Getting Help
Chapter 45: Getting Help
***One hour ago, Solar Guard***
"How many times do I have to tell you that ponies are allowed to use the library?" Twilight continued her rant at me and my fellow guards.
"We're following protocol, your majesty. No pony is allowed within the castle walls unless specifically invited by you," Spear said while giving Princess Twilight a salute. He was a kiss ass in boot camp to, but he wasn't trying to sleep with our drill sergeant then. I hoped he realizes that, if Twilight wanted, we could execute him for his advances...We need a better legal system.
"I understand that's protocol in Canterlot, but you are in ponyville now and under my jurisdiction. Now, stop turning ponies away from the library!" Twilight said with an annoyed voice before walking back into her castle.
"She was totally hitting on me," Spear said next to me while posing. Why does he think that the princess is into him? "She bumped into me when we got here and I knew she would fall in love with me! It happened with that Flash Sentry dude; good thing he had a marefriend!"
I remember that day pretty well. We were temporary guards for the Crystal empire ,much like we are here, until the princess could have a full compliment of guards. Long story short, the Princess Twilight went through a mirror and when she came back she bumped into Flash. She tried asking him out that same week but got rejected since he wasn't big on the idea of cheating.
"I don't see how any of that could count as her hitting on you," I said while keeping my eyes straight forward.
"It was in her body language. Either that or she was angry, but I'm sure it's because she was hitting on me." I just facehooved after he said that. I still don't see how Spear passed the test at the end of boot camp when he barely knows basic math.
"I swear, you are the stupidest-" My ears twitched as I heard voices crying for help from down the street. Turning my head, I saw a small white colt and a grey filly sprinting down the street towards us with a panicked expression on their faces. "HEY, WHY ARE YOU KIDS OUT SO LATE?" I called out to one of them as they rushed up to us. When they finally were near us they stopped and tried to catch their breath while explaining what happened.
"Chance *wheeze* Forest *wheeze* kidnapped!" The filly said in between breaths. Spear looked towards me and I gave him a nod before talking with these kids. Spear went inside to gather a few guards and begin searching the area.
"I need you both to show me where your friend's mother is,"
***Loving Care***
"Have you seen Chance, Button?" I asked Button while he sat across from me at the table. He looked up at me before shaking his head to signal that he didn't know. He hasn't spoken all that much since this morning and only answers yes or no questions. Why did Open have to go and ruin our family like that? I sighed to myself,
"Maybe we can go to the arcade tomorrow. How does that sound?" I hoped that the arcade might get Button to at least say something, but he didn't even look up from his plate. This is my fault. I knew that Open was really jealous, but to do that when Arrow came back into my life is a little extreme. I always told him that we were just old friends.
"Hey, Button, do you want me to teach you how to play a guitar?" Gibson asked. Button looked up at Gibson before slowly nodding his head ad getting out of his seat. I'm happy that Gibson came home when he did or I don't think Button would be able to cope with everything that's going on.
A loud knock came from the door after a moment and I went to go answer it while Button and Gibson followed me. It was late at night so no one should really be knocking at this hour. When I opened the door I saw one of those guards that kept ponies from using the royal libray standing there.
"Mam, are you by any chance Loving Care?" The guard asked in a gruff voice.
"Yes?" I replied while he motioned for me to come outside. I did as he asked while closing the door behind me.
"Chance has been foalnapped, mam." My eyes widened as he said that. Chance couldn't have bee foalnapped he's to smart to fall for any tricks. "His friends here saw the whole incident." The guard motioned to the two foals that were next to him. I recognized Dinky as one of Chance's friends but the colt I didn't know.
"Ms. Care, we were talking to Chance when we had a small argument and he left. A weird mare came up and paralyzed him before they disappeared!" Dinky said rather panicked before the colt began.
"I followed her for awhile until she went up to a cliff and opened up a weird looking door. It disappeared after they went through it, and that's when I went to get the guards!"
"You saw all of this?" I asked the two of them. Dinky shook her head, but the colt nodded.
"That mare seemed to be really happy when she got him," The colt added. If Chance was kidnapped by somepony then that somepony might be...
"I have to get to Canterlot!" I quickly told the guard who gave me a confused expression before nodding.
"May I ask why?" He asked.
"Because I need to see Insight,"
***2 months ago***
Dear Loving,
How have you been? I know I haven't written to you as much since I joined the guard, but I need to ask you a favor. In the envelope with this letter is a file on a kid I've been looking after. No, he's not mine, but he might as well be. Anyway, he's been having a rough time for awhile now, and I believe that you're the best one to take care of him. Please don't just toss it away when you read it's contents. Chance is a good kid when you get to know him so please look after him. You are the only one that I know can take good care of him.
