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Unwhole Hole
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Unwhole Hole
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Hmm....
I sense an analogy.
Great first few chapters, as always. As with "Desert Water" you have managed to build up a spectacular world for your tale, as well as convey the nagging feeling of a hideous, sudden end. I look forward to see where this goes, and I know I will not be disappointed
I already love the detail in this story!
I thought I should mention that Rarity's mane is violet, not blue
nO RARITY
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That feature is actually based on a historical figure who did the same. Also, I never realized that Rarity's mane was violet. I perceived it as blue, but then again I was the kid in elementary school who could never differentiate the purple and blue crayons if the labels were missing.
Also also, I had to repost your last comment with spoiler bars. I greatly appreciate your comments and feedback, and I am very glad that you enjoyed the story. I just wanted to make sure that the ending is not spoiled for others. I hope you do not take offense.
(Originally kindly posted by CatMote):
Oh my god... That double plot-twist hit me hard... Rarity wh y!?
This was well-written in all honesty, I never thought of having someone bathe in blood to stay youthful! I've heard of drinking blood to be youthful though. Fleur being the main villainess of this story kind of surprised me, and the ending with Rarity just killed me i n s i d e
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It's all good! I hope your story gets more views :D
Everytime I think I'm progressing as a writer I read one of your stories and realize I still have a long way to go.
This is really an amazing story.
Damn. I'm glad I'm actually going back and reading your other stories. That was a hell of a ride. You consistently mange to create some of the best horror stories I've ever read. Well done.
Growing up bad gives a reason to be a screaming asshole, its no excuse. Though, has anyone actually told her to quit it?
She was right to warn Sweetie, and she may have been worried, there was no excuse for her behavior toward her coworker.
Of course this is a horror story, so theres probably some really just reason for it and she's hella Fucking terrified/paranoid/worried for others(though the cliche horror story trope of the screamer being right tends to result in failure, because no one is gonna listen to a raging asshole)
Jesus Rarity, you defiantly have issues.
"Thank the Yellow Goddess!"
Uh oh.
Holy crap. This may be the most disturbing story of yours I've read to date.
This also solidifies, in my mind, that your stories, though lore-adjacent, are not set in one universe.
I've read this story several times, and each time it gets better than the last!
I only wonder, who was the all-white unicorn that only Sweetie could see? And doesn't Fleur say in a previous chapter that the ageless-ness only affects the female members of the family, not the male? I might have misinterpreted that lol, but it struck me as odd, what with the scene with Celestia and all.
Also, "Satin worship" is wonderful. Every time she's mentioned it just get's better. Did she have an effect on Fleur being as lustful/attracted as she was? Is she the one orchestrating this "eternal life," by giving the power to Celestia so that it may be passed down further? Fascinating stuff.
And!! I love the addition of Silver referring to "the yellow goddess!" Does this mean that he himself worshipped her too?