Wandering Sunrise remembers Equestria as it once was: a land of harmony, broken by strife. She was sealed in a Stable-Tec stasis pod the day the Megaspells hit... and she wakes up in a pool of water, surrounded by strangers.
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Is it just me or does Fallout Equestria have a history of having long chapters? And I'm not talking about 9000 word chapters. I mean the chapters that are 20,000 words or more!
Awesome story, by the way.
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There is a history. But also like, you should come to these expecting to write a novel; not a short story / novella.
If you enjoyed make sure to leave an upvote; keep us on that feature bar. Also nice to see someone new in the comments, I like you guys. Join me on discord sometime.
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That's true. Makes me want to see these stories published.
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This is the one I take true pleasure in doing. The others are fun, but this one, this one is the one I know I can just cut lose and let lose; not to mention we actually play it as a tabletop RPG on wednesday. That part I stream.
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Yes, Fallout Equestria fics often get long chapters, like the original story had even had one that was longer than 50k and i think it's because of the very descriptive type of narraion used. It's to mimmick the thought process of a perfectly immersed fallout player.
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Looking good Fi, one alteration to suggest
**Hoof**
I love this fic.
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yays!
Tell your friends, join me on discord, and slap the upvote so hard!
Quick Stitch has orange magic that matches his eyes, kind of a like apricot, not yellow.
Best section of the chapter:
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Piston still has his Cutie Mark, altruth it could be simlar to a dashite branding as it's a grey winged wrench.
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That did literally happen.
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will fix.
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Why you do dis!?
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I didn't chose the Carl life.
The Carl life chose me.
I supposed to be named Oscar.
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That is entire fair.
Must have More! More I say!
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I thought dragons played the long game?
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and yes, we can get greedy
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Yes it is based on a table top game, the GM doesnt hate us but he is really having to work hard on trying to kill us, problem is he is working against players which are not stupid in combat, the least experienced I think is myself with about 2 years tabletop experience in 4 distinct systems, on top of that 2 of the players have significant GM experience of their own in the past. Combine that with a willingness to abuse the systems in the game to get the most from our gear and moon is having a really hard time of killing any of us which is causing problems because we have a lot of people waiting to join the game and cant until a current party member leaves the table or is killed.
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Soon™
Just to let you know that I have already up voted this story and it flat out will not let me do it again...(poop! ) So maybe our wonderful young heroine has learned not to bellyflop on things that go boom! Now if you could read that recipe book! Keep up the good work!
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You think she won't? Yeah no. She is gonna jump in front of bullets still.
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You're always greedy.
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Just rattling your cage. (A little giggle placed here) What I did learn from two tours in Iraq.... Body Armor, Body Armor, Body Armor...... did I mention.. Body Armor! Have fun!
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Next chapter, you're gonna see the armor! The super armor!
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and yes, we can get greedy
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But the story is soooooooooo good! like reading a good wine or meal.
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Finally jking good work like normal
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I know you are but you don't understand, we're gonna actually get Sunrise's custom armored look now.
I feel more folks should read the story, hit the like button and comment. It is IMHO (not that humble really) a very good story.
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Patience!
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You should watch the Wednesday night FOE game this is all based off of! the hilarity!
That withdrawl sure isn't doing her temper any favours. She's raging all over the place.
I Really like how nyota cares for Sunrise and the fanart Looks Very Good!
Still, her Confusion about a c cut confuses me too.
So Sunrise has supposedly had a child? Obviously she’s at least in her hundreds, but with the stasis pod she looks no older than 16. That’s a real mindfuck. She had to have been part of some cruel experiment that those vaults are so notorious for hosting.
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Seems you are on the right track, mostly.
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Why does it confuse you?
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Very astute of you.
End of act II. I assume the rest of the story takes place in act III. I don't think we're going to make a shorter act III and restart back to act I, that wouldn't fit in a book. There is still a ton to discover. I'm just confused on how you are planning to pull this off.
The story really picked up here. We had a private conversation with Pinkie, finally, that was long overdue. A lot was revealed, such as Wandering being on her 27th life. I was suspecting her dying, but not in this quantity, maybe 6 to 8 at max. She must be not that good at this wasteland stuff.
Everyone in the comments acts as her body has been one and the same, morphed somehow over time to look different. I believe that this is just some another body that they had at her old stable. She died somewhere in the wasteland, her memories were transferred to the next carcass, that's it. Maybe this one happened to had a rough life and included a C-section pre-installed. The more I read the comments, the more I get the impression that this isn't the case, that this is her oryginal body, somehow, after so many deaths. Though, it was mentioned here that the Enclave has killed her thrice in the same body. Clones? Weird regeneration? The question is 'how does she keep getting fresh bodies'? If in this life she has jumped on a grenade, you can't convince me that every single time she died that her body was recoverable, not with this high of a number.
You know, this story is very good under a layer of some smaller stuff that keeps poking me the wrong way. The kind of stuff like sentence structuring, pointing out the obvious, confusing dialogue and out-of-the-blue actions. I try my best to ignore the flaws and get the experience hidden within. Wandering and Nyota are great, their relationship is so well done. They need to have a conversation on where they want to go with it.
I don't have anything yet on the black box. Is it Pinkie, a transmitter or some drug dispenser? That's all I got so far. How Corners has managed to get one of those. The box god has been made an important topic, where before it was dismissable.
Wandering is almost killing herself with all the yelling. Withdrawal is hitting her hard. Med-X and the Coffee.
200k words and I barely feel like we've done anything. A few small locations, some minor fights. There is the Enclave, at least, but they don't feel like a looming danger. We've entered act III and I don't feel like anything has been accomplished yet. Status quo didn't move besides Buddy dying, at least it feels so. The combat, that I have praised, has been misidcule. It wouldn't be that bad if sitting in locations didn't drag on. Not this one, though, at least not yet.
I'm very mixed on the story as a whole. Great underneath a layer of grit that you need to chew through to get to the good stuff.
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You'll find that we have established the world and the first "Adventure" The First Book, is a complete Heroes' Journey.
1. Starts out in a place they are unfamiliar with
2. Tries to apply their knowledge and morals to the situation
3. Finds that doesn't work
4. Finds a hard truth that spirals them downward
5. Readdresses the situation with a new Truth and Understanding
6. Realizes something about themselves
7. Returns to where they started a changed person
Each of the 3 books does this. Building upon the blocks of the last.