Atelophobia

by Ice Star

She Knows Not That Light Only Blinds

where something like stars dance around them
twilight sparkle and Her, the Sun Goddess
stand and almost float
in something like pure magic

as memories like check boxes on some Grand Plan
float on by
and Celestia talks with the passion of any ballad
of how proud She is
and twilight thinks she might die at those words
if she hasn't already

she worked hard, Celestia says
she used skills, not for herself
(the thought makes twilight cringe)
but for everypony else
she bettered equestria
not herself
twilight sparkle does not like to be selfish
because She says she should not be
and so it is

and twilight sparkle feels her own magic
and something much, much more
transform her
and make her almost-anew
and alter her
and everything twilight cannot fathom
(not that she would ever acknowledge that)
on her blind walk to
what she thinks is destiny
or has to be
where light shines everywhere
and cloaks her
(she feels that it illuminates instead of blinds, after all, it is the dark that blinds, not the light)
because when she looks around
at the ground of ponyville

She is bowing too
and twilight
is (almost) in Her image

Author's Note:

[This story was revised for print on 9/6/2020]

Comments

[Mira Starlight]

Again, quite creepy. I like it.

I assume you'll be doing one for Luna?

[Ice Star]

8160201 I might.

[Mira Starlight]

8160205
May I suggest a possible title?

Selenophobia. I have a feeling that for a while, even looking at the moon would have been painful for Luna.

It's just a suggestion, of course.

[Ice Star]

8160211 In Favorable Alignment, Luna's fear was said to be letting her guard. I've considered doing one for her, but I always thought FA has handled her fear rather nicely - not to mention I may have some more secret projects.

[Mira Starlight]

8160212
That's fine.

[Ice Star]

8160424 Another story of mine called Favorable Alignment. I call it FA for short.

[Ice Star]

8160498 FA very much so, this one not as much. There's no context needed.

[Ice Star]

8160513 There is! Just find the big Luna picture on my page.

[RainbowSparkle3]

Wow, this was a beautiful story/poem, my only complaint is that it wasn't longer. Good job on this!

[nebulaegalaxy]

You're so good at poetry

[Ice Star]

8165021 Thank you :D

[ScrambledCrackers]

This remains the only serious poetry ever placed in my Favorites shelf.

Personally struggling with Atelophobia myself, there is a lot hidden behind both the poem and the condition in question.

It also tends to manifest in either a panicked need to do more and better every possible second, or making every small imperfection seem a mountain range to climb for so little progress than even small journeys can become inordinately daunting. Most of us with it have to deal with the latter. It has to be perfect before it's good enough...but perfect is at a distance of infinity.

[Ice Star]

8747779

This remains the only serious poetry ever placed in my Favorites shelf.

Have you heard of 'Autophobia'? It's another serious collection of poetry by me that might interest you.

Personally struggling with Atelophobia myself, there is a lot hidden behind both the poem and the condition in question.

It also tends to manifest in either a panicked need to do more and better every possible second, or making every small imperfection seem a mountain range to climb for so little progress than even small journeys can become inordinately daunting. Most of us with it have to deal with the latter. It has to be perfect before it's good enough...but perfect is at a distance of infinity.

Thank you for taking something away from this! That's one of the things that matters most to me as a writer!

[Odd_Sarge]

Your poetry left me shivering and covered in invisible cobwebs. All of your works are always incredibly stimulating to my senses, and that surprises me.

[Ice Star]

9069246
This is surprising to me too.

Maybe it's synesthesia?

[Ice Star]

9167745
Thankies! I pride myself on a big ol' continuity and maintaining it. I have to give my brain a proper way to process writing-pony over reading-pony and this is it.

[Random Bits]

Aww, over already? I was really looking forward to the part where Twilight is disillusioned in someone's perfection - either Rarity's following "Love and Song in Victory's Clarity" or, even better, Twilight expecting perfection of herself after the ascension and struggling to achieve it.

[Ice Star]

9167783
Aww, well I'm glad you like it! If you want more, there's always... basically any of my other stories. Most tend to reflect this one as well, if they're in the personal continuity. Thank you for continuing to read!

[Icy_blue_orchid]

Guess we learned a lesson today. No one is perfect. We make mistakes and we fail. But we have to always try and try over and over again because failure is showing you a way to succeed in life and you will learn from your mistakes and failure to always try something else and not do the same thing again. Failure is how we learn and if we don’t fail we won’t learn.

[Ice Star]

10665840
Wow, no one has given this a read in a while! Thanks for checking it out and taking something away from it.

[TheOneAJ]

[Ice Star]

11196595
Thank you for letting me know this got a reading!