Sincerely,
Arrow Dodger
I read and reread the letter over and over in an attempt to see if I missed anything. I haven't talked to Arrow in over a year and he just randomly asks me for a huge favor. Doesn't he remember that my marriage has been and still is on the rocks? I sighed to myself as I looked at the plain manila folder on the table. The least I could do is read the folder.
Lucky Chance
Age: 9
Eye color: blue
Coat color: blue
Mane color: Red
Race: Unicorn
Special case: Chance was treated to mental torture for over a month while in the care of a miss Jungle Vine. After he freed himself for a second time he ran to the princesses for protection. He was removed from Jungle Vine's care and has routine therapy visits to get over his fears that have arisen due to the torment. Due to Jungle Vine escaping before being Charged with child abuse and endangerment Chance has been put under special watch. He has a personal guard and if need be his therapist can track Chance's whereabouts.
After reading all of that I didn't see what Arrow was referring to by it saying if Chance being a good kid or not. I flipped to the next page of the file which caused me to freeze. Chance looked almost exactly like Combo.
Chance has been discovered to have a belief that he is human which is assumed to be a defense mechanism to protect himself from the mental torment that he was put through. He believes that this is true and get rather angry when somepony tries to say otherwise. He often uses words that are slightly changed from what they are here as well as making up his own words. examples of these made up words include hell, everybody, foot, and whore (We believe he is trying to say whorse but we do not wish to act until we're sure.)
Chance seems to go from being happy to angry in an instant which point's towards something being wrong with him, but upon analysis he is completely normal. (We're still conducting tests) He repeatedly says that he is in fact 18 years of age and has proven that he is well above the average intelligence for a colt but that could be due to education he received before his encounter with Jungle Vine.
Chance's magical capabilities are astonishing as they are dangerous. He is able to build up large amounts of magical energy without trying which often causes him to lose control of his spells. His magic is especially unstable when he's emotional as he can't control it for long nor control what it does. More often then not he will burn object (And ponies) if he isn't extremely careful. This has been proven when Chance boiled a ponies blood in his original foster home.
Chance tries to not care about other ponies unless they are a special case. These cases include his personal guard, Ms. Jubilee (Original foster mother), and Insight (his therapist, though it's not certain where he lies).
Recommendations: Under your care it is advised that you attempt to get Chance to feel comfortable and safe in his new home. Avoid putting him in high stress situations and make sure that he doesn't panic. (This will cause his magic to flare) If possible, find Chance an adequate magic teacher to help him better control his abilities.
Any further questions can be answered by Chance's personal guard Arrow Dodger.
Chance burned a pony alive? No wonder Arrow wanted me to ignore parts of this file, but he forgot that it's me he was writing to. I waited for Open to come home and converse with him about letting Chance stay with us for awhile. He was...skeptical of having another colt in the house, but he agreed, I of course didn't tell him about the bad parts of Chance's file.
We sent a letter back to Arrow that same day and quickly started setting up fro Chance's arrival. I was hoping that maybe having another foal would help Open and me come back together. That wasn't what happened though.
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6634349 You do realize that the hypocrisy is not lost on me. Sorry, I've heard this countless times and I just want to state that is is a lot like a being a doctor I guess. No random asshole is aloud to cut you open unless they know what they're doing. I probably seem rude here and I apologize but I'm very tired. If you wish to continue this conversation I will gladly, but my responses might not make much sense.
Edit: I will also try to wake myself up so I will be more polite
6634366 Many random assholes are LOUD, but they shouldn't be allowed.
Troll post, jk. More story please.
6634386
I just posted this today though. 
Well I'm off my mini vacation so I'm going to try and get back into a normal writing schedule. Thanks for reading.
do not read this
6634476 wrong story mix-up
6634500 Sorry
I had too many pages opened.
6634503 No problem, I just thought I'd let you know so you don't forget to get this response where it needs to be.
6634507 funny you should say that I erases it before I could copied it
6634515
It's fine. I'm sure you can recreate it if not make it better.
6634522
I should take that accident in good humor and try again tomorrow then. Also you are not off the hook yet...
I will come back to you later...
6634529
God help me. 
Can't say I'm a fan of how you portrayed Flash in this chapter, I know you only mentioned him once, but it seems like you dislike him. Honestly the chapter as a whole felt a little underwhelming considering it's kind of a big return since you've been gone for a while.
But I'll still wait patiently for more.
..what?
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gonna have to agree with 6635009 here
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....that seems to be all, not much else to say.
hhhmmm
6635009 I actually don't like nor dislike for him. Also
I'M SORRY I COULDN'T PROVIDE A BETTER CHAPTER!
