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Grave Walker
"I am the epitome of an overdose. Living with retradily amounts of happiness and barely mentally functioning."
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Okay nice chapter, but why make Twilight and both her friends and family members criminals?
yay! death to the weak!
i advise you to plan out the story in your head before you wright too much, people can get stumped by writing with one chapter in there mind only to not have a second that could follow it up
7817412 she saw an old guy in a robe and attacked him with a massive spell, basically she didn't think about the ponies near him and ended up killing 20 or so innocents and almost killing rainbow dash, basically her usual solution is pointing at the villein and saying he did it, but for once the villein told the public exactly what happened and they took it well, also Celestia's tyranny was shown to the world and they connected twilight as an accomplice
7817566 Don't forget that Malus Messor broke Luna's sanity, brought Equestria into a Civil War, and single handily killed Celestia and made a massacre of her army. These things have a toll on her mind, but that will be explained in the next chapter. And while he might have brought all of this to Equestria, he is the only one that can fix it. Let's hope the ponies are good beggars.
7817556 Duly noted.
7817412 First off, Twilight is the only one wanted for the murder of over a dozen ponies. And the rest are just trying to escape the chaos. More details will follow in the next chapter. Enjoy this Christmas Present.
Good job keep it up can't wait to see the next chapter
there was about 15 grammatical issues I had spotted whilst reading this, great story but you might need to double check your story after completion of writing a chapter. 1 like to you sir!
7819277 I suck a grammar, but I'll reedit latter. I just wanted to give my followers the chapter as soon as possible. Ya know, for Christmas.
7819287 Yeah, its cool though, I really liked this chapter, I think this story is awesome so far. Keep up the great work!
7819287
Your cool in my book. You openly admitted that your grammar sucks, that takes some serious balls.
I know of other people who keep denying that their grammar sucks.
7825520 It dose not take balls to see the full picture of the problem where others ignorance has blinded them. While I do know that I need to improve, I thank you for your complement. Besides, those that don't improve are those who see no problems. That applies to everything my fellow brony, remember it well.
So awesome
I am likening this story more and more please continue, but i wonder if Twilights group is gonna find Durux Rex and his kingdom?
7850785 In due time.
agriculture, mining, automatons? be sure to go in great detail! he can be as op as anything but his kingdom must still run of sense and reality, how did he make automatons after such a short time? and how did the news get out about twilight and such? did Luna send out the word? happy to read as always ^_^
7851674
All in the next chapter my friend.
Answered throughout Chapters 4 and 5.
But if your asking for details, not gonna give ya any because I can!
I hope Malus isn't gone for good, I like him.
very nicely written compared to the others, but that might just be because i like epic exposition, but did Luna flee in terror of the ponies or rage for what her sister did and not wanting anything to do with Equestria anymore
also stupid ponies, the good lord simply made the tree of harmony what it truly is, harmony, harmony is not pure good, it is a balance of good and bad, the tree was a sham before, now it is the balance of the elements
7899829 Some one figured that out quickly.
You would have gotten a batch of cookies, but someone has been take them as of late....
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7899825 Well....
I really want to give ya an answer.... But I wont! 
7906702 you tease, now it sounds like it'll be interesting
7906696 well the symbol on it was kinda obvious, unless you've been living under a rock and never heard of the yin and yang, but to be honest the way you describe it makes it sound like it is more on the path of evil then harmony, the only good part coming from it is the magic being absorbed by the dark tendrils, mind explaining it in more detail to me? it sounds like a 3 point dark and 1 point good
7906913
Will be explained in future chapters, as well with your other questions.
7907143 thanks, keep up the good work and hold your ego high!
7879761 He was never gone. He's just reincarnated as Durus Rex.
7839432 Indeed.
7825520 Do you find anything interesting or questioning upon your mind when reading my work?
7818167 Thank you
I laughed so hard here.
7942772 That was intended.
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . I'm dead now.
Ach, I have a love/hate relationship with cliffhangers.
7942994 Oh god....
How did I miss that?
eh, kinda lost interest for this one, you skipped a large portion, such as them getting used to merciless and the building of the army, also the idea's and creation of the prototypes of the army, you skipped him making the lions, you also seemed to make zeke not care about malus, merciless basically said that all the evil was done by malus and zeke didn't even try to defend his good name, it just feels emotionless, more like reading a check list
just my opinion
7944181 Thanks for your input.
7948988 so next chapter? like it so far
Love it. More please.
8048961 What do you like about it?
You know what would be great you're already heading that way but get him to treat Spike like a son and Spike to look at him like a father you're doing great by the way
8066696 He dose more or less at the moment.
8067045 damn good chapter
, As with Lord of Bones the story will have some grammar and spelling errors. But those are easy to fix with time and proof reading
, but unlike Lord of Bones were as it was your first story and the mistakes were easy to spot, at first, but as the story progressed and you knew how you wanted it to progress, you got better at writing the story. It became harder and harder to see the mistakes until near the end and when you uploaded Lord Merciless, thats when you had to specifically look for mistakes with this story and its chapters are so well written i had to go reread (Lord Merciless) it to spot them, thats how well written it is.
8067416 Thank you. I try my best to learn from my mistakes.
8068786 Your Very welcome
Hey, man, when Merciless was thinking about giving them a break, the now is not bold.
Grammar here and there yada yada yada. But ummm.....more chapters please. Life can get in the way, quite annoying at lest. Just hope you take a breather to put those fiNGERS TO WORK!
8141591 ... not going to with that attitude~