You know what would be great you're already heading that way but get him to treat Spike like a son and Spike to look at him like a father you're doing great by the way

8066696 He dose more or less at the moment.

8067045 damn good chapter, As with Lord of Bones the story will have some grammar and spelling errors. But those are easy to fix with time and proof reading, but unlike Lord of Bones were as it was your first story and the mistakes were easy to spot, at first, but as the story progressed and you knew how you wanted it to progress, you got better at writing the story. It became harder and harder to see the mistakes until near the end and when you uploaded Lord Merciless, thats when you had to specifically look for mistakes with this story and its chapters are so well written i had to go reread (Lord Merciless) it to spot them, thats how well written it is.

8067416 Thank you. I try my best to learn from my mistakes.

8068786 Your Very welcome

Grammar here and there yada yada yada. But ummm.....more chapters please. Life can get in the way, quite annoying at lest. Just hope you take a breather to put those fiNGERS TO WORK!

8141591 ... not going to with that attitude~

Nice story want more pls

"You get to sit on papa's lap".

That made me laugh all too hard.

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Damn and it was getting good too

hi the first story and this story so is he a hero or a villain?

So you have any expected finish date for the next chapter?

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Why not both?

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a Neutral

*Chaos ensues.*

Speaking of Chaos, what of Discord?

why cancelled ?

Why yis yit canceled?

I deeply regret that we're not even going to get answers for the many questions that the other readers have posted through this story, plus the ones you left unaswered.

Would it be possible to give us readers closure by means of a blogpost portraying what you intended with this story? Even a list of events showing what would happen later on would be most welcome to know how this ends.

Thanks in advance for your reply.

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.... Wow. Did I really leave an actual Fanbase on a now cancelled cliffhanger? I'm surprised my garbage story has gotten this much support...

Well, I think I'll answer all of those questions in a blog post since the pony people demand it so....

At a later date that is not at near passed out 8:00 PM At night...

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Fair enough.

And while you may consider it garbage, I think it could be actually polished to address the issues that many commenters have described that happened within the narrative while removing the signs of immaturity that are making you cringe - well, either by your hand or by giving it in adoption to someone who can actually fix the mistakes and errors in flow within the story.

A consequence might be the fact that the story might even change beyond your original intent. Villanous Celly? Seems common, but is most certainly non-canon.

BTW, thanks for considering about using a blogpost to allow some way of closure to this story.

Excuse me! Cancelled! Wtf why does every story that im interested in either cancelled or on hiatus (pretty much an unofficial cancel) ,

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Because I found this 'story' and its prequel to be garbage and eventually lost any motivation to continue it. Sorry to disappoint. I'm thinking of writing a blog about this soon.

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Lazy ass writer like most writers on this site

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Well, fuck you too. I didn't have a plan for it so it went nowhere. Unlike my other two stories, I plan to continue them. I am not a lazy writer, I am busy with not much spare time to be a writer.

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Yeah you are a lazy writer and you just making this yet not finishing it proves it quite clearly. Then again you are other incompetent to begin with and your most likely a whiny little kid who never knew his father. Witch it probably a good thing since he would be ashamed to have you as his kid who btw is a incompetent loser who can't finish anything he writes. And really faggot why write if you where never going to finish it? That shows your a lazy writer

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First off, there is no need to insult me or harass me with that name calling. Second, back those days (years ago), I didn't know what I was doing and still am learning. If that makes me a bad writer, no, it makes me an inconstant one. Now to this mess....

Then again you are other incompetent to begin with and your most likely a whiny little kid who never knew his father. Witch it probably a good thing since he would be ashamed to have you as his kid who btw is a incompetent loser who can't finish anything he writes.

You don't even know me, so don't judge me dude, you don't know anything about me or what the fuck I've been through. Hell, you don't even nail down down any of my past one bit. You here are the one being absolutely childish to even act this way in the first place. This is a site of ponies and friendship, not Xbox 360 game chat. And by the way, I actually did complete a story, a shitty one I admit and not up to my standards I have now.

And really faggot why write if you where never going to finish it? That shows your a lazy writer

No it shows that I'm still learning at the time and really man? Why are you so butt hurt that you divulge into ranting at me. Sorry you when to read a story and not check for it being canceled. And man, my laptop just broke recently and I'm typing from the local library to respond to your immature ass.

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Are you 12? Cause I'm trying to see this being said out loud...and it hurt badly

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Of course it hurts your small mind child it's your brain telling you are an inferior life-form just like this lazy ass writer who can't finish shit hell I bet he can't even jerk himself off without help from his mother

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wow, you do realize if you make assumptions your argument is invalid. And "inferior life-form"? When has this been used as a comback that actually works.

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Oh BTW shouldn't you be sexually molesting some my little pony plushie toy right now? Everyone knows how munch brony and furry faggots like yourself really love animals ;) but then again you are like a nigger so calling you an animal f***** is more than likely a compliment since your kind is derived from chimpanzees like the rest of the degenerate scum from Africa

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You're just a lazy ass writerwho can't really finish anything. And if you don't want to talk out inconsistencies I've seen more on this site than anywhere else then again most stories on this site are usually s*** any way he do if I usually find a handful of decent ones meet the handful of good ones to hear in there but some of the more stupid ones are funny within themselves if you particularly love s*** that makes absolutely no sense afterall
Why should things make sense to begin with

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and yet you are on a site for bronies, and I'm the biggest white guy in my circle of friends. So if you could leave the writer ( that is here to give entertainment ) alone, it would stop lowering some of our intelligence by reading what you think people are.

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You're kind of lowers your own intelligence just by simply existing or that making frequent trips to Walmart eh it's the same thing either way

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Jesus Christ. I don't think he will ever get it.

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If your traitorous ass thinks it can write a better story than put your money where your mouth is bitch and write one. If not then shut up and go back to taking your boyfriends D up your ass

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Don't you have a statue of a corpse God to jerk off to

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Tell me, how does it feel knowing you dont exist anymore?

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I technically still do since my mere name drives fear Into You Filthy Imperial peasants for my true name is not the warmaster it is indeed alpharius
;)

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And by the way the Blood suck major horse cock night Lords are better than them in terms of tactics and mere cosmetics Ave Dominus nox!
By the way here's a message from the iron Warriors Legion at least our primarch is still alive unlike your own angel boy ;)

Why is this canceled