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Damocles23


I write what makes me happy. Hope it makes you happy as well!

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Xanni #1 · Oct 30th, 2016 · · 1 ·

You used "coily" several times, and they should all be "coyly" - in a coy manner, not "like a coil".

Interesting, well writer and enjoyable to read! Would read again!

WTF AUTHOR?! THAT WAS TOO HOT!

-blows on flames-

It's great to see this posted!:twilightsmile: And....yeah I'm going to have to agree with Eldunarlan here, that story was almost too hot

Your story could use a small editing pass; I noticed several spots where you used words that clearly didn't fit the context of the sentence: like "subsumed" instead of "subsided".

But overall I liked it :pinkiehappy: Blossomforth doesn't know what she's giving up :rainbowwild:

This was a great story, I always love an r63 member of the Mane 6 dating one of the other mare members.

So... Where are the berries?:applejackconfused::derpyderp2:

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This man asks the right questions :pinkiehappy:

8229577 Do you have the berries?:rainbowhuh:

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