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Lucia Vampire


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twilight go to the big city then then get attack by a vampony in the night in park Twilight Sparkle is now bring into a world of monsters and now living in a Academy for them.

she now has to deal with
*school/classmates of monsters
*love
* a crazy/powerful vampony roommate name ruby BloodDreamer, that has things for socks
* headmaster that looks like nightmare moon
* having to deal with becoming more like a vampony
can she deal with it all this?

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 8 )

I feel bad for Twilight. She got attacked by a vampire and was turned into one, but at least she's getting help.

This doen't make anysense in G4 mlp.

Why should vampony needed to hide when literal emotional-sucking-cocooning-shapeahifter was a public enermy for years and can still integrated with pony society?

What's about god of chaos? Or kirins that can go nirik and accidently burn everything around them because they are angry?

And predator-looking batponies, the original concept of vampony, can served as night guard in canterlot.

The concept that worked for monolithic human world doesn't always works on diversed G4 mylittle pony world.


Maybe you should set this story in a world where only pony exist, like G5 before sparky's introduction.

This is a really good concept and I love what you have so far and can't wait for more to see where you take this. Have a 👍

Is this story based off of Rosario + Vampire?

Welcome to the kaleidoscope of cardboard emotions.
I'm serious. While reading the last chapter, I did not have a single moment when I would have believed in at least one of the emotions that the characters "experience".
Your characters have not spent even one day with each other, but they already trust so much that they are ready to share clothes or such personal secrets as falling in love.
There were moments that could have caught on if they had been better painted. For example, when Twilight mentioned that she had read about local monsters. Considering that the entire academy has been hiding for the last thousand years, their knowledge of the outside world leaves much to be desired. So why doesn't Ruby bombard Twilight with questions about how external ponies treat monsters and what they say about them?
The idea is not bad, but the implementation suffers.

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sorry im trying my best on makeing good story i have autism and my spelling/paragraph is off at times

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no but i did read the anime book

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i like it so far ... please keep up the great work ... i have this story fave & following for updates

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