Chapter 2: Tutorial (hehe puns)
"How much further?"
"Not much farther,"
"But I'm hungry!"
"Don't act like a baby," Loving said to a disgruntled Arrow who had been trying to hurry up and get Button so that he could eat at some bakery in town called Sugar Cube Corner. He would go on and on about he used to love going there when he lived in Ponyville a few years ago, but since he grew up here I didn't hold it against him even when it got a little annoying. Loving Care however had a whole other opinion on it, and constantly would tell him to stop complaining about having to wait.
I however was content to wait for the food as complaining about it would only serve to annoy Loving, and make me think about how long ago it was I ate. My stomach however had different plans and growled letting everyone within a ten foot radius know it's displeasure in being kept away from food. Arrow looked toward me before saying,
"See even Chance is hungry. Maybe we can just go ahead and-"
"We're almost there so you can stop complaining Arrow," Loving said, cutting off Arrow before he could continue with the idea of getting some food without Loving's son. A small old time looking school house appeared as we were walking; I was just going to guess that since this town looked like it belonged in a history book that the building was probably the school. It was really simple in design, just a basic square with one of those small tower things at the top that contain the bell.
Speaking of that bell it began to ring and many fillies and a few colts started to rush out of the building at break neck speeds. One of the colts however had seen us and waved toward loving with a smile on his face. He was a little smaller than me with brown fur and a kind of orange hair with a propeller hat on. When he walked over toward us he gave Loving a big hug before looking over to me and Arrow,
"Mom, who are they?" he asked
"Button, this is Lucky Chance. He will be staying with us for awhile." Loving motioned over toward me, and I gave a small wave to let him know it was me she was talking about. He looked me up and down, analyzing every minute detail about me before speaking,
"Why are you wearing a vest?"
"Because they wont let me wear pants," I said giving him a smile before continuing, "I prefer to wear something at least."
My response seemed to be enough for him as he turned toward his mother, and told her about everything that happened that day at school, every single thing! I did my absolute best to tune him out until he I realized he asked me something else,
"Hmm... I'm sorry, could you repeat that"
"I was just asking if you liked video games," I actually wasn't prepared for that question as every family I stayed with wouldn't let me near those arcades I saw. I remembered playing plenty of games back home, but I wasn't exactly good with limiting myself to a reasonable amount of gaming as I would spend most of my day playing them. Button though was still waiting for an answer so I gave him a nod to signify that I did enjoy them.
This answer seemed to put a big grin on his face as he started to name off various games that he liked playing which all resembled games from back home. I didn't even ask when he talked about an old school game called Mareio, and just pretended that it wasn't a horrible horse pun of a gaming legend.
"Button, honey. I think Chance is tired after his trip from Manehatten." Thank you Loving Care for getting Button to stop talking. I could go on and on about video games, but Button here didn't have an off switch when it came to them. Normally, I'd gladly continue this conversation as well, but Loving was right; I was still tired from the trip from Manehatten, and all of my panic attacks from earlier had taken a lot out of me.
"Psst... Hey Chance," Arrow was trying to whisper toward me, though he wasn't exactly good with keeping his voice down as he was essentially talking at his same volume, "When we get there, can you get Loving to buy me a Super Duper Splatter Milkshake?"
"I am NOT spending fifty bits on a milkshake!"
"But...But... It's awesome, and I don't have the bits,"
"You're lucky I'm buying your food in the first place. The last thing you need is that milkshake anyway,"
"What's that supposed to mean?" Arrow asked before I patted him on the stomach to signify what I believe she meant. He looked at me with a frown while I was grinning up at him before saying,
"Don't worry, just cut out the soda and you'll get much better,"
"I don't even drink soda that often!"
"I know, It's not like I'm much better," I said as I patted my stomach while chuckling a little, "Not at all"
A large building that appeared to be made of various sugary food came into view after we walked for a few minutes. Arrow and Button both seemed to become possessed by Sugar hungry demons as they both rushed ahead of me and Loving only to stop when they reached the door and realized that we were still halfway down the street.
