A Potion Mishap For A Bat Pony

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ScrambledCrackers

ScrambledCrackers #1 · Jul 20th, 2017 · · · The Prologue-en-ing ·

Not bad, though you could use an editor/proofreader to help catch some errors. It wasn't pervasive, but there were some here and there.

That aside, the story is set up to go in various directions. The next chapter will clarify a lot, and determine a lot about what the story will be over time. Simple but interesting enough starting point. I'll keep an eye on it.

IAmBugHorse

IAmBugHorse #2 · Jul 20th, 2017 · · · The Prologue-en-ing ·

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Sadly I wish I could get an editor or proofreader, but I can't, I'm on my own when it comes to this story, as I am it's creator and it's editor (a somewhat slow one at that), so I'm only able to do my best with what I've got at the moment, but as you said there were some errors, if you could please show me said errors, then that would be appreciated, if not, that is also fine. And thank you for the feed back, it is very appreciated.

ScrambledCrackers

ScrambledCrackers #3 · Jul 20th, 2017 · 1 · · The Prologue-en-ing ·

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Give a try with this group: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors

I was lucky enough to find someone to help me edit, so you may have your own luck. Before that happened, I was flying solo as well.

From personal experience of working on your own, consider giving yourself a couple full days between finishing a chapter, then re-reading it to error check before posting. Takes some more patience, but I find that giving yourself that gap of time without looking at the piece in question lets your eyes catch a lot of stuff you'd been blind to previously. It is by no means perfect of course, but I found it helped me a fair bit.

IAmBugHorse

IAmBugHorse #4 · Jul 20th, 2017 · · · The Prologue-en-ing ·

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Thank you for the suggestion. I appreciate any help I can get.

Viper Pit

Viper Pit #5 · Jul 20th, 2017 · · · The Prologue-en-ing ·

i like where this is going

Night_Flicker

Night_Flicker #6 · Jul 20th, 2017 · · · The Prologue-en-ing ·

Story seems good, I'll plop it in my favs and stalk it for another update. Its good and looks promising so far, keep it up I expect good things

THISISNOTINCAPS

THISISNOTINCAPS #7 · Jul 26th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1 - Hey If There Is Nowhere Else To Start, We May As Well Start Here ·

Yo this book is amazing!!! Keep it up

Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #8 · Jul 29th, 2017 · · · Chapter 2 - Lets Play... Just You And Me... And Your Bed... ·

If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?

IAmBugHorse

IAmBugHorse #9 · Jul 29th, 2017 · · · Chapter 2 - Lets Play... Just You And Me... And Your Bed... ·

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That's a tough question... and I never really thought about that.

I can't really say what they would sound like, though if I had to guess, it would just be your every day male and female voices... except for the fact that Silver sounds younger than she is. (Why... well you can thank her ancestors for that. Though for right now we won't talk about that.)

So let's take into the account that, she's younger than James, yet she's older than 20 years, so her age would be around 21-23.

So taking that into the account she has to sound slightly more high-pitched than a normal woman in their 20s.

I'm not really sure if this answered your question, but it did raise a couple of questions for the future, for that I say thanks, I've been needing some thoughts for some future things and that helped a lot.

Latreas