I'm absolutely loving this story so far. So warm and fuzzy, the descriptions of everything and the dialogues... wonderful. Absolutely can't wait to read more
Oh my gosh. This dialogue, the growth building between both characters... I love this. Character development is such a treat; a delicious treat. You even gave us a little background towards how Jon first came to Equestria, though I hope there will still be more hints to come.
I saw a comment that someone previously posted from the last chapter - hoping that this story will go for longer (like 10-15 chapters) than 3-5 chapters. I can't help but agree and second what they said. I also find myself hoping this story won't be short. I've loved what I've read so far and bit by bit I find myself looking forward to more!
7762805 I know right? That's why I love stories likes this -- originality, creativity, and something I can relate to as a person. It's hard to find stories like this because nowadays all I see is the same bullshit Anon name and Anon character/stereotype.
Okay, this is just damn friggin awesome in how well the first three chapters have been written. Seriously. You've given the human a real name. You've given him believable character flaws and strengths. Basically, you have made him completely believable and very likable. And you have shown us a side of Celestia that the show will not show, and you've done so in a manner better than most. You have even done extremely well with Twilight, portraying her in a very fun, but completely within canon, way.
Kudos for a job well done so far.
One thing that I would love to see is a prequel story, telling the readers about how Jonathan first arrived in Equestria, and how he slowly adapted to, and became a part of, Equestrian society.
the pacing, the character building, the relationships, the fact that jon didn't just say yes in the second chapter and automatically become a clop story, these are all very great things and i look forward to more. I love how you made twilight sleep like that...reminds me of my school days
This story here is one of the most high-quality Celestia fics I've ever laid my eyes on. The characterization is spot on for every character, canon and original. The structure of the writing is smooth and elegant for the reader to pay attention for long periods of time, and still get great entertainment out of it.
I can't simply wait for more of this story and what it'll unfold. This story will be on my sights until its completion.
As the founder of the group, Human on Royally, I recommend to any that has a special heart for sunbutt to check this fic out.
At first I was, "JUST BANG ALREADY!" and then I fell in love with the pacing, the characters and background. You are creating something truly special and I am humbled to be in its presence.
well that is pretty dark "im immortal and have done literally everything possible, except child birth. i will most likely never experience that" how the hell do you respond to that?
"That rule was simple: If you were warm and comfortable in a bed, you were obligated to stay in that bed until forced to leave." -The most important rule EVER
This is really a breath of fresh air into this site and fanfiction in general. I hope this is a good, long story. You could probably spend chapters upon chapters merely on conversations like this and your readers would still be enraptured.
See, this is right up my alley. It's not just 'hurrhurr, they fucked' but proper character buildup, flowing dialog, and proper emotional tone throughout. Very good job!
The slow pace, romantic build-up, just makes it much more fun to read and to look forward reading the next chapter than just rushing all of it in just one chapter, like some other fics do. You sir are making a great job so far, keep it up, I command you.
ok it is time for me to post a comment. I am really liking this story for a few reasons, yes this is a clop story but in like most (not all) this author is taking the time to lay down a super strong story line first. he / she is giving a reason for the clop (helping a princess full fill any woman's life long dream watch my x go threw this hate her love the children). at the same time put your self in Equestria we (humans) are razed to believe making love to animals is wrong but are the pony's animals? is this wrong? I have my own opinion about this but that is the point it is my opinion (opinions are like ass holes every one has one). I am getting a feeling about this story and I am really liking it. at this point you little big pony defiantly get a up vote from me and I must say it is a rare thing for me to vote this early in a story. agene I am liking the lack of clop in a clop story it is a good thing to have a author take the time to really lay out the ground work to make a truly good story. ok it is early here time for more coffee and me to stop rambling. good day all and clop on.
Ya know what? The fact that this has A TON of great build up and emotion as opposed to just pure blatant sexual gratification makes this story one I'm proud to leave a comment on.
Loved the part about not leaving a warm, comfy bed. Especially not when you're being snuggled and wing-hugged by a furry white princess.
I am SO following this story! I've gotta see the rest. It's actually well-done, unlike some romances which either resolve the build-up too quickly or have little but sex involved.
You aren’t animals, you’re people like me. I’ve realized that, and I’ve been doing my best to stop thinking like that.
And this is actually why he's still having issues. He's elevating his perception of them to humans, not lowering his perceptive of humans to the level of a sapient animal. This causes a dissonance in the mind that creates a barrier between his self image of what constitutes a sapient being and an animal. They need not be seperate.
