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After a particularly bad week at school, Sunset Shimmer runs away from home to get away from all the unpleasantness. Not long after, she meets some particularly weird-looking aliens and a half-human, half-space rock boy, who, for some reason, refer to themselves as "Gems". Soon, Sunset learns about the many adventures of the Crystal Gems and their roles in protecting Earth. The Rainbooms feeling guilty over what they had done, decide to make amends with Sunset. But when all of them end up in the clutches of Homeworld, can they get out of the situation they created before it's too late?

(Crossover with Steven Universe. Not related to either of my previous works.)

(UPDATE: Under new management)

(2nd UPDATE: Uncancelled, for now)

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 35 )

Nice. Let's see where this goes.

So is anon a miss reveled. I know it said they were found out but it sounds like anon is still going

Comment posted by diablo4000 deleted Aug 25th, 2017

See this story's getting a pretty good start here ^^ let's see where this goes

So far, this sounds pretty good. I hope to read more eventually.

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I'm working on the second chapter as fast as I can.

Oh nice intro
see you next chapter

Well, this is certainly a...dark start to the story. Hope things turn around.

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All in good time, my friend. :raritywink:

Interesting! :raritystarry: Can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

I am desperate for more of this great story!

Well can't wait to see hwo the Rain Boosm react to driving Sunset away.

I've noticed a....pattern to your stories. Namely, for you as a writer, the greatest sin of these shows is the sin of choosing to see the worst in your friends. Whether it's your sharp dislike of A Canterlot Wedding in your MLP/MLB crossover, or this one with Anon o Miss. You really seem to have a dislike for friends choosing to walk away from friends in bad situations or thinking they've regressed. It's not necessarily bad. Just...something I noticed.

As a plot device I personally am ambivalent to it, but I'm not as much a fan of you treating it as the ultimate problem. I dunno. But I am excited to see where you take this. After all, there's no place in the recent cartoon universe for positivity than in the clutches of Steven Quartz Universe.

It's mid December. Remember eric, it's mid december!.....Oh, sorry, just something I had to remind myself of with Sunset's cold and all that.

I gotta admit though, this is pushing E rating a bit. Mostly for tone. The beginning of all this feels REALLY bleak. Seeing despair and death and the chill of loneliness cut at Sunset like that.

But perhaps since this reminds me in part of that movie Kubo which was PG, I suppose it's acceptable at this range right now.

I also see based on your framing device that this fic AT THE LEAST takes place after Season 4 episode 8 of Steven Universe, since Pumpkin didn't exist until then. Although, since when do gems need things to keep warm? Did they have that in flashbacks? I know Pearl didn't have it during their mountain expedition, so why would the best gems (patent pending) need a fire? For her? Also, I think you're

Also, I would've figured that being after Pumpkin was made, Lapis would open by saying, "You're in our home. We found you, etc, etc."

That would add to Peridot's comment of "It's probably not much." Give the home comment even more weight.

Lapis and Peridot nodded. “We’re gems,” Peridot clarified. “We came from a distant homeworld from beyond the stars, but unfortunately, we’re not allowed to ever come back again.”

Should be, "We're not allowed to ever GO back".

Although, I got a chuckle where they're alien rocks with sentience and light projection through various special abilities, but a parallel dimension seems too unbelievable for them.

Also, maybe a line about Sunset wanting to break the tension by asking about pumpkin? Just to help the scene flow more.

“Of course,” Lapis continued empathetically. “I was trapped in a mirror for five thousand years, unable to do anything, and the people I thought I could count on didn’t even bother to free me. I was only able to get out thanks to Steven.”

I assume she was referring to homeworld here, since I don't think she was counting on The Crystal Gems freeing her.....right?

Anyhow, something tells me, Sunset's in for an interesting Christmas Break. Especially depending on how you decide to frame her stay.

Also, when is this set in the EG timeline? Especially in regards to friendship games, camp everfree, mirror magic, etc?

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This takes place between the second and third movies.

8642817
Because I lost the inspiration/motive to continue, and honestly, I don't think it was very well-written. :ajsleepy: Maybe I'll continue it someday in the future . . .

8800880 He asked me to replace him in writing this. I suggested giving it to EquestrianKim.

9039673 Thanks for the update. Please keep me posted.

9039698 There might not be any promises.

I'm hoping you'll uncancel this story someday. I think it has potential.

Post more now or you shall be cursed with terrible writing for the rest of your life.:trixieshiftleft:

Hi im now following this story so update soon

I'm really glad to see this updated. Thank you for this. Though I wonder... Pink Zombie Sunset? =3

Who is this new person that hates the Diamonds?

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