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Would you mind highlighting the mistakes so I can get them fixed?

Still don't know where you got Corners from, but I figured it was just something Sunrise was like "... fuck it, can't just keep calling her Pone of the Cube of Board Cards. Corners it is!"

But it works.

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None of us do! We just started calling her Corners! So now she is stuck with that name as a nickname.

I like how you are slowly revealing your perks and traits

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It seemed to fit at least in Sunrise's mind.

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It has been done in the other stories from Horizon and the Original, I thought it fit.

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yeah, definately

Daww..... Buddy made a friend.

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Yes he did :)

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Well he'll come across as cool and SHADOW THE EDGEHOGY.

"And any pony have heavy bandages?” I heard Nyota's voice"
Should it be, "Does anypony have any heavy bandages?" since you are replacing anyone with anypony.
Overall its a readable chapter with good plot development on Sunrise, however she has the same painful reading style that Little Pip does, the naviety involved is hard to stomach for me.

But to say it all, its a good fanfic to read, there are no gaping holes or bad writing involved other than the occasional spelling mistake which we figure out quickly while im in the USA with you. Im just saying that in all honesty, I find fallout equestria to be extremely cringy and edgy and i am not a fan of it

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Note to self, My other half isn't interested in 80% of the things I do, she just supports.
And well they are Stable-Dwellers what did you expect? Fresh out of the Stable Murder Hobo from Fallout 4?

I found one word wrong sent you a PM on discord about it. I do like how the friendship between Sunrise and Buddy started to show up in the story even before what will happen.

Mmhm, good time so far-OHHH BOY! CHARACTER DEVELLOPMENT! Also, aint the sentry bot a littttlllee much for the second game? Actually you know what? After the games ive played...this is easy to survive!

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The GM revealed later he wanted to prove the lethality and unforgiving nature of the wasteland; he actually was aiming for this to be a fleeing scene with someone dying in the incoming fire.
Instead, Emergency BUTTON!

Keep going next chapter is coming up now.

Fallout in of itself is lethal and everything around it that did survived, plus Mother Nature is unforgiving anyway if not in-check, expectantly within the "Magical Realm" of My Little Pony.

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Imagine if we take Fallout and just turn mutation to 13 then cover it in pastel paint.

Typo Time!
the left was illuminated bye torches while the right

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These are actually getting cute, keep it up.

Poor corners:(

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She just needs somepony to care ;)

Ha, well written and quite the chapter.

Well that was exciting to read! the getting out, taking that one stallion until he betrayed them knowing it would likely end him, raiders are crazy!

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Yay!

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Welcome to raiders! It could always be worse.

Well we have a Pinkie Pie 2.0 now, because, Pinkie Sense. Makes for a helpful perk though when someone tries to surprise you.

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It's not a perk through; it's a negative trait and you'll find out why!

Very Good idea with the tail, will come in Handy for Sure. So many questions, but they will be anwsered in Time.

Again, so much to unpack in this chapter and all of it interesting and fun!
I love the tail, both the usefulness of it and the humor, '“Thank you,” I said before realizing I was thanking my own tail.' That's inspired and different. I like different. Also, the clever ways you got the team to go from suspecting each other to trusting and working together, very nice. There was a lovely bit of sugary sweetness you sprinkled into that moment with Buddy and Sunrise that I can't help hoping will be developed.
Great chapter, all good things,
Scara.

The box opened up a pair of holes on the sides and two single-shot shotguns popped out and fired.

Behold the glorious murder box in all iits might!

I’m glad that every RP group has a guy or gal, who’s really into making weird and crazy characters. The games wouldn’t be half as fun without them .

Corners is a very interesting character. Either she’s supposed to be a goofy character with a gimmick or there’s a really tragic backstory behind her box worshipping.

Then there’s her strange appearance. At first I thought that she could be a Blank who gained sentience, but she’s not an albino. She can feel pain and bleeds, so not a robot either. All that makes me really curious about her.

Oh and she seems to have a real talent for getting her leg injured.

It was a unicorn pony clad in silver power-armor, exploding from the inside-out. All emblazoned upon my flanks.

That’s a weird Cutie Mark. Is her Special Talent making Ponies in Power Armors explode? Feels a bit to OCish for my taste. I prefer Cutie Marks that are closer to the ones in the show and aren’t implying that you’re special talent is murdering ponies.

“Oh, hi! We’re lost down here and wanted to know if you knew the way out—or are you lost too?” I turned to look for my companions’ approval; only to notice Alguacil had his beak slacked wide open and Chifundo was matching his expression.

Poor, naïve little pony. The Wasteland is going to have a field day with you.

Sadly Spring Bronco was a wasted opportunity. His betrayal and execution at the claw of Alguacil had the potential to be a great moment, yet her
I ‘am feeling disappointed. It’s hard to explain but there’s a certain lack of emotions.

Take this part for example:

We made our way back to the hallway and my questions at Spring Bronco were mostly just rebuffed with the same old answers: “I’m a bad pony, Sunrise.” Or “I needed the caps, I only did it because I needed them that badly.”

Instead of using a few short sentences you could’ve fleshed out this part a bit.
Show the readers more of Sunrise thoughts and how she feels about him. How she tries to make Bronco open up to her.
Describe how Bronco acts. Does he looks ashamed and avoids eye contact with Sunrise? Is he glancing at Alguacil with a glimpse of fear in his eyes? What does the rest of the group do?Is Alguacil carefully watching him, one claw a trigger of his weapon? Does the rest of the group ignore him and silently walks onwards while Sunrise tries to chat with Bronco?

All that would’ve added a lot more impact to Bronco’s sudden but inevitable betrayal.

New Perk: Tail Trick

New Trait Discovered: Pinkie Sense

To sum it up: Her coat has a different color than before, she got a weird Cutie Mark, there’s a voice in her head, her tails has a mind of its own and she got the Pinkie Sense. What ever happened to her, it was a lot.

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The story itself is going over everything that has happened to her and where she goes from here as well as how they deal with it; meeting the sins of the past to the situation of the present.

So yeah; this first chapter is pretty bare bones but that was an intentional decision; the 3rd chapter and beyond; I start to let you into her head and her emotions. Here the readers are allowed to fill in their own thoughts instead; but as soon as chapters 3 and beyond hit; it becomes a roller-coaster of emotions, comedy, drama, and tragedy.

This was how the world was? I thought. I’m a tiny little mare, completely unprepared for this. I’m not even sure if we’re the good guys.

this reminds me of a weird story "fallout equestria: infinite potential" where the protagonist was a mad scientist who got banished from a Stable for conducting unethical experiments...
then a Pinkie figurine and a Fluttershy figurine TALK to her...
she also had the ironic name "Angel" and was COMPLETELY white.

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There is a very big difference between Shamanism/Spirits and umm.. just being crazy.

Ok, I can get used to the randomness, eventually. In the meantime I must admit that the dice rolls make the story completely unpredictable; so far I see that as a positive.