Friendship is Puppies, part 6
Twilight Gets a Puppy
By TDR
Friendship is Puppies,
part 6
Rahs and Spike were rather surprised at the round of introductions. It seemed that Pinkie Pie had not been lying when she said she knew every pony in Ponyville. Rahs couldn't wrap his head around half the names that she had given in her rapid fire introductions. It also became clear that Pinkie Pie really hadn't meant to upset Twilight, given that the mare apologized for it every few minutes, throwing parties was just something she did, and everyone got a 'welcome to Ponyville party'.
Spike assured her that Twilight would be fine once she calmed down and the party mare seemed to take that to heart. With one final apology she darted off into the crowd and was last seen trying to get a game of pin the tail on the pony going.
There was another thing that surprised Rahs. Aside from a few foals running around all of the ponies present were adults, yet he hadn't caught the first whiff of alcohol at all.
On one paw that meant that that Pinkie Pie was responsible enough to know foals and underage ponies were here.
On the other paw, a possible explanation for the pink pony's antics was out the window.
The mare was everywhere and acted like she knew every pony. Rahs gave up trying to follow her after a few moments, she didn't smell like magic, and yet she was seemingly bending reality to her whims like a Equss class mage.
Twilight was going to have a field day studying her if she ever found out about her quirks.
Spike had found Applebloom again and was talking with her and a few other foals that came over to gawk at the Dragon. That was a nice change, Spike didn't really have a chance to make friends with any one his age back in Canterlot. Between the private tutoring and most parents worrying about his claws and fire breath he didn't meet any. There were few in Canterlot that would allow their children anywhere near him in truth. Rahs only hoped Spike could keep his snark in check, that forked tongue of his could be quite barbed when he chose.
Rahs was more worried about Twilight right now, but he knew going to talk to her wouldn't do much good. She needed some alone time and a nap before she would be able to deal with other ponies again. Still that left him without a translator, maybe he should break out the notebook again, or perhaps he should just get a big glass of water and......
“Excuse me.” Rahs' ears perked up as he heard a voice behind him. He turned back to look and immediately flattened his ears to his skull seeing the white Unicorn mare that had put him in a foul mood earlier had shown up again.
“Bork.” Rahs grumbled.
“Rahs! That is not nice.” another voice, much quieter stated. “I mean she is flexible, but I don't think any pony is flexible enough to do that.”
Rahs blinked noting that Fluttershy had walked up with Rarity and was sitting behind her gesturing to the white unicorn with a wing.
“Bark?” Rahs questioned.
“Please just listen to her.” Fluttershy asked.
Rahs looked back at Rarity, he rolled his eyes and let out a long sigh. He rather wanted to just storm off again, but Fluttershy was there and he didn't want to upset the Pegasus mare by telling her friend to piss off. He turned his attention fully to Rarity, at the very least he would be willing to let her speak her peace just to see how far she'd stick her hoof in her mouth this time.
“Umm yes .. first off I would like to apologize for my earlier behavior. It was uncouth and not befitting for a lady to have reduced herself to such things. I would also like to greatly apologize for striking you with the broom and to any insult I may have directed towards your family.” Rarity quickly let out, her words seemed rather brisk, as though they were stunted, like she had a much larger and more flowery prose she wished to say and then scraped it all before opening her mouth. “ While i suppose I could defend myself by pointing out your close resemblance to a Diamond Dog, I shall not do so, as trying to defend my unwarranted actions will simply cheapen my attempt to apologize. I fully admit I was in the wrong and I let my emotions get the best of me in our first encounter. I also apologize for not noticing you until the end. I have a tendency to get quite focused and ignore everything else.”
Rahs tilted his head glancing over to Fluttershy briefly.” Bark?” Rahs asked.
Fluttershy shook her head indicating that she had nothing to do with Rarity's apology.
Rahs looked back at Rarity who was looking up at him with the sort of eyes that would make a stallion melt into a blubbering mess. Unfortunately for her, that sort of look meant nothing to Rahs, he wasn't interested in ponies in that way at all, sure he knew a pretty pony or a cute one when he saw them, but there was no romantic or amorous attraction attached. Spike fell in and out of love at the drop of a hat, Rahs had never really cared. Best he could figure out it had to do with their scent. His brain told him they were prey, not partners, and it was something he had not really tried to ever get past.