6635131 I have to say what as well. I have no idea where that came from.
6635472 waiiieeee a second chansen goes from human->pony->a bee? Changeling confirmed?
6635767
It was a typo! Maybe I should make it into a plot twist...alright everyone is now a changeling!
It it time...
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Well the beginning of the chapter was interesting for sure, with the asinine conversation between the guardponies, which was a good casual conversation.
So Flash became gay when he was in boot camp or what?
The problem with the chapter is that it was too rush and you just schemed what happened but you don't really go into detail about how the characters actct and when you write, you don't seem to communicate their state of mined very well either.
It it time...
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Well the beginning of the chapter was interesting for sure, with the asinine conversation between the guardponies, which was a good casual conversation, with interesting backstories to them.
So Flash became gay when he was in boot camp or what?
Well, the problem that I see in the chapter is that it feel rush and just schemed what happened with out going into detail about how the characters act or react then they explained their version of the events, and doesn't seem to communicate their state of mind very well either. Like, Loving doesn’t seem to be that depress about the family situation even when it is said that she is. I believe that more dramatizations in their words be of great help to better communicate her hopelessness. Their also tends to be some skipping of the logical questions that the characters should normally ask to themselves and to others or that they should or explained more about the situation of what happened. Like, Cold did not mention what happened to Arrow in the Everfree, which is important to find him, nor did Loving ever ask why he wasn’t there to protect Chance either.
The medical document that Loving read about Chance did not sound very professional or very imperial as it should be. Normally a document of a personal should go into details about his situation as well as some of the attempts to treat him, and explain his particular needs. There is also the problem that make it sound like Chance’s intent had be to burn a pony and not mention that he was trying to help the pony that was trapped.
Sorry if my comments are not very clear, I am tired and I have a lot of school work to do today .
6635951 It was clear enough for me to understand it. Your right, I am pretty bad at communicating a character emotions and I make logical jumps that just don't make much sense, but that's why you're here. You're here to make sure I don't get away with stuff like that and help me improve (Your ideas aren't bad either). As for the document's professionalism...I don't even want to go into how badly I wrote that. Thanks for pointing this stuff out mix-up.
Edit: By clear enough to understand it, I mean mix-up's comment for those of you that didn't understand. I apologize for the miscommunication.
6635813 dun dun duuuuunnn
6638063 RUN! THEY WANT YOUR NAME!
6639468
And his attitude, hair, he still has a lot to learn like the rest of us
6639492 I swear when I first read that I was thinking you were going to make an avatar reference.
6639468 maybe.
6640238
Nope, I have read the history and yeah. He has a lot to learn but he is only 18 after all.
6640259 True, very true
6643201
I was referring to mix-up's comment NOT my story.
6643246
Whoops!!! Sorry
6643464 It's not a problem. As long as you're polite about what you say then I will not hold a grudge.
6638543 noo they will never take me gunter von ichenbich alive!!!!
Seriously?
In my opinion this is honestly the worst chapter of the whole story.
Just, doesn't feel like it fits in the story at all.
6655027
Fine, I'll change the reasoning. Also, I understand this chapter sucks. I have been told that repeatedly, and it's starting to get under my skin. I apologize for sounding rude, but I just don't want to hear about my mistakes more than 10 times.
Edit: Again, I apologize for how this comment looks, but I really don't like being told the same problem repeatedly.
6655040
Hey, it's cool. Everyone has one. Don't let it get you down. Learn from it.
6655049 Thank you for not being angry with me. I've been really stressed lately and it's starting to bleed into things I don't want it to.
6655639
Is cool.
I find MLP.
I find balance and peace.
6655647
Inner peace is a hard thing to keep. It's good to see this show hasn't only helped me keep things in check...That's not freaky, right?
6655702
I've only had five bad hours since I became a Brony in February.
When a coo worker some my speaker.
That's 9 months of happy.
You can too!
6655736 I still remember when I became a brony. It was my freshman year in high school, and I had gone through some things I'd rather not discuss. Let's just say I needed something happy to help me through that dark time.
6655747
Right arm.
Right arm.
6655702
And I'm not done reading yet.
6655777 Reading what, The chapter? Nothing much really happens in it as it's setting things up for the next chapter.
6705982 Why thank you. I guess I should go ahead and apologize for when you catch up because I haven't written it in a bit. Also it might get confusing as you go along, just a warning.
6706970 Thank you for trying to defend my story but this has been said and done awhile ago. Again, thank you and I hope to talk with you next time, eventually, or some other word for later...like later.