“Bring every last one of them to our doorstep, then drag them to hell with us!” That was the plan. We know nothing of peace. Equestria knows nothing of war. With the monsters we brought to their kingdom, we must now both adapt or become extinct.
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Okay. I am back after so long. Been doing other things in the meantime, writing related. Some things not. But I am here to offer another review. Got my music on and I am ready to go!
Let's start.
Drapes are a good way to go. I'm sure the king would raise a lot of questions if he brought in two talking magical ponies. Random thought, but for some reason I could see the king having a beard. Don't remember if you described him having one or not. But I think it would fit him. Beards and kings just go together. Anyway, back to the story. Well the king seems jovial. Kind of a contrast compared to how Raiden seems to imply about him. But that could bely some ulterior motive.
Well things seem to be going well, and then BAM! They talk! Okay the king's reaction is again contrast to some earlier comments Raiden had been saying. But maybe he has two sides? Anyway, the artist line was a good addition. The king must be paranoid. I mean what could an artist do in regards to stealing a throne? Unless he planned to build an art based empire, forged from his own ambitions. Okay. I'm being a bit silly.
Okay, I get it. The king is lying. Wow. The king turns out to be a lying greedy bastard. Character whiplash right there! Okay, reached the end and I must say, the king is a mean bastard. He appears to be a tyrant and honestly, I hope someone overthrows him.
Now overall this was another short and sweet chapter, but it delved a lot into character. Namely I felt the strongest was the king. You portray him as a nice guy early in this chapter, but quickly you delve him into being a cruel paranoid tyrant. Though, honestly, I doubt his conquer Equestria dreams probably won't end well. I mean Celestia and Luna are pretty much goddesses in terms of power and status, so I doubt the ideals of one power obsessed man will amount to anything substantial. But I suppose I shall see.
Well overall a good chapter.
Oh very clever idea. I'm interested to see where this goes...
OH senpai Hurrand... <3 *blushlestia*
Oh gosh Emeris you moron why would you even...
ohhhh good
Huh, that is simple and intriguing
Oh. Dear. Good detail, though. shows a lot about the king in a few sentences
An awesome ending line :D
Wow, the king's an a-hole. I bet he's gonna get his eventually...
Really liking the setup! I can see where some of the political intrigue is going with this, and yet still not sure of how the king is going to do it. Gosh, this is getting really good!
7359257 your a good analyst it seems, tell me. why does he not behead the king? he was thinking about it before, no one in the entire kingdom would stop him and.....why? why doesn't he just do it? is it so the story has conflict?
Simply put, their king needs to die, now.
Really?!
Oh boy....
I have mixed feeling about the king, do they plan to kick out as king... Very strange relationship this kingdom has with its ruler and people
To kill a king is to kill a kingdom. I say torture this king to death. Pretty sure no one would miss him. At all.
Yeah I've definitely read this before, though I never finished it.... well, time to correct that haha
Also, Hurrand must die. Simple as.