Rahs' impassive reaction to her batting her eyes did not go unnoticed however.
“Nothing? Not even a little bit? “ Rarity gasped rearing up onto her hind legs with one foreleg to her head and toppled over backwards.
Rahs took a step forward to catch her out of instinct, only to stop as she collapsed onto a red couch that hadn't been there before.
“AHHHH NOOOOOOO” Rarity whined, “Not even a flicker of interest, that's it, my time is done, I've gotten old....”Rarity continued to wail. Rahs blinked looking around seeing that everyone but Fluttershy was ignoring the mare's antics. “I should just hang it all up and get a dozen cats.”
Fluttershy spoke up.”Oh that's wonderful Rarity, I have a number of little kittens …..”
“Hold that thought dear.” Rarity told the butter yellow Pegasus, as she suddenly sat up for a second. With Fluttershy paused she fell back onto the couch with a wail, wracked with sobs.” My charm is gone, I'm hideous ahhhhhh”
Rahs simply stared at the scene before him as the white mare continued to debase herself in the crowd as she carried on. It was clearly fake, but he couldn't help be amused at the emotion she put into the part she was playing, fake or not. As she was on the third verse of lamenting the loss of her youthful beauty, Rahs couldn't help but to start clapping at the scene.
Rarity paused a moment before sitting up on her couch with a small smile.
“Not buying it, hmm?” Rarity asked.
Rahs shook his head.”Woof.”
“He says it was a nice effort, it was easily on par with Princess's rant in the last showing of Sweet Bird of Youth.” Fluttershy explained.
“Really? I was going more for a Scarlet..” Rarity pouted.
“Bark.” Rahs chuckled.
“He said you didn't have enough of a country twang for Scarlet.”Fluttershy smirked.
“Everyone's a critic.” Rarity bemoaned, getting a small chuckle from Rahs. “Still that does bring me back to the point at hoof as to whether or not you accept my apology for my actions before. In short, I apologize for calling you a mongrel, and insinuating you were infested with fleas. I know I cannot exactly expect it , but I am sorry about getting carried away like that and I do beseech your forgiveness for that. I am hardly showing myself in the best light with all this.”
Rahs raised an eyebrow.” Woof.”
“He said you didn't say anything about the insult to his fashion sense.” Fluttershy explained.
“Yes well out of everything I said that was the one part I am not going to apologize for. Honestly maroon and tan with navy blue fur? It clashes horridly. It's like if I tried to wear bright green. It really won't do.” Rarity continued.
“Woof?” Rahs questioned.
“He said he doesn't see what's wrong with it.” Fluttershy passed along. “Rahs I think she means the colors more than the style.”
Rahs' ears perk up at that as he looked down at his clothing. Unlike normal cats and dogs, he could see in the same spectrum of colors as Ponies, he just didn't see anything wrong with the maroon duster and his tan pants.
“Yes I suppose the style is fine. It's not elegant, but it clearly has function with all the pockets.” Rarity considered rubbing her chin with a hoof. “Ooh idea. How about I fix something up for you. I've never actually made anything for one of your build before and I can play with the colors a bit.”
Rahs raised an eyebrow.” Woof...”
“He said...” Fluttershy began.
“I understand a refusal when I hear one dear, no worries. It shal'nt cost you anything and if anything I will consider it a continuation of my apology. Not to say I will not benefit a bit from working on something new, but the offer still stands. I will simply need to take measurements when you are able. While I doubt any of this will make us friends I would at least hope that I can lessen any hard feelings you and your siblings may have towards me.”
“Bark.” Rahs responded.
“He said he is willing to accept your apology, but he can't speak for the others. He's also somewhat suspect that this is only forthcoming because he expects you want to remain in the good graces of a Canterlot family.” Fluttershy stated.
“While I cannot deny the thought crossed my mind that is not the case. My actions show I am clearly not ready for that place and I shalln't bring it up again.” Rarity sighed.
