“Bring every last one of them to our doorstep, then drag them to hell with us!” That was the plan. We know nothing of peace. Equestria knows nothing of war. With the monsters we brought to their kingdom, we must now both adapt or become extinct.
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Wow, what a dick.
Calm down Celestia....
Good luck you guys!
Those two hate each other's guts!!!
It'll be funny is that all the Griffins,yaks, and minotaurs coming to save them.
Uh...WTF?
From last chapter:
Seriously, these jumpcuts are becoming stupidly hard to follow. What the FUCK happened after they entered the Growler?! How far apart are Ponyville and Canterlot? Where the FUCK are Twilight and friends for so fucking long?!
How the hell did Lucretia survive 2 weeksmonths5months after they arrived in Equestria if that plant only grows around the Taraskan castle? Unless it has some widespread use, there's no way they'd have that much stocked up.
Someone will do something, but the same paragraph is someone else talking. Scenes go into the next with barely a transition. New chapters stopped being fun to read because I have to wonder what happened in-between chapters! The trial was the worst offender with the random recess because Celestia randomly became exhausted, but this is a close second.
This war has gone on too long against an overwhelming force, so much so it's no longer interesting to read about. As if this is the third mission of Starcraft 2:Wing of Liberty, where you are stuck with Marines, bunkers and medics, but the Hyperion hasn't arrived yet an hour into the mission...
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First off, the Og Nag eat fallen soldiers.
With the rest of your comment, I was confused about what you meant, read back through and saw that there are pieces missing and now I'm super confused on how that's possible. Give me a few to figure out why this version is different than my google docs version and I'll get back to you.
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Mmk, there we go. Retcon cause for some reason my final version didn't get uploaded. i think I chose the wrong document when posting.
Big Mac and his train of Lanceroes finally hit their own snag. Too many bodies litered the ground for them to run. Big Mac skids to a stop when he can't get up the walkway. his units start calling out to him as Og Nag jump from the pile of dead, onto what remained of Lancercore. They kick wildly and do their best to fight back. (Then forget where it said they got into the Growler. I gets explained later as well. It's all corrected but I wasn't going to ask you to reread the chapter for the new info.)
The plant would die, but the cream she makes will stay good for a while. She ha d asmall stockpile of it with her from the last time they were at Taraskan palace, but don't forget that the entire city was teleported, ground and plants with it. So Taraskan castle still has the weed growing.
Celestia got tired during the trial because she's insanely stressed out. She's having to manage the castle, watch her entire world get obliterated and now her citizens are talking about kicking out Taraska, all with some shady asshole leading them.
As far as having any issues keeping tack of who's talking or what goes on from each chapter to the next, please point them out so I can fix them.