Wandering Sunrise remembers Equestria as it once was: a land of harmony, broken by strife. She was sealed in a Stable-Tec stasis pod the day the Megaspells hit... and she wakes up in a pool of water, surrounded by strangers.
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Okay, full review of the chapter:
Preface - "Everybody Knows" by Skybolt is a great choice for this entire chapter, each memory reflecting a verse from the song, minus one memory.
Memory 1: Starts with a normal school morning for Sunrise, she has a mini talk about her not being good at anything with Shadow, nothing major. Raid sirens echo, and they both book it to the shelter, and Shadow shows that light of motherhood that she has... for now. [Memory Correlates with verse 1]
Memory 2: Sunrise attends the funeral for the children of the school, and everyone has signed up for the military, minus Rainbowrise. This memory seems to be much more of a development for the caring that comes from Rainbowrise, and a partial snapping point of Shadow. It also shows the tight knittedness of Coffee and Sunrise pre-war. [Memory Correlates with verse 2]
Memory 3: Shadow has begun her decline, and Rainbow remains to keep hope, doing his best to keep Sunrise's spirits up still. In addition, it appears as though the reason why Rainbow couldn't stop 9 was because he was working for her... [Memory Correlates with verse 3]
Memory 4: The family applies for a stable, and it appears as though Sunrise is the reason they get in, probably due to the serum injected into her by Pinkie/Applebloom (I can't remember) that keeps her from getting her cutie mark. In addition, Coffee Stain confesses her love to Sunrise. To be honest, one of the cutest moments from this chapter. [Correlates with first half of verse 4]
Memory 5: Now with the continued state as the war continues, the war is getting to Rainbowrise, but he still does his best to help Sunrise keep the innocence of childhood, taking her out to go see Coffee Stain so that they can see each other to help distract Sunrise from the war. In addition, Shadow's descent has also increased to a high degree, sleeping around and popping mint-als like they're just mints. Sunrise also has her first public kiss with Coffee, leading to be another cute yet serious moment, with the final line remaining a haunting one... [Correlates to second half of Verse 4]
Memory 6: Sunrise is out of the stable... well, not Sunrise. 14. 14 meets Coffee Stain, and leaves off with her, Sunrise watching from the sidelines, which certainly raises the mystery of what happened after they set off... [Correlates with verse 6]
Memory 7: Sunrise after the bomb in the street that she tried to defuse. Also appears that her C-section cut is still shrouded somewhat in mystery, which is interesting. By this point, Shadow has lost most of her motherhood, with one of her last gifts was one of her ovaries to Sunrise, cloned to fit the filly. This memory really seems to show Shadow hitting her breaking point, but also tries to still help her daughter's future, even if she has an ulterior motive. [Correlates with second half of verse]
Memory 8: Oh boy… Memory Number Eight. Fiaura already knows my stance on this memory. With Sunrise being bullied for having a marefriend, Renegade Wing steps in to split the fight, with his two dads (Our first introduction to Martini Markerlight, as well as Arcane) to help out as backup. Overall, this memory is a bit biased due to reasons for being a personal favorite of the chapter due to its contents, but setting it aside, I know that this has a reason for being here as a lesson for Sunrise to learn that it’s perfectly fine to be homosexual (at least from my point of view), and that there’s simply those who may just bully you just because you’re happy. Also by the way Fi, 44 Pages. [Surprisingly, no correlation to be found with the song]
Memory 9 & 10:Sunrise, Silver Zoom, and Coffee Stain all talk to Pinkie prior to going to finally confront 88 for an encounter, and in the ensuing battle Silver is killed. In an attempt to save Coffee Stain, Sunrise threatens to kill herself. However, the fact that the corrupt agents need Sunrise to get into the Stable raises an interesting point to learn down the road. Another interesting surprise is Martini Markerlight making his second appearance for this chapter, coming in to save the two fillies at the last second, and is ordered to continue firing on 88. Prior to doing so, he checks his pipbuck 1000, typing a few commands. I am curious as to what those were for prior to doing so. [Correlates to second half of verse 4]
Overall, as I always enjoy learning more about the past of Sunrise, this chapter was a fantastic read. In addition, there were several quotes I did like, including “This an A and B conversation, not C4 your way out!” “Showing weakness is not weak,” and “Everybody knows that you have to protect each other; you have to so you can keep your hopes up.”
Well, I think I wrote plenty enough, but this is my take on Chapter 44!
Interesting. When it comes to Saving, i worked on something familiar once
Sunrise's parents are very Wise. And Children suffer the most in war.
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SOMEBODY GETS ME!
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Surprisingly, ponies are not different.
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Indeed
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Thank you for making me smile tonight.