Rahs snorted, she was closer to fitting into the Canterlot elite than he was willing to admit.
“I take that's a no?” Rarity frowned.
“Woof.” Rahs shook his head before an idea came to mind.”Bark.”
“No, he says you're fine and he's still willing to accept though he does have a request.” Fluttershy tilted her head. “ He said make a small ball of magic and float it in the air?”
Rahs nodded as Rarity looked confused. Still she did as he asked and a light blue orb formed in the air. Rahs regarded it a moment before snapping it out of the air with a quick bite. Both Rarity and Fluttershy shrieked at the action with the Pegasus freezing in place and the white Unicorn falling back on her couch rubbing her horn.
“OH I'VE BEEN KILT!” Rarity bemoaned as Rahs considered the flavor.
“Marshmallow.”
Fluttershy blinked.
“What just happened?!” Rarity cried out.
“Bark?” Rahs asked Fluttershy.
“Yes I'm fine, just a bit startled.” Fluttershy admitted.
“Yes a little warning before doing …. that again.” Rarity grumbled.” What was that any way?”
“ Oh, Moon Dogs eat magic... I think he was just seeing what flavor yours was.” Fluttershy stated as Rahs nodded.
“ And my magic tastes like marshmallow?” Rarity asked as Rahs nodded.” I don't know how I feel about that.”
“All the ponies in this town are crazy!” Twilight swore as she buried her head under her pillow.
She had gotten a bit of sleep before a cheer from the downstairs library woke her up again. She hadn't realized that she was even as tired as she was. Still given she had flown down from Canterlot that morning and had been running around all day. A brief glance to a clock on the wall showed it was well after midnight and closer to the sunrise than she liked. She knew most ponies would be staying up as late as they could in order to watch the Princess raise the sun, though Twilight was far more worried about the possibility of yesterday being the last day Equestria would ever see.
Twilight grumbled rolling onto her back, letting out a low sigh as she tried to work out her frustrations of the day, more sleep wasn't going to happen any time soon.
“And here I thought I would have had some time to study more about the Elements of Harmony.” Twilight sighed.” I can't even go down stairs to look at the books without the possibility of getting mobbed and sidetracked again.”
Twilight sighed rolling over onto her belly and climbing then out of bed. She gathered up the one book she had brought with her rereading the lines by the light of the moon as she moved to the window.
“Legend has it that on the longest day of the of the thousandth year, the stars shall aid in her escape and she shall bring about night time eternal.” Twilight grumbled looking up at the moon and the glimmering stars filling the sky. Was it just her or were a quartet of those stars closer to the moon than they had been before?
“I hope the Princess was right. I really hope this is just an old pony tale.....” Twilight muttered.
The door opened and Spike poked his head in. Twilight blinked noting that the little dragon had a lampshade on his head for some reason and she wisely decided to ignore it.
“Twilight, it's about time for the sunrise. You gonna be okay to join us over at town hall?” Spike questioned.
She considered a moment and let out a small sigh. She still felt tired, but what sleep she had gotten had helped. Really the day hadn't been that bad. She was still annoyed at Rarity and Pinkie Pie, and maybe a little bit at Rainbow Dash, but her earlier crabbiness was mostly gone.
“Sure.. Spike... “ Twilight yawned.” See if you can track down some coffee for me would you?”
“No problem. Oh and avoid the red bottles on the drink table. Pinkie Pie has a few bottles of hot sauce up there that look like cherry juice.”
“Seriously?”
“Yeah.. mare likes it on cupcakes. She's a weird one, but alright if you can get past the oddities.”Spike stated.” You should talk to her before we leave, she seems rather sorry about surprising you.”
“We'll see. Coffee first.” Twilight stated.
“I'll see what I can find and I'll let Rahs know you're up.” Spike agreed stepping back out of the room.
Twilight sighed looking around at the gathered crowd. Rahs stood next to her garnering a few odd looks from those who had not made it to Pinkie Pie's party, though for the most part they let him be.
