sigh, twilight , do you really need to be a voyeuristic psycho

Finally to the meat and potatoes!

Lookin' forward to the results of their experience, seeing if it produced the results that Celestia is hoping for.

Anyways, carry on good sir.

What a shame.
Neither Celestia or Jon having a backbone, letting worst princess get her way when she's so obviously in the wrong.
This ruined it for me, completely.
5 amazing chapters that i had a blast reading.
Followed either way though.

7770103 It could be worse, she could have found a way inside the room without them ever knowing and take a few samples from them while they simmer down, and taste some of Jon's nut-made samples.

I'm believing Twilight is less sorry that she made a mistake and more sorry she got caught. It really put a damper on the sexy times and made it much less erotic than it could have been. Very disappointing.

Aaaaaaaaaaaaand BOOM GOES THE DYNAMITE! I knew I wouldn't regret reading this.

Bloody hell

Poor Twilight. Noone understands the trials she endures....all for the sake of science! No other reason, really!

A few corrections.

his cock was spend.
spent

yet felt soothing.Because of it
Needs space

“Full me up.
Fill

buttplug appeared.As Jon’s
Needs space.

It was a good chapter, most stories go strait to sex, but you sir, wrote true 'making love' the feeling is so much that you believe they love each other, more than just in the physical form. I have my fingers cross that the sperm, takes and Celestia gets a baby, it will be a nice ribbon to end a nice story

love this story and this chapter. this makes me actually hate Twilight a little in this story. really twilight the lesson you learned was got caught and punished and forgiven so this time better make sure I don't get caught this time?!?! And on a happy note I like how Twilight was actually punished instead of the normal thing of your forgiven as long as your sorry {though her actions say other wise} all is forgiven and forgotten no matter how many times you do it.

but all in all little big pony like I said love this story. hope to see more soon

Too lax of a punishment for Twilight brought this chapter down to 4/5

Dayum. Whew that was hawt.

Scitwi! Stay out of this, this is love, and its random and messy. Very messy
I hope a baby comes out of this! I wonder how you're gonna make the baby look....anthro? Or something else???
Looking forward for the next chapter!

Jon was right about Twilight. A shame, really, that she seems to lack any understanding of the importance of privacy for a couple in love.

alright, so when is some noble gonna steal celestias kid?

you have pleased the gods above we will spare your mortal life for now

but seriously update soon i really love this story

Twilight got off way too easy.

ok that is a thing. ok now ware can we all get that shot???

After so many cocktail blocks by twi, we finally get to the meat of it.
This story is great

7770745 Why would you want it? You don't know if there is a size limit to the amount of production. It could burst your testes., not to mention the incredible amount of pain you will be in...

Very nicely done.

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at 52 I would die a happy pony.

7770856 It certainly seemed to work for him..!

7769203 Oh no,he's not a troll. Because the majority of stories he favorited are dark af,or at the 2k-4k limit. You can click on him and click library to see it all.

Ah Twilight, thou truly are queen of the cockblock.

We come to it at last. I would of done the more randy version of 'come' for an intended pun, but fortunately that is b-low me.

Despite the clop aspect of this I am really hoping this ends in a preggers Celestia. Momlestia is the best!

Whether it's a human, satyr, centaur, or pony isn't important I for one would love it anyway!

No matter what she says, Twilight is SO getting off with this

Well, well, well... I hope the child is either a satyr/centaur or a good ol' pony. Although a Pegasus centaur would be hell to raise. Can you imagine the sheer amount of shenanigans such child could get herself into?

The sexy times where sexy as fuck, tho. Nice job

I agree with u too. also can't wait for the next uploaded chapter of the story

I dont see this as a troll fic. Nor do I see any reason why people call this a troll fic.

This fic is very good keep writing.

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This is awesome. I can't wait to see what happens next. I really do hope she gets knocked up.

You spoil us with daily updates. I await the next one, but damn each chapter is fantastic, better than stories that I've waited literal years for updates for.

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Ah dude in chapter 2, they explain that option, Celestia is just oppose to artificial insemination…that is probably the cause she almost drown in cum when she try dragons

I like a lot of things about this story, but what I don't like is your characterization of Twilight. You're essentially portraying her like she was in Season 1, but to an extreme: clueless about friendship, terrible at socializing, no respect for personal space, unable to take no for an answer, and obsessive to the point that she'll break the rules to get what she wants. This is not the Twilight that's learned and grown over the course of 100+ episodes, and it's certainly not a pony who could be considered the Princess of Friendship.

I've seen a few other authors paint Twilight in this light, and it always irks me when I see it. In this story, I get that you have Twilight here for a little lightheartedness and comedy, but to me, her actions seem both forced, and OOC. Yes, Twilight tends to get wrapped up her work, but not only are you portraying her as incredibly dense in her interactions with Jon, but her insistence on gathering data and watching (despite both Jon and Celestia REPEATEDLY telling her no) is coming off as inconsiderate, selfish, and borderline psychotic.

That being said, that's my only major gripe. I'm still enjoying this story, and I look forward to seeing how at all plays out. Take my criticism as food for thought for future writing projects, I suppose.

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They are portraying Twilight as a colossal pervert. A voyeur who may or may not have a thing for either or both of the happy couple. And it's not like Twilight doesn't have a track record for this kind of thing, even after her ascension she has a tendency to be a control freak. Is it overplayed for comedy? Perhaps, though not necessarily a bad thing.

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Really? I thought it hilarious.

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Oh she got off alright. Let's face it, there's no way she didn't watching that.

