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Dimensional Librarian


Storing knowledge and stories slowly churning some out into semi readable works.

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This story is a sequel to The Living Energy Rifle


Vinyl Scratch and Octavia finally have comes to terms with living with each other. They have learned that they love each others company. While Octavia doesn't want anything to change Vinyl wants a foal. The only way to do that is to get a spell from Twilight Sparkle, Princess of Friendship, and use it on Tavi's piano.

Meanwhile Taissy the daughter of Twilight and Fluttershy is on a mission with her Drones to learn about a mysterious unicorn stallion that she noticed at the wedding.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 9 )

Pretty good! A little bit fast, and a couple of punctuation/spelling errors, but good!

I... don't know how to react to this so I'm going with neutral (no upvote and no downvote)

My thoughts: Structure could use improvement, so does the flow. (It isn't bad to the point that I'd downvote you XD)

As for the story, I really can't judge based on a thousand-word chapter introduction, but man, that talking baby colt just creeped the hell outta me.

EDIT: Dem tags tho too.

6952994 It might make a bit more since if you go and read the two stories before hand

Also I'm trying to practice on my Structure and Flow :rainbowlaugh: it's the whole reason I actually am trying to come over my fear/dislike of writting

6953014 Holy sh- I am sorry I did not see that there was a prequel to this. I was just browsing the "new stories" in the main page and ended up here.

6953018 Lolz That's fine I actually really like the critizim

This was an interesting chapter. I liked it

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