Spike was still hanging out with Applebloom and the pair of them seemed super excited over everything. Applebloom was currently reintroducing the dragon to the food her family brought. Twilight was rather glad her younger brother was making friends. There were issues with that back in Canterlot.
Rahs was explaining to her about his encounter with Rarity. Twilight was only half listening, it was less than ten minutes until Princess Celestia was supposed to raise the sun and no one had seen her for very long after her chariot had landed. In fact aside from the two Guards that had pulled Twilight's chariot, no one had seen another Royal Guard at all.
“So she's going to make you a new outfit and you're fine with her now?” Twilight questioned.
“Woof.”Rahs shrugged.
“Yes, well I suppose she did apologize, that's a start. I guess she's going to try and apologize to Spike and I too?” Twilight theorized as Rahs nodded. “Alright, well if you're fine with her after all that I suppose I can let it slide. Still it makes me wonder what kind of trouble could she have had with Diamond Dogs for that sort of reaction?”
“Talking about Rarity?” Pinkie Pie asked suddenly from right next to them, making both Twilight and Rahs jump back in surprise.
Pinkie Pie ignored the shock and continued to talk, though her tone was a little subdued. “Rarity's had some bad encounters with the packs of them around town. The two packs here are way worse than the ones near where I used to live, but they tend to leave the town alone for the most part.”
“I didn't realize that the Diamond Dogs were such a big problem out here.” Twilight considered.
“Ehh so long as you stay in town or near the farms there's not much issue. At least not now.” Pinkie Pie's hair deflated a little as she looked over at Applejack briefly.
“Woof?” Rahs asked.
“Not my place to say.” Pinkie explained before turning to Twilight. “ Any way I am super sorry about startling you like that earlier I didn't think anyone was afraid of parties or would get that upset I was throwing a surprise welcome to Ponyville party. I didn't mean to upset you or anything. PLEASE DON'T BE MAD!”
Twilight and Rahs both jumped back again as a veritable torrent of water flooded from the bawling pink ponies eyes.
“Geez it's okay calm down.... you didn't know, I forgive you, just calm down...” Twilight tried to placate.
“Okay!” Pinkie Pie popped up again, her hair exploding back into the poofy curls, her tears drying up as if they never were there. She grabbed Twilight in a bone creaking hug before letting her go with a wide grin. “ I'm glad everything's okay again . I'm super excited for this party are you excited, I've never been so excited....”
Pinkie stopped her rambling as a fanfare of bird song sounds, the crowd of ponies go silent as they all look up at the second floor of the town hall where Rarity stood by a curtained off area, ready to pull the cord to reveal the Princess.
Fluttershy smiled as she guided her birds to sing, announcing the reveal. A spot light shines down to just under the curtained off balcony area where Mayor Mare stood ready for a speech.
“Fillies and gentlecolts, as Mayor of Ponyville, it is my pleasure to announce the beginning of the Summer Sun Celebration.” She called out her voice carrying over the crowd, only to be drown out by the thunder of stomping hooves and cheering.
After waiting for the cheering to die down the Mayor spoke again.“In just a few moments, our town will witness the magic of the sunrise and celebrate this, the longest day of the year.”
The mayor took a bit of a pause. Twilight glanced back and noticed Rahs was headed off towards the back rather quickly, likely having to use the little colts room. She was upset for a moment , before realizing that she and Rahs could pretty much see the Princess almost any time they wanted. This really wasn't a big deal to either of them.
“And now it is my great honor to introduce you to the ruler of our land.....” Mayor continued.
Twilight glanced to the sky with a worried expression, seeing the moon through the great glass windows at the top of the town hall. The stars she thought were closer before were gone and the image of the mare on the moon seemed to vanish.
“....... the very pony who gives us the sun and the moon each and every day, the good, the wise, the bringer of harmony to all of Equestria....” Mayor continued.
Fluttershy gestured for her birds to ready the fanfare.
Pinkie Pie vibrated in place.
Rarity readied herself to pull the cord.
Applejack offered a slice of cake to a pony.
Spike and Applebloom looked up at the upper balcony with excitement.
Rainbow Dash devoured said cake slice.
