First person; a lonely man meets seven young women he'll never forget.
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Yay sunny and Twilight!
I love when this fic updates. I think I'm starting to see the direction it's going in.
The only flaw i see in this story is that it is ALWAYS told in Gold's point of view even when he is not around. Other than that and a few redundancies, the story is great!
Someone phones for a Black, Silver, and Red wedding motif? Just as the person who can recognise her voice is being distracted by a careful set up of multiple interacting customers, and they just announced everything to the bug in plain voice?
Sombra is impressively coherent here? Chrysalis on the phone?
With Coco being non Equestrian, is she going to be the cant do everything pathos? Or, like Gloriosa, Juniper, Wallflower and that social bint I cant be bothered to remember is there going to be an Equestrian Item Interaction that can be part of overall ongoing possibilities?
As for the light. hide the camera in the Starter, theres loads of room, a power supply, and when the lights on, a tranciever system as well. The Starte is usually the Only part of the non illuminating light thats accessible and visible?
The trick Ingram did with the data is basically old, thats why people know about it, because if you can use P Prime stenography in planar arranged N of M encoding over the counter, just what crypto and secure storage is currently available to the best. I thought I had seen something about sections of DNA have been shown to match to functions in computer code.
Recently anounced as well, Graphene Flakes in Gel. When water is present and liquid the material can flow, but when dry or otherwise non liquid, it turns rigid. The article didnt try the Silly Putty test to see if it worked like Dynamic Trauma Plate, but looks pretty identical at first sight.
Yay new chapter! Do more!
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I admit, telling this story in first person is something I wish I hadn’t done, but I’m kind of committed to it now.
And thanks!
I’ve been having trouble picturing exactly where you have set everything. I know The City is Vancouver, but where are Canterlot and Fluttershy’s place? I’ve been picturing Canterlot being around Coquitlam or Surrey and Flutters being somewhere further upriver like north of Maple Ridge. Close?
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Good question.
So Canterlot is obviously like Gotham City—a fictional place in the real world. “The City” in this story is kept anonymous; sort of a transition from the imaginary into the real. The reader can assign a real place to it if they like, but it can be fictional if they choose.
As for a pinpoint location, I’ve been intentionally vague about it, mostly so I don’t have to be too specific about the geography, which gives me a little more freedom to write it how I want. (plus I’m from Ontario and I’ve never been to BC, so I’m not too familiar with the area; I set it there just because that’s where the show is produced)
I will say, it is set closer to the Alberta border, and slightly north. (somewhere between Prince George and Golden, more into the mountains, with Fluttershy’s about and hour south of Canterlot) Put it this way: it was a 13 hour drive to Golds’ safe deposit box in Richmond—a real place, BTW—which is a part of Metro Vancouver, located pretty close to the US border.
rarity and sunset wearing black outfit? oh man plz let their be some leather ballbusting high heels with their outfits.....erm im not into s&m but I do have a foot fetish.....which id like to see in this fic....im thinking flutters has tiny feet.....also will we see flutters sing at all the one that was her singing in a recent short id love for her to do that song in front of golds
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You’ll probably like the next chapter. It was inspired by a comedy/country song, but I’m reluctant to post it in the author’s notes because the last verse goes off the rails a bit in terms of ‘political correctness,’ and I don’t feel like catching any flack for posting it.
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Aw, yeah, I forgot that the drive to the Lower Mainland was that long. I grew up in Blaine, WA about three blocks from the border and six blocks from Boundary Bay, so I’m pretty familiar with the Vancouver area. Or what the Vancouver area was like twenty years ago, at least. Especially between the ages of nineteen and twenty-one.
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Oh cool. You know the area better than I do then. My sister lived in Golden from ‘02 to ‘04 (I think). My best friend, who was in the Navy, now lives in Grande Prairie, AB. Other than that, I have no ties with that end of the country.
This reminds me: when I was writing that scene in Richmond, I was checking the street view so I could describe the area, and...the building with the vaults in it wasn’t there! This was confusing, obviously, since I double checked the address—AND the Asian market with the blue sign across the street was there (the same one seen in the background of IP Vaults’ commercial)—but where IP Vaults should have been, there was just a pile of blocks and dirt.
It turns out that the default search engine on my laptop is Bing, which used an outdated map and street view (2009). When I tried Google’s street view, BOOM! There it was. (I think it was taken in 2013, so obviously the vault was built sometime between 2009 and then)
Oh the unexpected challenges you face when writing a story! Those are the fuck-arounds that end up wasting a good chunk of time. Anyway, your comment about the landscape changing reminded me of that.
So... Equestria Girls: Watchdogs ?
Things are getting interesting.
Now I'm suspicious, who was that on the phone? Red, silver and black? Them's Sombra colors
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Whoa! I wake up this morning and find a half dozen new comments—all from the same guy.
I had to go to work though, so I didn’t have time to reply. So I’ll do it now.
You’re not the first person to bring the wedding colours up, which is interesting because I never intended that phone conversation to amount to anything. It was just some fun filler. Maybe I’ll change the colours to avoid future assumptions—at this point, the ‘Us’ arc is complete and I have no intention of revisiting it.
That convo with the customer was actually salvaged from a chapter that I scrapped. Originally, after the sleepover when Golds picked his truck up from the boutique, I was gonna do a bit where Rarity thought she blew the engine in the truck (which is why she was acting nervous about it at the sleepover, and also why she stopped driving it and parked it there). It turns out to be a slipped intake coupler—an easy fix—and Golds looks after it. Rarity feels bad anyway and brings him inside the boutique to give him a BJ from under her desk while he sits behind it. After having to talk to Coco—who is looking for Rarity—the phone rings, and Golds, being a smart ass, answers it and talks to the customer while getting his dick sucked by the boutique’s owner.
I had issues with it though. For one, Rarity is a professional and takes her shop seriously; plus, the tone shifted from one paragraph to the next between erotica and comedy, and I wasn’t digging it. It seemed like a good idea in my head, but the execution was lacking. I’m sure I could have spent more time on it to make it work, but ultimately I kind of felt that the whole thing was dragging the story’s pace down too much. So I took it out, added the part about the bald tires in chapter 90 (the week-long fuck fest) and downplayed her nervousness at the sleepover. After all was said and done, I shortened the story by 3 chapters by making that change.
Then this chapter came up, and I needed some filler, so I harvested that phone conversation—and edited out the blowjob stuff, obviously—and this is what we ended up with.
Have you caught up to the end or is this as far as you got?