Elements of Harmony are now faced up with a battle that the cannot win. The six now against their own country, now seek foreign help at whatever the cost. Even if it mean working with the successor of Malus Messor.
i advise you to plan out the story in your head before you wright too much, people can get stumped by writing with one chapter in there mind only to not have a second that could follow it up
7817412 she saw an old guy in a robe and attacked him with a massive spell, basically she didn't think about the ponies near him and ended up killing 20 or so innocents and almost killing rainbow dash, basically her usual solution is pointing at the villein and saying he did it, but for once the villein told the public exactly what happened and they took it well, also Celestia's tyranny was shown to the world and they connected twilight as an accomplice
7817566 Don't forget that Malus Messor broke Luna's sanity, brought Equestria into a Civil War, and single handily killed Celestia and made a massacre of her army. These things have a toll on her mind, but that will be explained in the next chapter. And while he might have brought all of this to Equestria, he is the only one that can fix it. Let's hope the ponies are good beggars.
7817412 First off, Twilight is the only one wanted for the murder of over a dozen ponies. And the rest are just trying to escape the chaos. More details will follow in the next chapter. Enjoy this Christmas Present.
there was about 15 grammatical issues I had spotted whilst reading this, great story but you might need to double check your story after completion of writing a chapter. 1 like to you sir!
7819287 Your cool in my book. You openly admitted that your grammar sucks, that takes some serious balls. I know of other people who keep denying that their grammar sucks.
7825520 It dose not take balls to see the full picture of the problem where others ignorance has blinded them. While I do know that I need to improve, I thank you for your complement. Besides, those that don't improve are those who see no problems. That applies to everything my fellow brony, remember it well.
Okay nice chapter, but why make Twilight and both her friends and family members criminals?
yay! death to the weak!
i advise you to plan out the story in your head before you wright too much, people can get stumped by writing with one chapter in there mind only to not have a second that could follow it up
7817412 she saw an old guy in a robe and attacked him with a massive spell, basically she didn't think about the ponies near him and ended up killing 20 or so innocents and almost killing rainbow dash, basically her usual solution is pointing at the villein and saying he did it, but for once the villein told the public exactly what happened and they took it well, also Celestia's tyranny was shown to the world and they connected twilight as an accomplice
7817566 Don't forget that Malus Messor broke Luna's sanity, brought Equestria into a Civil War, and single handily killed Celestia and made a massacre of her army. These things have a toll on her mind, but that will be explained in the next chapter. And while he might have brought all of this to Equestria, he is the only one that can fix it. Let's hope the ponies are good beggars.
7817556 Duly noted.
7817412 First off, Twilight is the only one wanted for the murder of over a dozen ponies. And the rest are just trying to escape the chaos. More details will follow in the next chapter. Enjoy this Christmas Present.
Good job keep it up can't wait to see the next chapter
there was about 15 grammatical issues I had spotted whilst reading this, great story but you might need to double check your story after completion of writing a chapter. 1 like to you sir!
7819277 I suck a grammar, but I'll reedit latter. I just wanted to give my followers the chapter as soon as possible. Ya know, for Christmas.
7819287 Yeah, its cool though, I really liked this chapter, I think this story is awesome so far. Keep up the great work!
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Your cool in my book. You openly admitted that your grammar sucks, that takes some serious balls.
I know of other people who keep denying that their grammar sucks.
7825520 It dose not take balls to see the full picture of the problem where others ignorance has blinded them. While I do know that I need to improve, I thank you for your complement. Besides, those that don't improve are those who see no problems. That applies to everything my fellow brony, remember it well.
So awesome
I hope Malus isn't gone for good, I like him.