In short, he still thinks of himself as seperate from the animal kingdom. Something most humans tend to, sadly, suffer from due to various anti-scientific cultural influences.
8308984 Why wouldn't we be xenophobic? We have never seen, let alone mingled with, any other sapient lifeform. That is going to affect how we deal with extraterrestrial beings - we would need to see if they had anything reminiscent of 'humanity'. Plus, there's always the threat of violence, especially since we would likely be technologically inferior (we don't have interplanetary travel down, yet any aliens that visit us would - who knows what weapons could come from that level of technology?), so being wary would be wise.
As for the 'racism' thing...well, to be blunt, we still have issues with differing skin colour or facial features, despite the fact we're all anatomically/biologically the same. That issue is going to be compounded when a completely-new being is added to the mix; as much as I don't like it, I see aliens being discriminated against and feared all because 'they're not human'. Even if said aliens had been completely peaceful and understanding and such.
So yes, unfortunately humans are xenophobic and racist, as much as I hate that fact.
She gave his hand a gentle squeeze...HOW ? Celestia's in heat, but they don't have to rush, as she does this twice a year. They don't have to do IT now. They can wait.
Comment posted by DarkPhoenixx deleted Mar 10th, 2020
Oh sweet, more romance buildup.
Oh my God I just finished reading the first two chapters and then it updated that was amazing!!!!
Really quite enjoying this... Trying to take notes for my own projects...
The pacing in this story is so perfect it hurts. Love the chapter and love the way you build up the characters in this story. Keep up the Great Work.
I'm absolutely loving this story so far. So warm and fuzzy, the descriptions of everything and the dialogues... wonderful.
Absolutely can't wait to read more
I love this chapter a lot keep updated when more chapters r uploaded to ur stories thanks my friend and that includes every one
Hahahaha, I freaking love this story already, its hilarious and I love it!
Also, pony butts~
Nice show.
This was a well-thought and well-written chapter.
It's like the author read all the fimfic romance novels and said, "This shit sucks, I can do better!"
...with all due respect to the other fimfic authors who wrote romances...*cough*
I had a hunch this would be a good read, but it's a Really good read.
Eagerly awaiting next chappy.
Im loving the pacing of this story :P Very well written individuals with Cele and Jon; not rushing, and just easing into the situation.
Keep it up!
Oh my gosh. This dialogue, the growth building between both characters... I love this. Character development is such a treat; a delicious treat. You even gave us a little background towards how Jon first came to Equestria, though I hope there will still be more hints to come.
I saw a comment that someone previously posted from the last chapter - hoping that this story will go for longer (like 10-15 chapters) than 3-5 chapters. I can't help but agree and second what they said. I also find myself hoping this story won't be short. I've loved what I've read so far and bit by bit I find myself looking forward to more!
Is it bad that I've had this exact story idea in the back of my mind for a while now?
Shachza, you're a sick perv, aren't you?
Yes...
But the image of Celestia taking a full-body 'shower' by planting herself directly in the line of fire...
7762805 I know right? That's why I love stories likes this -- originality, creativity, and something I can relate to as a person. It's hard to find stories like this because nowadays all I see is the same bullshit Anon name and Anon character/stereotype.
Okay, this is just damn friggin awesome in how well the first three chapters have been written. Seriously. You've given the human a real name. You've given him believable character flaws and strengths. Basically, you have made him completely believable and very likable. And you have shown us a side of Celestia that the show will not show, and you've done so in a manner better than most. You have even done extremely well with Twilight, portraying her in a very fun, but completely within canon, way.
Kudos for a job well done so far.
One thing that I would love to see is a prequel story, telling the readers about how Jonathan first arrived in Equestria, and how he slowly adapted to, and became a part of, Equestrian society.
7760080 They can't handle the burn.
the pacing, the character building, the relationships, the fact that jon didn't just say yes in the second chapter and automatically become a clop story, these are all very great things and i look forward to more. I love how you made twilight sleep like that...reminds me of my school days
This story here is one of the most high-quality Celestia fics I've ever laid my eyes on. The characterization is spot on for every character, canon and original. The structure of the writing is smooth and elegant for the reader to pay attention for long periods of time, and still get great entertainment out of it.
I can't simply wait for more of this story and what it'll unfold. This story will be on my sights until its completion.
As the founder of the group, Human on Royally, I recommend to any that has a special heart for sunbutt to check this fic out.
Love this story and jons fascination with Celestia getting it on with a dragon
Awesome cover pic too!