Twilight fretted about what might happen.
Rahs froze in place where he was about to exit the little colts room a shudder running along his spine.
“PRINCESS CELESTIA!”
The curtain was yanked back and the spotlight moved to the upper balcony to reveal, nothing.
Ponies around her started yammering in shock as Rarity poked her head behind the curtain looking for the Princess.
“This can't be good.” Twilight muttered drawing Pinkie Pie's attention.
“Be calm everypony there must be a reasonable explanation.” Mayor Mare placated.
“Ooh, Ohh, I love guessing games.” Pinkie Pie chimed up as she looked around. “ Is she hiding?”
“She's gone.” Rarity called down as all the others gasped in shock.
“Ooh she's good.” Pinkie Pie admitted looking up at the balcony before screaming out. Her cry starting other panicked sounds from the crowd as a dark purplish mist begins to form , billowing over the balcony.
There were a few screams and some shrieking as the mist took the form of a towering black alicorn with metallic blue armor. Her mane and tail swirled around her like an unbound miasma of partially stars and mostly void. Her teal eyes were slitted like a cats as she stared down at the gather ponies, most of them too much in shock at the appearance of the dark mare to even move.
“Oh my beloved subjects. It's been so long since I've seen your precious little sun loving faces....” The mare sneered glaring down at them all.
“WHAT DID YOU DO WITH OUR PRINCESS!” Rainbow Dash shouted launching into the air only for Applejack to grab her tail.
Twilight glanced around the room, not seeing Rahs though, Spike was standing in front of a number of foals who had huddled under the table, an angry look on his face as he glared up at the dark alicorn.
“Why? Am I not royal enough for you?” The mare chuckled. Her laughter cut off for a moment as she looked to the back of the crowd curiously her ears perked.
Glancing back Twilight caught a glimpse of Rahs being shoved back into the bathroom as a herd of ponies pushed into the little colts room trying to get away.
“Don't you know who I am?” The mare asked looking back over the crowd ignoring the minor stampede.
“Ooh, more guessing games. Hmmm, Hokey Smokes? No, Queen Meanie! Oh, Oh, Oh, I got it, Black snooty, that's it's Black Snooty.” Pinkie Pie guessed any further guesses cut off as Applejack shoved an large cupcake in the jabbering mares mouth to shut her up.
“Does my crown no longer count now that's I've been imprisoned for a thousand years!?” the mare snarled glaring at Fluttershy and sending her birds flying away in terror as the Pegasus flinched and whimpered.
She whirls on Rarity catching the mares chin with the miasma of her mane. “ Did you not recall the legends, did you not see the signs?” She growled popping the white Unicorn on the chin with her mane.
“I did.” Twilight called out. “And I know who you are. You're the mare in the moon.”
The dark alicorn grinned showing Rarity some rather impressively sharp teeth as she turned to look down at Twilight.
There were a number of shrieks and cries of panic from the back of the building as Rahs tried to shove ponies out of his way, or failing that tossing them, to get out and stop Twilight from drawing more attention to herself. He was unfortunately making little to no progress out of the bathroom. The air was filled with magic and it made his fur stand on end.
“Nightmare Moon.” Twilight declared with a growl.
“Well, well, well. Some pony who remembers me.” Nightmare Moon smiled.” Then you also know why I'm here.....”
“You're here to.... to...” Twilight flinched noting everyone else staring at her.
“Remember this day my little ponies, for it was your last!” Nightmare Moon cackled.”From this moment forth . The Night. Will last. FOREVER!”
The dark alicorns shout, brought a boom of thunder and the flash of lightning across the top of the room , sending a number of Pegasi who had been in the air diving for cover. Her mane started to move forming a swirling vortex of dark void above her, filling the top of the town hall with darkness as her laughter echoed through the building.
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Moar plz
You did really well. I like this version of events leading to NMM much better
Good chapter like how Spike is standing in front of the fillies and Colts protecting them just in case.
"After a full ten minutes of insane cackling and 'I told you so's..."
It means you are sweet and fluffy but lack substance.
