A Sister's Love

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tyrantnyx

tyrantnyx #1 · Oct 9th, 2017 · · ·

Really sweet story. I like the way you write Rarity and Sweetie. I usually don't care for clop, but you wrote it rather tastefully. Really nice work here.

kingofqwop

kingofqwop #2 · Oct 10th, 2017 · · ·

The whole "This isn't forced onto her" angle was more ham-fisted then the walk in freazer scene from Rocky, and even then when she said "i won't force you to"(or something like that) it still left in the implication that her not doing so wouldn't be fair, so it was both excessive and inadequate at the same time; all in all, this was basically Sword Art Online in that it had a wonderful premise, and seemed to go out of its way to ruin it.

MetalJrock

MetalJrock #3 · Oct 11th, 2017 · · ·

8477172 Thanks.

8478993 I did overdo that angle, didn't I? Thanks for the critique.

kingofqwop

kingofqwop #4 · Oct 12th, 2017 · · ·

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Thank you for being graceful about it, even though i was overly harsh by saying that you went out of your way to make that aspect of it bad; in hindsight it was rather unneeded.

MetalJrock

MetalJrock #5 · Oct 12th, 2017 · · ·

8483651 You pointed out something that you felt was wrong with the story (the whole "won't force it on her" angle I took and repeated). So no harm done.

kingofqwop

kingofqwop #6 · Oct 13th, 2017 · · ·

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Yeah, i know that, but you took that really well; some types of people feel that they need to posture at the slightest sign of possible improvement, and on top of that i really should have made the point i was trying to make in a less harsh manner, so, again, thank you for talking the point i was trying to make as clearly as you did.

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