Chapter 18: Out of the Frying Pan
The mare stood there as everyone in the room stared at her because of my outburst. Her expression was now neutral to everything that was going on. She made her way over to Arrow and whispered something into his ear.
"He just woke up! I don't think-" The mare started whispering again before Arrow could finish,
"Fine, but why can't she send a letter instead?" The mare shrugged before moving back out of the door while shooting a glare at me the entire time.
"What a bitch," I said to myself before I realized that there was three other people in there and one of them was a colt. I turned around to hear what they would say, but they were all distracted by the food Loving brought in her saddlebags.
I smiled and made my way over to them so I could try to somehow make amends with them. They never said they hated me though; this was very strange since I did kind of set one of them on fire. Why do they care so much about me? I could think of an answer before the door opened up.
I didn't see who entered, but I also didn't care as I was more preoccupied with being around Arrow. I felt the pony get near me before Arrow looked up and spoke,
"Hey, Lyra,"
"Hey, Arrow. I see your kid is awake,"
"Chance? Yeah he woke up today,"
"This is the first time I'm seeing him not freaking out," What did she mean by that? I started turning and when I finally face the mare all the color drained from my face. It was her! My heart started to beat faster and faster. I started to tremble where I stood, and I could feel my legs getting ready to bolt out of the room when I heard Arrow call out,
"Chance! Calm down!"
"It-Its h-her Arrow. It's that m-mare," My eyes were locked onto her, and I wanted to run away. My legs weren't listening to me however and they refused to listen to me. She was staring at me with fake pity! She thinks I don't know who she is; well I am smarter than she fucking thinks!
"Arrow?" The mare asked taking her eyes off of me for a minute. This was my chance to get out of here, and get to safety. My legs unlocked and I started sprinting toward the door. It slammed shut when I got near it however, and it also locked itself. When I was able to focus again I saw the mares horn glowing with a golden aura.
"Stay away from me!" I called out. The mare didn't listen to me and started to move closer to me so she could grab me. I wasn't going to let her take me.
"Chance! This isn't Jungle!" Arrow called to me. He didn't see it? He actually doesn't recognize this monster that kept me trapped for over a month! I tried to use my magic to lift the lamp beside Arrow, but I realized that my magic wasn't working because they cut it off while I was here.
"Stay back or I'll...or I'll" I felt something pierce my ass and everything was going foggy. Looking behind me I saw that nurse from earlier with a syringe in her mouth. "You bitch..."
***Arrow***
"Did you have to knock him out?" I asked looking toward the nurse who lifted Chance onto her back.
"He was about to panic, and could of harmed everyone in here," She retorted.
"He's not that dangerous Red Heart,"
"We can't take any chances,"
"Yeah, a nine year old can do some serious damage..."
"He's a nine year old that had a magical surge powerful enough to almost kill him. If that happened here there'd be big problems," She retorted as she walked back out of the room. I was alone with Lyra and Chance's foster family now so I decided to see how things were those first few days.
"Before all of this, Did Chance give you guys any problems?" Loving was still staring at Lyra in confusion before turning toward me and saying,
"He actually made us breakfast his first day,"
"Did he make his blueberry pancakes?"
"Yes?"
"Why didn't you tell me? He's made the best pancakes I've ever had!" Lyra decided that this was as good a time to cut in as any other,
"How have you been Arrow? Any word on my sister?" She asked. This was when I pieced together why Chance was panicking so often while we were her. Jungle Vine was Lyra's sister who was a tiny bit insane; they both believed in the human myths but Jungle was on a whole other level.
"Jungle hasn't shown up since Manehatten. Thanks for finding Chance by the way,"
"I couldn't let my former band mate's kid get hurt,"
"Actually, I'm looking after him," Loving said as she walked over to Lyra and extended a hoof. "Nice to meet you Lyra,"
"Likewise" Lyra said as she took Loving's hoof and shook. Button had decided to climb onto the bed with me while the ladies were talking. He seemed to be really bored and pulled out a piece of paper so he could doodle random things.
"What are you drawing there?" I asked.
"My family," I looked over to his drawing and saw a five different ponies. Based on the colors I recognized his parents, him, and his brother. The other pony wasn't colored in though,
"Who's that?" I asked as I pointed at the blank pony,
"It's Combo."
"Who's Combo?" Button didn't respond and just started to color the pony in with a dark blue crayon. Kids are weird, I mean normal kids are strange but this is just plain abnormal. Chance is almost as weird I mean I remember how he actually would talk to me about politics, politics! What kid can tell you the difference between an absolute monarchy and a dictatorship? He's a smart kid, but I wish he could understand that he's a pony not a human.
I noticed that it was getting dark outside, and the nurse came in to inform them that visiting hours were over. I didn't want them to go yet, but rules are rules. When everypony left and the nurse came in I decided to have a little chat with her.
"Why did you lie to Chance?"
"He is a danger to you, Arrow,"
"How exactly?"
"A kid comes in from a magical surge, and a guard comes in with massive burns. I can put two and two together,"
"I still don't see the problem,"
"If that happens again there is a good chance you'll die,"
"I doubt th-"
"Those burns are severe and the actual point of impact was the bottom of your hooves. If he hit you directly you'd be ash." I reeled back at the thought of Chance accidentally disintegrating me, but he wasn't that dangerous.
