Damn, Twilight as hypnotic assistant is ultra sexy. Two ponies per room should make this next step interesting.

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Just realized that sentence was vague, they each have individual rooms. Sorry about that. Will change the wording

hmmm.... could be Pinkie, we've already had a little bit about her. Hmmm....

I kinda want to see Starlight hypnotise Trixie too. Like, Trixie tries to play Starlight against Twilight like in the show and to punish her, Starlight puts her under. She could give her to Sunburst as a gift.

It was all too much. Twilight and Spike were all hers, mind and body. They would never betray her, never abandon her

Just wanted to say how much I appreciated this part, good insight on why Starlight is doing what she's doing.

Very engaging chapter, showing Star's full control over them and what she can make them do. Seeing all of the work that goes into hypnotizing them and her mindset about it is truly fascinating. It's also intriguing to see how hesitant she is about telling Twilight the truth, even if Twilight will continue to stay by her. It shows she may regret this to a degree. I'm looking forward to seeing Star and Twilight hypnotize the Mane 6 and how Star's development will continue.

I'm appreciating the hints of Starlight's potential redemption here - finding that she wants Twilight to believe the cover story almost as though her believing it could make it true... It makes no difference what Twilight believes, so it must be about what Starlight herself thinks of it.

Possible endgames: Starlight releases her slaves, and they persuade her to keep them after they've had time to adjust to the deprogramming; or Starlight comes clean to Twislave who uses her deeper understanding of hypnosis to make Starlight feel better about things (either banishing her conscience (bad end) or helping her be who she was pretending to be (good end))

I loved the part where Star explained how she was slowly molding Rarity. I can't wait to see how she deals with the others.

If I were Star, I would be very careful trying anything on Fluttershy. She may seem like a perfect option, but in reality, she's a sleeping giant who could mess you up pretty fast. Not only does the girl wrestle bears and stare down dragons and fly through tornadoes, but she is probably the most adept of any of the Mane 6 at following subtle cues and understanding other ponies. Then there's The Stare, which we still don't know how it fully works, but it's a true magic all her own.

I would start with her hands and feet. She uses those a lot to interact with her animals, feeding and caring for them. There might be an in there for Starlight to convince her of the 'logical extreme' that she has a hand and/or foot fetish, making her susceptible to play that uses that as an element. Taken far enough, it might make Fluttershy feel uncomfortable due to not understanding why her extremities are suddenly so sensitive, making it difficult for her to use them properly, except when Star and Twilight help 'teach' her how to accept the feelings and even revel in them, wanting to explore new ways to touch and experience the new sensations.

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Ah, that makes sense. I was wondering how she would handle two at once.

The hints that she is not comfortable telling her slave the truth make me wonder where her development will lead.

Also Spike's brainwashing seems to be coming along nicely. Love that Twilight is learning to hypnotize people, since that opens up a ton of possibilities. I wonder what Spike will be like fully enslaved; we haven't even seem him "awake" since the dinner, though presumably he still can act normal when they're not alone.

“I suppose.” Star giglged back,

GigGled.

“Of course, MIstress.”

No need to capitalize the I.

Oh this chapter was beautiful. Star emphasising her complete, full control over her nicely broken toy and soon to be broken toy. Best part being the complete lack of remorse. Sometimes it's good for evil to win.

8405589 Ahhhh. Because of a certain someone in Star's life. Very, very nice catch, there.

I hope its AJ^^

Moar please.

I wonder if she'll let Spike have the real thing someday?

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I strongly disagree, i hate how every story needs to come back to redemption.

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Sometimes, it's good for evil to win. There's not enough of that, and it's always so delicious when you do, finally, get it.

You and your friends will only be truly complete and happy when you submit to me, but none of your friends realize that yet.

That is perhaps the scariest line in the story.

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It's interesting - there are hints that Starlight may be having doubts, but she's still wants to bend the whole mane 6 to her will.

" you'll have to wait till next week to see who Starlight is preying on next"
It's been over a month, I'mma shaking, I need my fix.
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No but really great job, can't wait for more.

That was an interesting reaction from Starlight at the end there. It seems she didn't take into consideration her own feelings and how real they are and consequently how real the source of those feelings may not be. I love Glimmy but I'm kinda hoping this fic ends with her near suicidal as she finds herself surrounded by people she loves and adores and will never be able to trust that they feel anything real for her. I've kinda got a sick sense of humour like that.

Wonder if it's too much to hope for a Halloween update?

Seriously, I find myself checking nearly every day to see if there is a new chapter up.

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Sorry I've been leaving you deprived ^^

I'm feeling optimistic about this upcoming week. There are good odds we'll have a new chapter by Halloween. It will not be Halloween themed, of course :P

and let out a happy shutter as

Star giglged back

“Of course, MIstress.” Twilight beamed. “Who are we going to visit?”

I counted four errors, but these were all I could find while quoting.
I think your dialog could use more commas when addressing names, and hyphens when exclaiming.