At first I was, "JUST BANG ALREADY!" and then I fell in love with the pacing, the characters and background. You are creating something truly special and I am humbled to be in its presence.
well that is pretty dark "im immortal and have done literally everything possible, except child birth. i will most likely never experience that" how the hell do you respond to that?
"That rule was simple: If you were warm and comfortable in a bed, you were obligated to stay in that bed until forced to leave." -The most important rule EVER
Bravo. I have a smile on my face.
7763398 here here
... Did you craft this story from marble? This almost feels like a professional wrote this awesomeness! Keep making it! It's awesome!
7762820 Oh so you are alive
7764000 "I like trains."
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i dunno if that would be an acceptable response, but it made me laugh
This is really a breath of fresh air into this site and fanfiction in general. I hope this is a good, long story. You could probably spend chapters upon chapters merely on conversations like this and your readers would still be enraptured.
See, this is right up my alley. It's not just 'hurrhurr, they fucked' but proper character buildup, flowing dialog, and proper emotional tone throughout. Very good job!
so, when are they gonna fuck? (kidding)
7764105 I'll be sure to leave a Trigger warning next time, Nancy.
What an interesting story. Fantastic work. Love the pacing and the character build up. Looking forward to the next chapter.
readin it for the Plot
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Fav'd, tracked and tumbed
I hope we get more soon!
Pfffffffft, what does she know? I've done it since I was four, and look how I turned out?
Wait, shit, she's right.
7765627 As one who's been emotionally dead for about 20 years, I agree. Feelings are for the weak! I wish I had them
The slow pace, romantic build-up, just makes it much more fun to read and to look forward reading the next chapter than just rushing all of it in just one chapter, like some other fics do. You sir are making a great job so far, keep it up, I command you.
ok it is time for me to post a comment.
I am really liking this story for a few reasons, yes this is a clop story but in like most (not all) this author is taking the time to lay down a super strong story line first. he / she is giving a reason for the clop (helping a princess full fill any woman's life long dream watch my x go threw this hate her love the children).
at the same time put your self in Equestria we (humans) are razed to believe making love to animals is wrong but are the pony's animals? is this wrong? I have my own opinion about this but that is the point it is my opinion (opinions are like ass holes every one has one).
I am getting a feeling about this story and I am really liking it.
at this point you little big pony defiantly get a up vote from me and I must say it is a rare thing for me to vote this early in a story.
agene I am liking the lack of clop in a clop story it is a good thing to have a author take the time to really lay out the ground work to make a truly good story.
ok it is early here time for more coffee and me to stop rambling. good day all and clop on.
Harts Fire
Ya know what? The fact that this has A TON of great build up and emotion as opposed to just pure blatant sexual gratification makes this story one I'm proud to leave a comment on.
Loved the part about not leaving a warm, comfy bed. Especially not when you're being snuggled and wing-hugged by a furry white princess.
I am SO following this story! I've gotta see the rest. It's actually well-done, unlike some romances which either resolve the build-up too quickly or have little but sex involved.
For science, of course.
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And this is actually why he's still having issues. He's elevating his perception
of them to humans, not lowering his perceptive of humans to the level of a sapient animal. This causes a dissonance in the mind that creates a barrier between his self image of what constitutes a sapient being and an animal. They need not be seperate.
In short, he still thinks of himself as seperate from the animal kingdom. Something most humans tend to, sadly, suffer from due to various anti-scientific cultural influences.
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Thank you for explaining, in so many overblown words, that humans are basically xenophobic and racist.
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Why wouldn't we be xenophobic?
We have never seen, let alone mingled with, any other sapient lifeform. That is going to affect how we deal with extraterrestrial beings - we would need to see if they had anything reminiscent of 'humanity'. Plus, there's always the threat of violence, especially since we would likely be technologically inferior (we don't have interplanetary travel down, yet any aliens that visit us would - who knows what weapons could come from that level of technology?), so being wary would be wise.
As for the 'racism' thing...well, to be blunt, we still have issues with differing skin colour or facial features, despite the fact we're all anatomically/biologically the same. That issue is going to be compounded when a completely-new being is added to the mix; as much as I don't like it, I see aliens being discriminated against and feared all because 'they're not human'. Even if said aliens had been completely peaceful and understanding and such.
So yes, unfortunately humans are xenophobic and racist, as much as I hate that fact.
Relatable.
She gave his hand a gentle squeeze...HOW ? Celestia's in heat, but they don't have to rush, as she does this twice a year. They don't have to do IT now. They can wait.
Нет он слишком много строит из себя!
I know why they 'need to know each other', how else would you shove romance in there.
But the answer to every problem they've got is so goddamn simple... just turn off the lights!