"He's not as dangerous as you think he is,"
"He might not be, but that doesn't mean you shouldn't be careful," She calmly walked back out of the room. I was once again alone, and had a lot to think about. The most prevalent was how to get Chance to stop being scared of Lyra.
While i don't like the idea of this story getting less chapters, I do think it's good to do other things now and then so you don't get stale, get writers block, or just lose interest in the story.
that being said I read over your list
-I'm famous? WHAT!
my first choice. however I need to stat a few things first.
1.if you don't do this already, you should read /mlp/'s threads sometimes, specifically the "MLH" (My Little Human) threads. the're the same basic concept of this idea. why if in Equestria there was a show for colts about Humans and it has an adult mare fan base. really fun, if you can stomach all the crap.
2. I always like the idea about the Human show being for colts because it's more violent and crude and stuff
3. Here's a one shot about this basic idea if you haven't already read it. might give you some ideas.my little human
4. the human should not only go to ponyville and Canterlot. make this bitch travel places.
5. you know what would really be interesting. if one of the main six was an Anti-Humie (Humie=Brony), that would be....to be honest i have no idea what that would be but i want to read it.
6. For the love of god don't make the human one of the whiny "earth sucks, Equestrias better in every way" or "Humans are pure evil" or that bull crap. seriously, nothing makes me drop a story faster than a main charter whose a whiny little pushover bitch.
7. maybe make the human a background character? that might be fun
8. Re-read number 4. MAKE HIM TRAVEL, DAMMIT
9. all in all this sound like it could be a fun, short story. maybe... 50,000 words tops.
-It's an animal/ It's a person
this one sound like it would be in the feature box if you did it, but only if you keep it as Fluttershy's perspective through the whole thing.
1. the animal is should be should be a manticore or something else from the Everfree, so long as it's usually dumb. and the cause should be poison joke or something.
-Choosing your path
I think it should be about a human tunered earth po-....not wait, i got it. A baby dragon, like spike but not actually spike, that would be so much fun to read
I think it would help if you stretched the scene's out a little bit. it feels like so much is happening and just a moment to calm down would be great.
by stretch out the scene i mean add some more dialogue, maybe some descriptions.
it just feels like if i miss a word or two then nothing would make sense.
also, what a horrible way for those characters to introduce lyra. He's obviously still tramatized, who thought this was a good idea.
on the flip side i do like that Chances doesn't immediately get over the fact that she looks exactly like jungle.
...i wonder what would happen if she found out he was human.
other that that, Chapter was so so. not much else to say.
6394640 got it, and goodnight.
6394639 The choose your own path is going to be comment driven, but thank you for adding another possible character to choose from.
6389740 i hate people like that and thanks
Great chapter again, so Lyra, Loving and Arrow where ones in the same band, interesting, was it a music school band or some sort rock band? I have a hard time imagining that Jungle Vine and Lyra are of the same family but it would explain the shocking resemblance, are they supposed to be twins? I also wander why Arrow was more preoccupied with the bounty on Vine's head rather then trying to persuade the sibling of a close friend from continuing to make it worst for herself by harming a young colt for her obsessions, was their relationship became that cold between the two of them, or was she warring something to mask her face and Cutie Mark? If the Equestrian authority thinks that Jungle Vine is Chances mother, dose that mean that Lyra is his legal ant?
I wander if nurse Red Heart has ever worked in a psychiatric hospital, she seems to be too quick to draw a syringe to a patients to my liking, to be just a regular nurse?
I had trouble understanding who was talking during a pancakes discussion.
So Chance had a massive magical surge that drain him to the point of nearly killed him. Dose that mean that he has the potential of being an other magical prodigy like Twilight Sparkle, or dose it mean some thing els?
So, who can possibly be this fifth member of the Button family named Combo, I'm looking forward to find out.
I am curious to see what are your others story idea, could I see them?
6394686 Link was in the author's note but so you don't have to go all the way there. Here you go.
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acutally no, they wern't
see they just meet. but she and Arrow wear in a band....apparently
Hmmm..... Cool story, bruh.
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6395745 How my writing began.
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Now
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6395813 sounds about right.
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Though..... For me, it was.....
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Then I was like...
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So what the hell was with the shifts of pov at the end? I was able to figure out who was talking but it still seems jarring that there was a sudden shift with no indication of who it was shifting to and when it was.
6395377 I have read all your points and,
1. I don't like writing bitchy characters because they are annoying to be in the head of. (Literally I tried writing one once, and it was a horrible experience)
2. This bitch is going to travel because it's an adventure story so say hello to the badlands and a few other locations.
3. I have read that fanfic, and I loved it.
4. Part of one of the main problems would normally require him to be a main character. However since he is human the problem will occur anyway.
5.How'd you guess that one of the main six would be anti-human? That goes along with #4 there.
6. Finally fifty-thousand words sounds like a good amount for the story, but then again this one was only supposed to be about 35,000 and it's no where near done sooo...
7. Bon-Bon and Lyra are going to be in it, but there is going to be a twist. Got any ideas what it will be?
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6395850 Those stars indicate a shift in time, but when one of the characters names is with them that is a shift in view.
6395829 this sums it up.
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Oh and as for continuing this story,
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... my guess is...Lyra is the "Lauren Faust" of Equestria?
6396810 No, but I like the way you think.