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Our "Princess" became a Queen, and they're fucking scared of her over there. And this is clearly stepping in Fallout territory, with a super secret oil rig base funded by the rich and powerful, they were probably hoping to get a Frank Horrigan to be their unkillable super agent by capturing [Blank]. Instead they have SCP-96, ready to tear everyone there apart, while SCP-76 is waiting at home and playing Batman.
I really love this fic
8139213 I'm not familiar with fallout, but how similar are we talking? I hope I'm not inadvertently copying something that's already been done...
8139255 It doesn't matter if you're copying, it's fine. The Enclave, think of an organization formed by every kind of American conspiracy group you can imagine, funded by the rich and influential, be they societal, political and industrial, all of them are in it.
All of the funding they want
Hoard the best tech by making them from behind the scenes or stealing by killing for it
One of their bases was on an oil rig... in the Pacific
Had a super soldier as their main muscle for onshore legwork, who was hyped as unstoppable
Quite a few similarities...
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Uh, wow. That is actually astounding how similar this is. I swear it wasn't on purpose!
Technically , the base in this story is not the rig itself, it's actually under the water, and the rig provides fuel and an access point to get in...so maybe that's a little different. Also, ______doesnt actually work for 'us' either, so that's different. And originally I had 'us' as part of the USA government, but I didn't think it made sense after _____ and sunny became allies with the cia, so i changed it to being privately owned.
The rest, well...that's actually kind if embarrassing cuz there's no real way for me to prove that I didn't just copy all this shit.
I've had a lot of pride in myself for coming up with all this stuff on my own, along with a few ideas that some of the comments have given me.
One example, when sunny goes into the cia, I originally had her go in as spitfire, who was one of Daniels applicants, but after the hair dye chapter, booster spice mentioned face recognition, which I was just going to leave out until I thought of the human sunset shimmer, and I just had to use it. The chapter was already written so I went back and changed all the spitfires to sunset shimmers and added the fake out part in the car where she thought Daniels knew who she was. This is why human sunny was a pilot...cuz originally she was supposed to spitfire.
I just started chapter 64 tonight. It's been slow going, and I've been struggling to keep uploading very three days. U may have noticed the chapters getting longer, that's because I had a storyboard blocked out so I could keep it all straight, but some chapters have much more detail than anticipated so they are longer, and u can't split them up cuz it'll fuck up te flow of the story board. I also had to draw up a calendar for September and October of the year 2022, because with three separate story lines going now I couldn't keep straight what was happening when...and there are instances where time skips forward and back when switching from rarity to flutters and to _____ and sunny. I've also spent a lot of time on google maps so the travel times would be right...I tell u, this whole story arc has been a motherfuckin shitshow to write...and I'm not even close to being done
8139356 If only I had Samara's power like in The Ring and just reach through and hug you. Though such a thing would freak you the fuck out and lead to you beating me up as I'm halfway through but...
That's why I like your story, you've taken time with your work and did Deadpool's quote of "Maximum effort" to really bring out a very engaging story as we, the audience, are like some voyeuristic bunch spying from behind the veil of reality.
That got somewhat descriptive and very disturbing
Oh well
Hey, could you maybe title the chapters and not just list them with their number? I wanted to re-read some chapters but couldn't really find them and had to go through them and guess. I don't really know if it's too late now but I think the story could only benefit from it. Or do you have a reason for not titling them?
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I'll try to find time to do that. I've been having the same issue lately, when I'm writing a new part and I need to go back and check something for continuity, it's getting harder to remember which chapter had what.
Thak you very much for putting the time and effort into the reasoning behind what you want to use for the story. I hope you are keeping it backed up as well, and collected, such as one list has all the people used, another list has only good guys, another only bad guys, with chapter first seen or name of the list for each that contains which chapters they appear in alive, dead and other such cross linked information?
thanks for teh face recognition, but I only said that because the news had a Chinese hotel was using it to control how much toilet paper was being used, and I thought security would be even happier using it? that, and Ive been waiting over 20 years for it to work so I can have accounts billed on picking up items because it can tell who I am and what Im taking, to be costed for. Would be intresting for shoplifters. They either have money and pay, or the dont and an alarm goes off as they head for the door?
Poor Sunny, like OC, the more she practices and trains, the better she gets, and all this time shes been excersising her ability to screw unstoppably? Hopefully she doesnt just keep triggering heat. So many tries.
Rarity. So T-X. So into Yoga and other such youth enhancing classes?. Now she is going to move into Parkour, Shaolin and Kung Fu, with some Ninjitsu on the side?
I really want Sunset to be in Blank's harem. Also, it'd be nice if you typed Blank instead of using underscores. Easier reading flow, I suppose.
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The idea behind the ______ was for the reader to use their own name in its place, or any name they wanted, really. I found it off-putting at first too when I was proof reading, but now I just say my own name whenever I see the ______ without even thinking about it. I've gotten so used to it, in fact, that when writing new material, I've started almost typing my real name instead...so hopefully I don't dox myself one of these days by letting one slip by in editing, or you guys are gonna know my real name. lol
The potential issue I see with using 'blank' is that it's also a real word with other uses and could create some confusion or just downright weird sentences. Example: "I couldn't submit the form because blank the left the space blank." or "Blank gave me a blank stare."
Before I started writing, I thought about using XXX, but after testing it a bit, I didn't like how it looked so I went with _______ instead.
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About the face recognition thing, it was a few days after you left the comment, and I was thinking about how someone would beat it...then it dawned on me that we don't know where human Sunset is, so I decided to add the face scan to the story. I didn't NEED it specifically for the chapter to work, but I thought it was way cooler than using Spitfire...so I do appreciate the inspiration.
I still can't believe this Fallout thing, lol. My thought process for coming up with the oil rig base was: if I had billions of dollars at my disposal, and I wanted to build a base that was hard to find and get into, where would I put it? Under the ocean was what I chose, then I thought of how to power it...well, oil. So thought of the rig to be used for pumping generator fuel and as the way to get into the facility. Originally I envisioned it in the Atlantic, but because of the supply runs coming from the desert, which are closer to the Pacific, I changed it to the Pacific.
With the owners being the rich and elite, well I think that's a pretty popular premise. I used to watch conspiracy stuff a lot back in the mid-2000s, lots of David Icke and all that stuff, so that's why I chose that. You may have noticed in the chapter where _______ and Sunset were driving through Washington DC, he mentioned there being an owl sitting on a pyramid in the streets:
i.imgur.com/E2S0Pvp.jpg
And a pentagram pointing into the White House:
i.imgur.com/Cp3EQXN.jpg
That was from some conspiracy stuff I saw years ago. I don't know what it really means, but those things are actually there.
Thanks!
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A reasonable explanation for Oil Rigs in remote areas, is one being used previously as an experimental OTEC generator platform, where you moor it in 100-200 metres of water to the top of a sea mount, which itself is a couple miles high, above the deep ocean floor, and which has the large diamter cold water pipe attached to the rock of the sea mount for a mile or so down. Theres also deep ocean mining attempts and hydrothermal vent extraction. Given sea mounts are extinct volcano cores, Lets you build an underwater base inside a volcano, capped with an oil rig. Powered by everything but oil, but letting you have oil as a distraction as well. You can also look up Submarine Tankers. Someones bound to have a spare nuclear powered unit from the previous generation that was listed as scrapped or converted for experimental reasons.
Damn, you were definitely not lying to me when you said this was one of those stories, heh. This was almost masterfully written.
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I'm very curious to know what you were responding to here. Granted, you probably don't care to recover this info all this time later. Feel free to ignore this.