GeodesicDragon


I am a Scotsman who writes stories, not all of which are of the self-insert variety; I also have a Let's Play channel. :twilightsmile:

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The Cutie Mark Crusaders have put up with the constant bullying from Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon for long enough. One afternoon after school, the girls are waiting to be picked up when the two prissy fillies once again start giving them grief.

But when their pickup arrives, he also brings some words of wisdom... showing Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon that they aren't as high and mighty as they think.

AUTHOR'S NOTES

Part of the Geoverse.

This is just a little idea (little being the key word) I came up with during an unexpected hiatus I took. As soon as I was able, I put fingers to keyboard and wrote the story.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 11 )

"You bet!" Apple Bloom chirped, "Ah don't want AJ or mah new brother or sister gettin' hurt!"

Umm... Apple Bloom? You do realize that technically you'd be the incoming foal's aunt, right? :facehoof:

Oh iloved this I hate Diamond and Silver they are 2 of the most stuck up people in existance. Heck Blueblood has the excuse of being royalty what do these 2 got?

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Ahhh, damnit. I totally messed up there.

Fixed!

"My point is this." he said smugly, "We're friends with royalty, and you're not. So... who's better than who now, hmm?"

I'd say... nopony? But then, I'm not friends with royalty.

Also: I'm not being serious. I don't think he meant what he said!

The ending wasn't rushed, just expressed in a few well written compound and complex sentences.
Great work! can't wait to see what is next in the Geoverse!

We love it!
Spoiled ponies shalt be put in their place!
Well done hoof servant,
We hath favourited thy scrolls.

I love both versions. Leave both versions up. XD

This is better, I think. The last one was sorta mean- this here is much more palatable. At least I don't feel like I have to smack the OC in the mouth any more!

Its good. While yes I somewhat agree that you do use them a lot, this fits a bit better. :twilightsmile: Good work!

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