Huh. I think I got punished for publishing two chapters in close proximity to each other. The update isn't showing up on the front page.

Well it showed up for me, I have this story being tracked after all, also is Celestia now Twilight or Starlight's slave, also what about Sunset, will she find out what happened to Twilight at some point?

8111338 The Celestia here was just in Twilight's mind and has no relation to the 'real' Celestia. It is just a manifestation of Twilight being enslaved fully.

As for Sunset, I can't promise anything. I guess we'll just have to wait and see.

8111342 OH, okay then, because if Celestia found out what was happening I bet she would BLAST starlight into the sun itself for what she has done to her student.

8111327 okay I see the story on the update page now, guess the website was just running slow.

Nice hypnotic metaphor. Can't wait to see the results.

My only concern for this story is that its going to have a "Bad ending" where starlight gets away with everything shes doing. FiMC did a Twilight realising her mistakes and trying to fix them and I liked that a lot. Here Im woried we might not get anything like that with starlight and she will just "win".

Wow, quite an imaginative and detailed way in showing Twilight surrendering her values and mind to Starlight. Very deep and emotional in how she was able to gain the support from her mind's versions of her friends and Celestia, glad that she is making her own path, even if it may be wrong. It's gonna be fun, exciting, nerve wracking, and engaging to see where things go from here. Twilight has lost and Obedience is Magic.

8111449 I would not mind this having two endings, one when she won and one were she loses... We'll just have to see what happens...

8111517 Yes, you'll just have to wait and see

The story is far from over, so you may have to wait a while, but it'll be a sexy journey. The ending is planned out and it should be a very fun ride to get there.

I like the library in the mind, and is not like it's the first time, I can remember a old MC as Nightmare did something similar to Twilight, only without giving her the chance.

I'm really enjoying the story... Also, I've read the first part of "Friendship is Mind Control" and I have to say, this is quite different from that story. It does not mean it is any less meaningful and in fact stands on its own very well. I quite enjoy it.

Also, I really like how you switched POV to Twilight. You did good on writing it out and I like how you portrayed Twilights mind.

At this point I'm just waiting to see what will happen with Twilights friends, I know Rarity is somewhat controlled. I would like to see how Twilight will help Starlight slowly still the minds of all her friends and make them perfect little slaves.

8111525 Always a good thing! Planning ahead can really take a story far!

8111528 If you find a link to that I would not mind reading it lol....

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Part of what's nice, or at least sexy, about this one is the protagonist is pretty unconcerned with the wrongness of removing free will, so you get brainwashing like this chapter rather than the protagonist backing off or restraining herself.

8111545 Sure, if you are bored you can check it...

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/41146/twilight-revised

8111746 Thank you!

Chapter 9 (plus 9.5) was so unbelievably sexy. I absolutely loved how you portrayed Twilight's final induction and brainwashing. The imagery of placing a collar on each of her closest rolemodels was great.
I'm very excited to see the external result of this brainwashing.

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This, 100%. I love FiMC for a lot of reasons, but sometimes it's nice to have a protagonist (or rather, villain-protagonist) who simply goes out there and takes what they want, no moral conflicts. And it's sexy to watch them win.

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Now that's a blast from the past. I think that might have been the very first MC story I ever read on the site.

mental suicide

8112429 An interesting way of putting it. Losing ones free will can be equated to a death of the mind, but one that you can be potentially restored from. Part of Twilight was aiding and abetting the process, but only because of so long being slowly manipulated. We all do things from time to time that we think are right but are actually counter productive.

Unless something changes, it's definitely the case that everything Twilight does or thinks is because Starlight willed or permitted it.

Holy shit.
Gratuitous expletives are the only way I can express the emotional intensity of this. To know that Starlight's gone so deep, to watch Twilight surrender every separate level, and while doing so feeling that it was what she wanted ... You really took your time establishing exactly how perfect Starlight's control is, and I respect that. I'm so scared for Twi right now, and I haven't been so afraid of Glimmer since the S5 premiere.

I hope spike is messy XD

8117697 I take your comments on the last two chapters as high praise :)

I sure hope Twilight's got some sort of plan here.

This weekend is right in the middle of finals, so the next chapter will be delayed by a few days and release around the 9th or 10th.

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Good luck with finals!

8143371 Things took a bit longer than expected so the next chapter won't be ready till the weekend, but it's coming!

This weekend needs moar hypnosis!

I really love this story! It is beautifully written and it is a very good story line. I'm very excited to read the next chapter!

Sorry to get into GRRM scheduling with this next chapter. It's almost done. This next chapter is a big moment so needs to be just right. And I can now declare that a bonus will come with this delayed chapter too. Not a chapter bonus this time, but something else.

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No worries.

It's coming.....

The chapter we've all been waiting for will be posted in a couple hours

8127498 she does. She plans to obey Starlight without question, forever

I wish my boyfriend would do this to me.

I stayed up late just to read Chapter 9 plus this. Wow. I haven't felt so... so hot in a long time. Mind control and hypnosis/brainwashing is a big, big kink for me, and you nailed it so perfectly and so thoroughly... wow. Instant favorite. Very, very well done.

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Currently re-reading the whole series to make sure I can work with it properly. You mentioned that there is a planned ending; can you do a summary of where it finally winds up?

this was a really amazing chapter, and im glad we got to see it. Twi handing over her own mind in such a way felt more profound than it could have been, and im so glad you chose this method of doing it.