Chapter 46: A Life Not Forgotten
"Lucky, wake up. I think today is the day!" The monster said in an overly cheery voice. I looked up into her bright golden eyes before spitting in one of them.
"Go to hell you fucking bitch." I said calmly. She wiped the spit from her eye while keeping that same damned smile.
"That was very rude, Lucky. It's no matter though; you're being punished soon anyway." She said as he damn horn ignited.
"I'm going to make you regret pulling me here when I get out." I said as my skull began to feel as if it had been crushed by an elephant.
***8 months ago***
"Chance? Chance, are you alright?" The horse in front of me asked with concern in her voice. I just nodded my head while looking out the window.
The street below was filled with even more of these magical horse things and almost all of them had horns. A chill ran up my spine just thinking about them. Why did I have to be the one pulled into this god damn place; why did it have to be me instead of someone else? A horse with wings flew by the window which interrupted my train of thought.
"This place is so weird." I commented which seemed to get the horses attention.
"What's so weird about it Luc- I mean Chance?"
"For starters horses don't talk where I'm from." The horse started writing something down on the clipboard in front of her after I said that. They all act so weird around me for some reason.
"Why wouldn't they talk?" She asked in a rather gentle tone. Why do they act as if I'm made of fucking glass? I may have been tortured, but she didn't do any lasting damage to me.
"They're not, what's the word? sapient? sentient? Whatever, they can't think in a way to form a language. People are the only things that talk so you are kind of freaking me out." I said calmly while brushing everything off. In all honesty I was freaking out on the inside since I wasn't allowed to roam around without one of these horses with me. They think that the horse thing will come for me if they're not, but I still can't shake the feeling something is wrong here.
***Inside Chance's mind***
"That's not the right one. Grr, where is it!" Jungle growled as she stomped around inside my skull. I wish I could just kick her out, but I have absolutely no way of throwing her ass out. Every time she pulls at a memory pain explodes throughout my body and I'm powerless to stop it.
"Please, just stop and I'll find what you're looking for." I tried pleading, but she decided to yank out another memory instead of listening.
***6 months ago***
"I'M HOME!" I yelled throughout the country styled house that I was currently living in. "You here, ms. Jubilee?"
"Home already?" Ms. Jubilee said before sticking her head outside of the kitchen door. "I didn't realize it was four yet."
"School let him out early today. How are you by the way, Cherry?" Arrow asked as I ran up and gave Ms. Jubilee a hug. She returned the hug before picking me up in her hooves and putting me on her back.
"I'm good. Chance has been a real help with sorting the cherries. He's the perfect little helper." She said happily while reaching up the pat me on the side. I crawled away from her hoof and made my way to the top of her head and where I snuggled into her hair.
"I reject your hoof and claim your mane as my own!" I said while hiding inside the red ball of fur. Both Arrow and Ms. Jubilee gave a small chuckle while Arrow pulled me out of her mane. I flailed my hooves around wildly in an attempt to free myself. "Put me down, pony! I must claim that mane for the mother land!"
"I don't understand half the things you do, but you're just adorable, Chance." Ms. Jubilee said as Arrow carefully set me down on the ground.
"I'm not adorable! I'm handsome." I said as I strutted into kitchen to help make supper.
***Back to Chance***
"Hmph, I see you were able to trick so many ponies, but I know what kind of a monster you are." Jungle said as she tossed the memory aside and proceeded to search around my mind. The complete lack of respect from her infuriated me, but I couldn't use my legs let alone anything else to force her out.
"You keep saying I'm a monster, but who's the one invading someone else's mind? Who's the one with a complete lack of empathy for another ponies life? I believe you're the monster here." I said which caused her to yank out a random memory and toss it aside just to hurt me.
"Not nearly as much of one as you. Ruining my life is one thing, but defiling my son's body is a whole other situation." She said with disdain as she pulled up another memory for her sadistic pleasure.
*** 5 months earlier***
"I did it!" I cried happily as I threw my hooves into the air while a small fireball danced around me. "Fuck you science, I have magic now!"
"Will you stop swearing in ever sentence?" Arrow asked with a deadpan expression.
"I'm doing better than when we first met. Besides, I think finally being able to control my magic should give me free reign to say something." I replied to Arrow as Ms. Jubilee walked up to us.
"It's time to head inside, Chance. Thank you for watching him for me, Arrow." she said as I began walking back towards my home...heh, it's kind of weird thinking of this as my home when I'm still trying to find a way back. Maybe I don't need to get home as soon as I thought I should.
***Back again***
"Making yourself at home in my son's body, aren't you?" Jungle said with disdain as we were back in my mind.
"You're a fucking psychopath," I simply said as she pulled up a more recent memory.