This is another good chapter. The apologies from Rarity and Pinkie seemed proper with reasonable understanding.
[Despite the gore tag it's rather light on that, and they have yet to make a lewd tag and there's a bit of that.]Why not use a sex tag?
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Because there's no sex just dirty minds and innuendo
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Or made of sugared hog fat... but any way... the apologies actually worried me a bit and i re wrote them a few times particularly Rarity's..
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It's not that different just yet, but it soon will be.
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Chekhov's gun.
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In my opinion, your Rarity's apology did sound like something an intelligent pony would make (calm and collected thought unlike something on the spur of the moment) - and Rarity has been known for her intelligence. Some might put more drama in her behavior but I think yours was also proper considering the situation she's in.
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Hmmm... not enough for a theory, but enough for ideas... I shall wait and see.
I wonder, since Rahs is a Moon dog...does that mean Nightmare might attempt to control/manipulate him? And if she does would it work?
The translator isn't really giving me any good results. Can anyone explain what Rarity said?
I am also wondering why Rarity wasn't surprised/elated that Rah's knows theater.
Wasn't there a fanfic where Pinkie licked EVERY unicorn's horn to want to know how they tasted? I also didn't know that marshmallow can taste bland.
Cue random flying pony whacking nightmare moon as Rahas runs to twilight (couldant resit that would be hilarious imaging the look on her face * who dares throw my subjects at me)
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Rarity is saying she's been killed while trying to put a deep American south twist on it.
8518721 Well now won't that be problematic.
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It hasn't hit her yet. and Kilt is a attempt at southern twang for killed. She's still not good at it.
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I dunno but that sounds a little more like a clop plot than i like.
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He's not tossing them that hard and there's a lot of bodies to get past
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Pity she didn't notice. But then again, it will be quite neat once she does.
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Yeah, getting a bad brand of marshmallows can make them very bland.
I know but its hilarious to imaging 8519963
Rainbow Dash don't eat pie, she hates it.
Oh holy ship batman!
Loving this story so far. Few continuity issues I could nit pick about, even in light of the changes of the Moon Dogs, and few things that just, not a fan of the concept even if it is used way to much in fics for my taste. (Like the whole Cadance and Shiny in High School thing, since that very idea of a one sized fits all, standardized education education beyond primary school makes no sense in Equestria, since by that time nearly every pony has their Cutie Mark and knows EXACTLY what they are going to do, so would be focusing on learning stuff tailored to that, like a tech school, or an apprenticeship or some other avenue of studying.)
But overall,very solid, changes that make sense for the change of Rahs, while fitting into what we know, loved the Party fiasco attempt, does explain the quesadilla fear well, and she's not as traumatized by it in canon since, without Rahs to attract the crowd and pull attention from her, the party would have been smaller and she'd been saved from it quicker. Though, on the not really sold on it front, fic seems to have made her way too young when this all happened, since cutie marks all seem to come around pre-adolescences, most foals getting them seem to be around 10-13-ish And while I could see Twi being a bit early on it, that's a tad too far for me. Plus her being around 10 lines up well with her then being a young adult in the show, with Spike's age mostly matching the CMC's. I get why it was done, and loved seeing them grow up together like that, but, ehhhh....
But yeah plenty of little things I could nitpick, but overall really solid, fun story, and loving the characters for the most part. Rarity was a bit worrisome at first, but turned that around well, Pinkie... going a tad too full on meta, fourth wall breaking for my taste in a non-pure comedy fic. Spike..... is at his snarky, 'I am so done with this already', wrangler of his family's chaos best and it is GLORIOUS! Tia, a little too jaded and cynical seeming at times for my preferred take on her, but at the same time, it works well for how it's framed, as this is mostly from her private journal, which she's using to vent and get those frustrations out, so her being more blunt and sick of this shit does fit there. Really love her having a number of plans and back up plans in place, it really suits her, especially since we now know she did indeed know of the other Mane 6 and plan for Twi to meat them. Also loving her expecting this to be some long journey Twi will be on to slowly piece it all together and save Equestria some time in the future, reminds me of Friendship is Dragons, Twi's player derails the whole campaign by beating NMM in the first encounter. Also a good reason why "Just throw Twilight at it" becomes her Plan A for most situations.