As we approached a group of three fillies covered in chocolate came out of the building with disappointment of their faces. I don't know why they'd be sad I mean they're covered in chocolate one of the most beautiful things on the planet! One of their faces however seemed to brighten up when she saw Button, but quickly turned away when he looked at her and waved.
"So... This is a bakery? I'm kind of worried that if I go in a witch will eat me,"
"What?" Arrow asked which resulted in me face-hoofing. Never face-hoof kids it hurts a lot more than a face-palm.
"It's an old story about two kids who go out into the woods and find a gingerbread house. I'm not going to tell you the entire thing though" Taking a step into the building I was immediately hit with the smell of chocolate, donuts, and other baked goods, and I could see all of said baked good behind a glass showcase. My stomach rumbled at the sight which caused confetti to shoot out of a nearby trash can with a pink mare flying out of it.
"HELLO," The pink mare practically screamed in my face before jumping across the room landing behind the counter. I was surprised, confused, and still freaking starving all that the same time so I didn't question what happened and just accepted that these horses are also confetti ninjas.
"Can I get...-"
"Ooooh, you're new in town! You must be the new colt Loving is taking care of"
"I suppose I am... As I was saying can I get-"
"I'm Pinkie, and I-"
"Please let me speak,"
"Whoops, sorry I talk a lot more than most ponies care for because I just talk and talk which amazes most ponies because it seems that I never take a breath, and I never realizes that I'm talking too much unless somepony tells me I am so-"
"You're talking too much, Pinkie," I said which finally got the overly energetic mare to be quite long enough for me to order something from the many, many sweets that they had for sale at this place. Arrow wasn't able to get the Milkshake he wanted, but he did get one that was bigger than my head which in all honesty should of taken him longer than four minutes for him to drink.
I however was eating my food at a slower pace so I could actually enjoy it though Button's staring was making me uncomfortable. I understood that I was new to him, and I was going to stay with him for awhile but I could do without another shadow. I finally had enough of it after maybe ten minutes of his constant staring,
"What?" I asked which came out with a bit of a hiss slipping into it. Arrow and Loving glared at me while Button shrank away before whispering,
"Sorry,"
"Sorry, I just don't like being stared at. It makes me feel like people are judging me," Arrows glare softened a bit after my apology and reasoning. He probably remembers how bad I was when one of the fillies back in Manehatten made fun of how I spoke; It's not like I was hurt I just didn't want to talk to anyone for awhile...
"Oh... I'll just, um"
"I didn't mean to say it like that, Button. You can look at me just don't... just don't stare, please" It's hard for me to speak to new people especially when I get annoyed and say something that I don't mean, but I don't want Button or Loving seeing me as someone who will get angry at everything.
After awhile we eventually finished our food, and began heading toward where I would be staying. The house was relatively similar to all the other building around with it being two stories with a few windows and a garden out front. Arrow decided that this was the time for him to leave for his friends place where he'd be staying for as long as I was here.
Entering the home I looked up to Loving who was still looking at me with a slight angry expression, but I didn't blame her after all I did get angry at her son when I had only just met them. She lead me through the house passing various rooms until we arrived at a door at the end of the hallway.
"You will be staying in Button's room until we can get the guest room ready for you" She said in a rather flat tone. Button walked in first with me following in after him; his room had a large T.V. against one of the walls with what looked like a Nintendo 64 connected to it. Normally I'd be excited to see one of those, but after screwing up so much in one day I just wanted to go to bed and forget about my day.
"Hey, Chance. You want to play mareio world?" Button asked with two controllers next to him.
"You really want me to play with you?"
"Sure! I like playing with somepony else"
"Even with how I acted earlier?"
"You don't like being stared at. It's not like you got angry for no reason,"
"Sure, Button I'll play a game with you." We played various games through out the night while Button talked about various things he found interesting while I listened, and told him various things I liked. Maybe I was quick in assuming that he would just be one of those ponies that would only annoy me.
Now I'm curious if there's a ponified Conker's Bad Fur Day.
...
Or if you'd even NEED to ponify it.