***1 month ago***
I sat silently in Button's room while he played his game. He's gotten really good at this game in only a day when it took me at least two to beat that damn taurus demon. I grinned to myself as he kept on playing the game without a care in the world. I really wish he didn't have to deal with me though, he doesn't deserve it.
"Button?Chance? Are you to ready to go on the picnic?" Loving called from the bottom of the stairwell. Button put down the controller and happily skipped along to the door with me still sitting down.
"Aren't you coming, Chance?" He asked which caused me to snap out of my stupor.
"Hm, yeah." I said while faking a smile. I was thinking about everything that happened since I came to Equestria and how much I screwed up. I got up from my seat and proceeded to follow Button down the stairs where everybody else was waiting in nice clothing by pony standards. "What's with the get-up?"
"It's time for a new family photo, and we were going to take it before we started our picnic." Loving said with a smile on her face.I kept my smile up while I had an internal battle in my head over acting happy for them. They were nice ponies so I couldn't drag them into my problems when they didn't need to be so I kept my mouth shut as we left for a nice plain just outside of town.
When we arrived, Seas set up the picnic blanket while I just sat in the field looking off into the blank distance. I still don't see why they were so adamant about me coming along for this picnic when I'm still new to them. After another moment I felt a gentle hoof lay on my shoulder.
"Come on, Chance. It's time to take the photo," Loving said while nudging me to get up. I gave her a questioning look before asking,
"Isn't this a family photo? I don't think you want me in it."
"Nonsense, you are part of the family, Chance." She said while nudging me again, "now come along."
Arrow showed up soon after and after a small confrontation and some pleading on my part, Open allowed Arrow to take part in the picnic. I even convinced them to let Arrow be in the photo!
***Back to now***
"It's disgusting how you've twisted the truth to make you seem like a victim!" Jungle said as she tossed that memory aside like it was nothing. That was one of the only memories I wanted to keep!
"Get out of my head, NOW!" I yelled which caused her to look towards me with an unamused look.
"Why should I listen to a monster like-" An unseen force began pushing against Jungle until she was thrown outside of my head.
"AND STAY OUT BITCH!"
I want Justice as quite frankly Chance is becoming less sympathetic every time he submits to his temper, so vengeance would just screw him over. As for the ending I want Another Chance as I want Chance to stop endangering others by clinging to the past and just be happy.
Justice, and FUCK INSIGHT, and Celestia, they are too big a pair of idiots.
Therefore, either Chance or Loving.
DAH! I want more!
Fix everything.
...okay, that's awesome.
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but what do you choose as an ending?
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I'm kinda stuck between
5. I'll Fix Everything.-
and
3. Another Chance-
on the flip side, the one i want to read the most is
2. Our Greatest Failure-
But in no way do i want that one to be the canon ending, that would just be depressing
...still want to read it though.
6714311 another chance.
Justice and I'll Fix Everything.
I vote 3.
wow no one wants vengeance ?
6713892 Thank you for your vote. Also, I see your points and am glad that you're thinking about the reaction of everyone instead of just chance.
6713912 Are you talking about ending 4 and 5? If so then thank you and I'll add it to the tally.
6714285 What did I do wrong? I'm joking, I'll add your vote to the tally.
cant he have both?
6714311 Sorry, but you have to pick one. I'll take the other two into consideration, but you only get one vote on that.
6714452 Thank you for your vote. Have a ruthless sun goddess
6714550 Thank you, and may I say that you are quite the gentleman good sir.
6714617 The number 3 wasn't an option! I'm adding your vote to the tally.
6714719 Do you? I believe most people just want it to be over for Chance, but they don't want him to go to far with ending it.
6714735 Vengeance and justice? As Big mac would say, nope.
I actually think this was a very good chapter; of course it could have been better, but you did a very good job in setting the different moods of each scene. The flash back of period of Chance’s stay in Equestria shows some of the good times that he had at least and that it showed that he did do a genuine effort in trying to get along with them with all little hearth warming moments. But,( here come the bad part, it won’t hurt… much ) I think that it could have been better if their where also some of the bad times thrown in to make a contrast like the first few times that he saw Jungle Vine trying to clamed that she is his mother. the intense disagreement that Chance had with the psychologist like Insight about trying to plead his case that he is a human, the disperse that no one believed him, the time he nearly burned a pony alive, the attempts of trying to convince chat that it was not his fault, All the teasing that he go from school for his weird taking, the fight with Cold, the disappointment that he felt from his other foster parents, the talk with Insight about the mind wipe spell to have the chance of living a better life. These would have been a good way to show the contrast of emotion of each scene and show that Chance has hit every lows and highs in in this roller-coaster of emotion that he got trough. I personally liked the family-photo scene. Of course as usual I would have liked to have had more detail on the scenes as well as the felling that chance felt at those moments but I guess you can’t have everything. I might also have been good to see that during the mental probing of Jungle Vine into Chance’s memory he would have started to see that he is getting desperate in trying to find a way to make her stop her tortures, all they while reliving the moment as if he is reliving them, and the a feeling stars to develop and finely finds a way to shut her out of his mind. This could make a good rundown of every thing Chance went trough and make this a good recap before the final show-down.