School is another bit that, doens't feel right, by this point, everything about he school feels like it's been established, it's too.. lived in steady? Taken as a fixture? to see it being that new. That said, the reason for her doing it... I kind of love and could see that being the main reason she built it, just, not when she did.
Cadance Princess of Shipping is awesome, and that date was really well done on all fronts. Except the name, I mean,nice dodge on the 'Prince thing' though I prefer it just being a formality of his family being the direct descendants of Platinum, but, just, so hard to take ponies calling him 'Prince' like that seriously. And, seen that idea for him just acting an ass to throw off gold diggers, and that could work, except he was the one to approach Rarity, and doesn't work for the AJ bit. Still, good job with him, I just prefer the arrogant pounce that gets a never ending string of karmic payback.
And of course, the main thing to talk about, Rahs Sparkle. I freaking LOVE HIM! (Well not the name, seriously what is with so many fics all trying to force our naming conventions on ponies despite zero proof they exist and great proof they do not. Their name is their name, they don't go for family names, at least pegasi and unicorns don't, it does seem to be an Earth Pony thing, at least for the tighter families like the Pies, but even then, the most traditional family in Equestria doesn't do that, not all of them have 'Apple' tacked onto their name. They just go with a theme naming convention.) But Rahs himself is amazing, great middle between Twi's insanity and Twiness, and Spikes snarky calmness. And just, it's so amazing what you do with a character with no real dialog outside of barks mostly. While having a good amount of mystery left to him as well over what will be coming.
Just, yeah loving the set up and so far, first ep has been going amazing, few things I'd say could have been a bit tweaked, but overall, just... really well done and excited to keep going on this and see what else is in store.
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The problem with the schools is the highschool thing is canon to the comic and generlized schooling is a bit of a mixed bag. Ive tried to find a static themevwith it but when schoolastic stuff is so wavy in the show.
Also Rahs name has a purpose. Youll see later.
As for Prince Blueblood . ive been watching the show as i write. Rarity was following him for the first bit before he turned to her.
So it begins.
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Let the game begin!
Nice nightvale reference.
Oddities.
Fanfare.
I'm really excited for where this AU will go. Once more into the breach!
I was going to mention it earlier but I forgot.
Is this another Firefly reference? To the Browncoat's style of clothing?
Why is noone giving Nightmaremoon a hug? She really seem to need a hug
Great chapter. Huh... Wasnt it Nightmaremoon who give Doggo to Twily?
Re-reading this chapter...
Rahs saved everyone
She think that she dream this day do to the Moondog/Witchwolf normaly only Roaming the dreamrealm.
OH MY GOD A MEME
Honestly my biggest issue with this fic is how you have Rahs 'talking'. With how far along this series has progressed, this comment is probably going to be lost but I felt the need to make it anyways.
Ignoring how he's somehow unable to speak the same language as ponies and instinctively speaks 'Moon Dog', you're far to reliant on "Bark", "Bork", "Arf" and variations of them. He's meant to be a sort of dog/wolf/cat yet you constantly use the same 'dialogue' over and over. I don't think I've seen you use a single non-spoken form of communication with him, signing excluded.
Even something as simple as 'Rahs tilted his head and let out a questioning whine' or something similar in place of "Bark?" would go a long way.
My suggestion to defeat Nightmaremoon without Elements but using there representation.
- He honest and tell her she is sexy and wanted.
- He kind and offer her all the stallions of the town to be her stress release.
- He generous and give her all the sweet - sweet loving~♡
- Be loyal and offer her orgys every time she visits announced.
- Bringer her laughter with company inside and outside orgys.
- The magic of friends with benefits will cure the evil right out of her. Every gallon of stallion goodness at a time
Foreshadowing nice
The big return of the legendary Nightmare Moon:
Do not fear, the saviors of Equestria are here:
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Hm... I could see Twilight and her siblings having costume sneaking suits, Rahsaan and Spike sure could have needed it once or twice in the past.