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Artificial insemination does not exist in Equestria, the means to do so also don't appear to exist. Jon does not have the adequate knowledge to teach them how to perform it, and from her first impression Celestia is vehemently opposed to the idea. Shining Armor might have been able to knock up Princess Cadence, but we're given to believe that Celestia is essentially a different breed of Alicorn so there is no guarantee Shining would work anyway.

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I'm sure it can't be that bad...

*Clicks link*

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A gross violation of a friend's privacy despite their repeated insistence is not funny. Twilight is ignoring their wishes despite being repeated told no. She is being portrayed as a person that doesn't respect boundaries of others, let alone both a friend and mentor. That's not a friend's behavior, and a princess ought to know better. Violating personal trust is certainly a bad thing. There's a difference between embracing a fetish and being physically and mentally incapable of self restraint.

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Just because you personally not find it funny, doesn't mean that it isn't. Frankly, Twilight's interruptions and spying ruins the mood, which I find hilarious because I know it will annoy lots of readers because of how jarring it is, and I love trying to guess when it will happen. Also, the fact that Twilight has had very little in the way of a comeuppance thus far, I'm sure the author is leading to some sort of payoff. Not to mention, there's no real reason to believe that Twilight understands boundaries as much as you'd like to think, since no one has ever really confronted her on it before. Besides, this is a story about a human man trying to impregnate an immortal, magical winged horse, a story where said magical horse admits to almost being drowned in dragon seed in an effort to get pregnant. A story where Twilight and said human get shitfaced on palace wine in the middle of the day because reasons and a pig fertility drug can make a man cum like a horse and effectively drive him into heat. Twilight's behaviour is far from the most bizarre thing in this fic.

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Yeah, this Twilight definitely seems to cross the line from "obsessive single mindedness played up for comedy" to "socially incompetent to the point of psychopathy". Worse is that she's utterly incompetent from a research perspective, as any novice in the social sciences should be aware of the observer effect.

But what I find far more shocking is her rather lackadaisical attitude to her own complete lack of medical skills. Dialogue indicated that needle was supposedly intravenous. Her magic and wings are disabled and she clearly has no experience operating anything with mouth and hooves. Does she let Celestia or a nurse or anyone with experience handling needles administer the injection? NOPE! Just slam that shit into his shoulder without even disinfecting the area! Seriously, this Twilight comes off less adorkable, slightly obsessive nerd, and more mentally disabled toddler who should not be allowed near sharp objects, but with frightening access to advanced magic.

That said, everything else about this fic is solid gold, and somewhere in the top 3 romance fics I've ever read.

My only regret on reading this story is that I cannot up vote 10,000 times.

This was fantastic and faptastic

Really liking this so far, it has a good story to it and buildup.

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Tbh, I'm finding perfidious purple pony perv Twiggles to be more than a little amusing. Even with the mildly horrific logical consequences.
That would be what the comedy tag is there for though.

More Twilight trying to fool herself collecting porn is for science please.

After reading the first chapter I have decided not to continue.
The main reason for that is that the characters do not feel natural to me.

For instance my first impression of Jon was that he wasn't actually serious about his fear of being murdered and merely talking shit.
However, as it later turned out he was actually being serious, which I found pretty dumb because this is not reflected in his actions.
Especially when the story later reads "He hadn’t been expecting anything close to this. This was supposed to be a simple visit. He was supposed to come up here, [...] and he was supposed to go home so he could get ready for work tomorrow" it does not fit at all and it greatly hurt my suspension of disbelief.

I also didn't like the writing, though that is arguably subjective.
For example I didn't like the frequent use of epithetes, and also I think that the author is using too many adjectives at times, for example when he uses five adjectives to describe celestia instead of one or two.

7771904 Okay... I need to point something out. Psychopaths are not necessarily socially incompetent. Rather, they are usually very charismatic, and are MORE socially competent than a lot of people.

Mmm... this was a fun chapter, hahahaha XD

“There’s a lot that we can’t do, since we don’t want to alter your seed through magical means, but we can increase the amount you cum.”

Now that... sounds awesome hohohoh

“Jon, please, I was just—”
“Get.”
“The needle wasn’t even—”
"The.”
“Now you’re just bein—”
“Fuck.”
“If you would just—”
“Outta here. Now.”

Holy fuck, relax kiddos. This is a story about the MC and Celestia. Not harming Twilight just because you uninvolved persons are morally outraged. If they're relatively okay with it, that should be enough for you. She's one of the people Celestia loves most in the world, and the MC's self-admitted best friend in his whole life, heck probably one of the asses he caught himself ogling at one point. She brought the two of them together and was the driving force behind making this happen.

Some anger has been rightfully shown, and she is testing her luck, but if you'd do more than take magic away from what is essentially the princess of magic, whose purpose in life is magic, former bearer of the element of magic (imagine being cuffed hand and foot for annoying someone and still having to go about your day helping them) despite the fact she's technically meant to hold equal office to Celestia (bunk, but it was in the show, so...) then you are spinning your own tales of disappointment and it is not the story's fault. You are the ones with the problem.

With a track record like hers and her essentially being responsible for all the best things in your life, punishing her harsher than this over just spoiling the mood a couple times is... kind of fucked up. The kids they have will spoil the mood a LOT more than Twilight is, just more innocently. Honestly I can see her getting away with most anything short of murder at this point, her contribution is too large, she both loves and is loved by both parties, and supports them through thick and thin. It's possible to even say both of them owe her their lives. Letting her off with a smacked nose for her indiscretions should be the most AND end of it.