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You're Welcome. Keep up the Good Work!
So has Sunrise seen the light. Are her eye open. Or was she blinded. Yes I can do this all day . Yes yes all the bad eye sight joke that could been used. Also how you chastised us for using pop culture references. And you used a loovy toons references. Now in all seriousness the cameos and back story were well done. And this give you time to just do a whole chapter mosty free hand with out any of the game stuff getting in the way.
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Well I was going to do a proper per-memory reaction when proofing, but you put out the chapter before I could!
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I use these chapters to fill in gaps or holes left by the tabletop game. To bridge areas that need bridging and to help people make sense of Sunrise's future actions.
I hope it helps.
As for the references, it is Fallout, you use references but you make sure you use them sparringly and with purpose.
You missed Hallow's reference?
You missed Silver Zoom's earlier didn't you?
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JOB DONE! I beat you to the punch because you had a Markerlight BONER!
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Rolls eyes
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what comment did you delete?
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Was me joking about the repercussions of that one memory, and I forgot I can just edit instead of just deleting. Also some praise to Snips for doing a fantastic job on White Keep, and we’re both having a blast with it.
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"Right, because you wrote him and Arcane in, thus causing 50 pages (for now) log of RP. To be honest, Snips is knocking it out of the park with White Keep, though.
He's had to come up with names for 36 NPCs, because he knows I would probably try to get names. I've only met... about 8-10 of them so far."
...I didn't reload the page on my computer, so I still had the post!
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Also I'm glad you two are having the most fun with this.
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Well, it is more lore for Martini, so I guess there’s that?
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Always
With Sunrise's mom reaching that terrible breaking point and her sudden cutie mark shift, it makes me think that she was part of the black box experiment; it seems like the evil soul is the more dominant soul in her case though. Either that, or she pioneered the unholy research to the point where it tainted her soul.
I really enjoyed the whole spiel with Coffee Stain and Sunrise falling for each other. It brings back bittersweet memories of me accidentally falling for my best friend in high school. As a naive and somewhat sheltered overzealous Christian high schooler, I didn't quite understand why I suddenly wanted to spend so much time with him or why he brightened up my day so much until he flat out told me that, "If we take this any further, it'll be considered gay. Due to your beliefs, if we take our friendship any further, it'll make you a hypocrite. I don't date hypocrites." I left his house a confused and heartbroken mess that day. We never talked much after that, but it made me revaluate many things about my life for the better.
Anyways, thank you for this heart wrenching and informative chapter, Fiaura. I always look forward to reading them when they come out.
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I'm working on Chapter 45 right now and well we're going to start to see the Wasteland take it's toll.
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Seems like there's always some kind of price involved.
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Chapter 45 is now in proof read and edit.
My job is mostly done. And yes, always a piper to be paid.
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I can't wait!
We know that Big Mac took the bullet 'through '.....(took the bullet and) I took the 'through ' out, it didn't read properly....now if you state he took it through something, heart, chest, etc it would read better......more to come...
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fixed, meant though not through.
Have their 'stripes '.....spellcheck got you! Taking this read slowly...hope you don't mind...lots of information...
Okay, finally done. No further problems to report. Wow...memories! Presented in a well thought out manner. Nuff said. See you next chapter!
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Fixed them!
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Next Chapter should be ready tomorrow.
Love the back story on Sunrise and Coffee Strain, such sweet innocence and a natural progression. I can now see why Coffee Stain reacted so strongly when she first saw Sunrise in the story. I am just glad it manifested itself between them at that age so that they could take comfort and pleasure in it during the time of the old world too.
I also really enjoyed the part where Sunrise was saved from bullying by Renegade Wing's parents. They make such a sweet set of parents, and I would really enjoy seeing more of them and their son if the story allows it.
As for Sunrise's mother, that hits home for me. I had a parent who was like that in many ways, so it is fully realistic to me. It also makes me feel more for Sunrise. I am just glad she had a father who was there for her as much as he was. Now the question to me is just how far was her mother involved?
I am also now wondering about a slip of the tongue earlier in the story from Pink earlier that would help to explain more of why the last pony she thought of as she passed was Sunrise, other than seeing a name on a folder.
Solid chapter. Lot of new info revealed about Sunrise. And we have an early arrival of
roast turkeyMartini9978192
Those were generally the ideas and plans :)
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Pink is avoiding questions and emotions, you guys should be seeing that and hopefully that is coming through.
Chapter 48 or 49, this chapter is gonna come back and it's gonna hurt.
Chapter 52-53, this chapter is gonna hurt A LOT MORE!
There is a ton of foreshadowing going on without looking like foreshadowing while I am tying loose ends from books 1 and 2 up as neatly as possible to really open up the new elements coming.