That last part could also be used for when Insight is going to try and use the mind wipe spell on him and either managers to directly keep him out or that he can somehow make a backup of his memories and over a short time he gets them back and he is scot free to find a way to save his brother.
For the ending I prefer bitter sweet endings things have gone bad others better than it would have been expected but the feeling is clear that it is time to move on with life. I would think that it would be best that Chance confront the Fire Deamon but ultimately failed to save them and is nearly is captured by it along with maybe Button but sees no other way to end the situation then to burn the book and sees Combo, Arrow(en can still come back seeing that it has been barely more than a day that he was separated from his body), Ryan fade away and Lucky get the chance to see his mother one last time. I could imagine that Button tacking the book and try to bargain with the monster to free his brother back but is tricked and chance arrives at the nick of time to get him out. Chances see that that he is clinging to a hopeless cause that could drag every one he cases for and burn it.
I will go with my choices in order would be
1 I would love to see Chance becoming the big brother that button want and need, Chance would have the chance to someone to book up to. it would a better sweet note to end it
3: it would be great to see Arrow become a big brother for Chance and seeing that he has been his only support rock in all this turmoil.
2: I have rary seen a HiE that ends tragically and might be a good send off for all the wild ride we got from it. But seeing that their is a crises in their hooves with arrow I I would be curious to see how it turns out in such a bad ending.
4: Sadly we have almost never had a chance to see any interaction with Loving, It's hard to have an attachment to her so late in the game despite that last good scene and I can's see how it would be compatible with the others to ending.
5: I don't feel that a completely happy ending is in order with this weird wild story that is has been and it would feel just as a rush ending that would feel fake to especial how rush the story is in general and Chance didn't work his ass off to find a solution.
and I go for vengeance, It alway more fun when when the situation is personal and leave more room to recklessness from the protagonist.
But in the end I would like you to surprise me.
Gonne vote 3 here
2, definitely 2
nah i just want it to be over for him as well its just that usually there's at least 1 person craving some retribution on these things
Número cinco (5) justice for his brother! Also lock that bitch up!
6714834 One thing, I didn't mention what the chapter titles meant. I believe that ending 5 is not what people expect it to be.
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6715492 Your votes have been added. Also it's both nice and horrible to see someone vote for a bad ending.
6715799 alright, I don't believe you've voted yet though. So, what ending would you like and how should Jungle be handled.
6715492 You got gust to be willing to see this ending through
Justice and ending 3. I still want my happy end!
6715859 You're vote has been added. I think I should go ahead and add my vote with it.
6715799 Vengeance is more fun in my opinion, as it often allow more morally ambiguous actions from the character perpetrating those acts and the repercussion of his actions that would come later make to bite him in the ass and end-up regretting it, giving more possibility for drama to the story.
I don't understand why so many people prefer number 4 Loving did not have much scene time compared to button and Arrow and we didn't really knew that she liked him that much? why is that the case?
6715889 4 only has 1 vote mix-up and it's 2 half votes.
6715896 sorry my mistake, never mind what I just said
6715900 It's fine mix-up. It's an easy mistake to make.
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I'm game.
6716034 I love people how is not afraid and willing to explore stories that don't necessarily end well for the main characters. I sure love these stories.
I already like your SIEG EQUESTRIA! story being a big Gundam geek myself I am happy to see someone how doesn't just show the Zeon's like a bunch of stuck-up Nazi and show the war in a different light. I'm looking forward to see your next chapter. Also i does the guy pilot a MS-06J zaku, MS-06J2 zaku or MS-06F2 zaku? just to know
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5. I'll Fix Everything.-
and Justice
what can i say, i like happy endings
Edit:
wait
6715834
hhhhhhmmmmmmm
nope. still pick 5
6716475 There we are...I'm bored now. Entertain me monkey!
6716490
Watch this a personal favorite
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6716509 You did good entertainment monkey. You live another day.
Justice and I'll fix everything.
6716840 Adding to the tally. Thank you for your vote sir
I'm leaning towards Justice, and 3 and 5.
Although if I'm only allowed to pick one, I'd choose 5.
6716856 The tides have turned! Looks like 5 is leaning towards becoming canon.
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Holy you replied fast lol
6716870 When I'm on I try to reply as fast as possible to everything.
I'm switch from ending 1 to ending 3. their is no way I will allow a complete happy ending for everpony. somepony will have to pay steep price somewhere to beat the Fire Deamon on such short notice. A complete happy ending for everypony just feel just too fake for me to be of any good for all the good rollercoster of emotions this story had.
6717103 Alright, I'll switch the vote now.
6716874
Good policy