“Bring every last one of them to our doorstep, then drag them to hell with us!” That was the plan. We know nothing of peace. Equestria knows nothing of war. With the monsters we brought to their kingdom, we must now both adapt or become extinct.
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Writer's block can sometimes lead you to places. It can make you stuck, and it can make you think. But I decided to take a break from chiseling in order to read some more. Let's start
So far Luna is all Raiden can think about huh? And the scene with the fillies, it really reminds me of childhood when you encounter someone new. Overall it is a cute scene and it shows Raiden's lighthearted side. I assume he has one despite living in a world of constant war. And the cuteness continues as they all appear before him. Raiden really is good with children. That is both surprising and not surprising. I mean Raiden appears to be a good guy so it makes sense he would be good with kids. And the kids acting all curious about a new creature.
And in comes Luna. So they go for a stroll and we see Raiden is still a little flustered around her. And I can see the chemistry is going well. I like it so far I gotta say. And I can see that Raiden is torn between telling the truth or being loyal to his king. It's a tough choice. I would probably say tell them the truth, but Raiden was raised within the kingdom and thus it would be hard to shake off what they have taught him. And loyalty to his fellow soldiers. In all he is kind of in a no win situation. I mean could you imagine if war broke out between the humans and the ponies? Could be one sided considering that they ponies have greater numbers and magic.
Well I am going to close out today. But before I go, I just wanted to say the strongest character here was Luna. Her playful side really shined and it was really good to see that considering usually in the show, she is so serious. Raiden would come in a second place in terms of standing out in this chapter.
Well keep up the good work my friend.
Aww that' cute that he's playing with them :)
Awwwww this is really sweet, but also very sad and says a lot about his life
OH my gosh you're so good with all the flirty stuff between them. It's adorable to watch :D
The two characters voices are within the same paragraph again. Just a little tricky to read, that's all :)
I reallyyyy like this level of deduction. Very good catch on Luna's part. It's fun to see smart characters do their stuff :)
I really like that Luna is portrayed in this story as a very observant, very perceptive individual in all the right ways. I like even more that Raiden is trying to find a way to get past all the lies, no doubt because of how much he cares about Luna.
Gosh dang Luna's a flirt! :D It's adorable and probably really frustrating to Raiden, which means it's entertaining to us, the readers!
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Another fantastic chapter! More great development between Luna and Raiden, but also shows Raiden's softer side with how he plays with the colts and fillies. That was really sweet :)
It could be one way or the other Raiden...who knows.