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Nice job with this story, I enjoyed it. But it went a bit too fast for my tastes. I recommend adding a bit more details here and there to lengthen the story and increase the opening paragraghs. Even a Small backstory can do wonders. Other than that it's a great story.
Still open for story ideas/requests?
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My plate is a bit full at the moment. Sorry.
Can you make this longer. Also, he's a prisoner, why not add the element of bondage? Though, I did like this.