Melody Minor, the youngest sister of the Equestrian Sirens. But unlike her sisters he was born human and in the human world. What will happen when she doesn't fully agree with her sisters' dark intentions?
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Say what would happen if Melody found the portal open after Princess Twilight came through, do you think she would walk through it and either turn into a siren or sea pony over on the Equestria side?
You need an AU tag.
There are some intriguing implications that last scene raises. Melody could have had a little more background, though; right now she’s just there with almost no explanation, which is pretty jarring. Curious to see where you go with this, though
Two other points:
Firstly, watch your homonyms. The word “your” is a possessive, so you should only use it if “his” or “her” could also make some sense. “You’re” is a contraction of “you” and “are,” so that’s what you should be using when you’re describing someone. Here, for instance:
You should use “you’re.”
Secondly, that infodump of description in the beginning’s pretty awkward. You usually don’t need to give the canon characters that much description; we’ve all seen Rainbow Rocks, we all know what the Dazzlings look like, so that big paragraph describing them does basically nothing. Melody needs a little more, of course, but it would be worth thinking about ways to work her appearance in more smoothly.
I am very interested in this.
Great second chapter, though I don't get why the Human Mane 5 look up Twilight's name online, they could then find the Human version of Twilight before she shows up in the third movie then.
SWEET New chapter, I can't wait to see what Melody does next, also nice with how you got her to meet the Rainbooms before her sisters start that song in the lunch room, thought with Melody being an extra siren, will you have one of the other Canterlot High girls join the Rainbooms to give them an extra edge, I would choose vinyl since she brought her car/music station to the finals during the original movie.
OH man, this was worth the wait, also I loved that part about how Twilight thought that the fourth Siren, AKA Melody, was one of the other's daughters, I did like how you had Celestia and Luna come down to Twilight's Castle to talk about the Sirens to them. Also I like the idea of Melody becoming friends with the Rainbooms, maybe with her help they can stop the other three sooner then like in the movie, of course I think it would be cool if Melody could figure out how to feed on positive emotions instead of negative one's, maybe that way they wouldn't be so hungry all the time.
falls out of my chair I'm laughing so hard from reading just that one phrase, took me 5 minutes to calm down and then get on with reading more of the story
I like how you have Melody acting sort of like a double agent in this chapter and that part about Adagio pulled an AK-47 out of her hair was really funny and then Melody say's that Adagio could fit a baby elephant in there just got me laughing again so hard I thought I was going to hurt something. That seems so much more like how Pinkie Pie, both Pony and Human, can stuff things into their mane/hair and pull out large items from it too, like Pony Pinkie's Party Canon.
I like this and wondering when will you’ll upload a new chapter.
That cut me completely off guard.
Don’t betray your family!!!!!!!! Tirek’s brother did it and I’m betting he was executed for his crime! I don’t have that much info on Gargoyles of Equestria. The only source I got on them was from Disney Gargoyles and Demona was only Gargoyle that betray her clan.
OH man, that ending part there about the Flying Taco Dream of Sonata's was just PERFECT, I didn't see that coming at all, and the part at the beginning with Melody coming back into her room after she told her sisters not to go in there was just Awesome, I should have KNOWN she would do something like that when she told them not to go into her room.
Will Melody asked Twilight why she’s know about her sisters and how much she knows about Sirens.
Loved how Sonata made that cake for Melody like that, also I'm guessing they did go into Melody's bedroom but then Sonata said the other two interrupted her favorite dream. Also Melody's song there was perfect too since she needs to fake out her sisters thinking she is still working along with them but she will turn on them in the end.
I love this story so much, keep it up! 👍 when's the next update?
Awesome story!
Whoa, I didn't see that coming! I can't wait for the next chapter!