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Traveling to Applewood through the San Palomino desert, Trixie is sweaty and tired. The town she usually stopped at on her way through was missing, and she feared it had been abandoned. When she finally sees a town, it's not the one she remembered, being almost a fortress of sorts.
The town is seemingly abandoned, save for strange mirrors in every home. When she finds out what they're for, she also discovers the town isn't as abandoned as she first thought.

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Comments ( 8 )

That was pretty spooky. Good job with creating tension.

Awesome creating tension but now I must know. What were those things?

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Slimy things that live in a mirrored world. That's all, and that is terrible enough.

Oooh, this was pretty nifty. Not all questions were answered, but then again, horror rarely indulges us. The unknown is far spookier than the truth.

I fear for what happened to the villagers and to whatever poor pony stumbles across this town next.

Trixie, a word of advice. Some doors are meant to be unopened.

How, ahem, lovely.
I can honestly say that these are the creepiest eldritch abominations I've ever read.
Well done.

What I really liked about this story is how intelligent or genre savvy both Trixie AND the monster were being. They both knew what was up, which added to the tension believably.

Really cool fic! I love the atmospheric work, and your characterization for Trixie was spot on. However, the story does suffer from too much fat. There is a ton of repetition all around, and a lot could have been cut. It would have made the whole thing that much more impactful.

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Good job actually creating terror while showing the monster. Those things were horrifying! (What's with that conglomeration of characters at the end?)

“It’s what Trixie would do. Magic rule number two: Only let them see…” Trixie looks around the room, and focuses on a corner. “…what you want them to see.”

This isn't the only thing I found, but the tense shift in the narration stands out.

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