I definitely would be wearing something but not the something you might think.
I would wear saddle bags. I've lived too long with pockets, going anywhere without them would be madness. MADNESS I SAY!
Also your grammar has improved quite a bit. no noticeable flaws anywhere.
I would totally try to find something to wear.
Something... like this!
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that looks awesome!
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Finally fixed my grammar to a point I'm happy with!
6309813 I'd love to read that just to see how they do The Great Mighty Poo!
6310664 Thanks^^ It's sadly not from me. I just did the sketch.
6310683 The sketch is still a large part of drawing something. You sir deserve a medal, but you're getting a spike so here you go.
I was skeptical about this story at first seeing all the mistakes in the prologue, But it's starting to come out nicely now. I would perfectly understand why that being nude can be troubling at the beginning specialty when you are from a culture where nudity is frowns on in public. when I went to japan, the idea of public bath was strange to me.
6310808 Yeah, after everyone pointed out those mistakes, I went back and attempted to improve my grammar, pacing, etc. Anyway thank you for commenting!
I would search for a hoodie. I love those bad boys
The story is okay so far, but you need to take another look at your capitalization of names. You missed capitalizing Loving's name a few times and capitalized lucky when it should have just been a word at least once.
you do realize you don't need to horse pun everything right?
it would just be stupid then.
6393701 yes he does. He needs to horse pun EVERYTHING.
So in Mareio, is Donkey Kong a donkey?
hurry up and get button so that he
hurry up and get Button so that he
-- Proper noun
Loving care however had a whole other
Loving Care however had a whole other
-- Proper noun
to annoy loving, and make me think about
to annoy Loving, and make me think about
-- Proper noun
can stop complaining Arrow" Loving said cutting
can stop complaining Arrow." Loving said, cutting
-- Punctuation at the end of a sentence inside of quotes. Comma because I don't even remember.
"Button, Honey. I think Chance is tired after his trip from Manehatten."
"Button, honey. I think Chance is tired after his trip from Manehatten."
-- Pet names such as 'sweetie' 'darling' 'honey' 'hun' or 'shmootsy poo' are not, in American English, capitalized. All bets are off when an Englishman is deciding what they bloody well capitalize.
Normally I'd gladly continue this conversation as well, but Loving was right I was still tired from the trip from Manehatten and all of my panic attacks from earlier had taken a lot out of me.
Normally, I'd gladly continue this conversation as well, but Loving was right; I was still tired from the trip from Manehatten, and all of my panic attacks from earlier had taken a lot out of me.
-- Comma after using a word like 'Normally' when describing 'when' at the beginning of a sentence. Same reason you do so after 'First, for example. Semi-colon (or maybe a colon) because you're explaining how she was right in a seperate sentence but connected thought. Comma before 'and', as normal after using a conjunction to connect two sentences.
"psst... Hey chance,"
"Psst... Hey Chance,"
-- Capitalize beginning of a sentence. Capitalize proper noun.
to whisper toward me though
to whisper toward me, though
-- Comma because I don't even know. I believe 'though' qualifies as a conjunction here.
can you get loving to buy
can you get Loving to buy
-- Proper noun.
Actually, this would be a lot easier to edit in googledocs or something before it's posted, and I really don't wanna be a dedicated editor. Just grab a proof-reader.
Pssshhh if it was acceptable I would go nude everyday
Even if it wasn't acceptable but still legal I would do it :3
6729029 And make the opposite gender uncomfortable? *Slow claps* You sir/madam are brave. I salute you.








Maybe in the arcade you could find Ninja Baseball Bat Mare.
There is a cutoff point where one will either succumb to peer pressure or just decides to not care for what others say. Now most of y'all will probably say that you won't care for what other ponies say, but I can safely assume at least 80% of you will fall from the pressure and go natural anyways.
Humans are social creatures, and following social cues is imprinted in us. Personally, I'll most likely not ever feel complete without wearing anything. There will be a point where it will feel like I'm being an odd one out and say "fuck it, I'm flashing my junk", though.