Chapter 6
Canterlot Castle
Otto was a little nervous, Twilight had not yet returned after a few hours had past and was afraid something had happened to her. That and he was just made an admiral of an entire navy that doesn't even exist yet.
Celestia had offered him a room for the night, so now he was pacing back and forth in front of the bed in his temporary room.
There was a knock at his door.
"Come in." He called out.
The door opened but Otto didn't look to see who it was.
"Vhat do you vant?" He asked.
"That's a rude way to welcome somepony." said a familiar feminine voice.
He turned to see Trixie standing in the door way.
"T-Trixie!?" He exclaimed, unsure if he was seeing correctly.
"The one and only." She replied.
"How did you get in zhe castle?" He asked.
"Trixie... has her ways." She replied a little hesitantly.
"Vhy are you here?" He asked.
"I'm here to see you of course!" She replied.
"Vhy?" He asked.
"I wanted to hear how the meeting went." She said.
"Vell, I zhink you could've vaited until ve came back, but I guess I'll tell you now since your here already." he said.
He spent the next ten minutes explaining to Trixie about what happened during the meeting.
"So wait, she put you in charge just like that?" Trixie asked.
"Hard to believe right?" he said.
He noticed her looking at him with a distant expression.
"Is something vrong Trixie?" he asked putting a hoof on her shoulder.
"Huh? O-oh no... no..." she said, quickly looking away.
He could have been wrong but he thought he saw a blush start to form on her face.
"Trixie, are you, OK?" he asked.
"Y-yes" she replied.
"Trixie you can tell me anything, now vhats vrong?" he asked.
"W-well... There isn't anything wrong..." she replied.
After a moment she said, "OK, there's another reason I came."
"Which is...?" Otto asked her.
She turned to face me. She had a blush and looked a little nervous.
"There's something I've been wanting to tell you, ever since you brought me back to Twilight's castle from the Everfree Forest, but I was afraid that maybe if I did you wouldn't want to be around me." she explained.
"Vell you an say it now, I'm all ears." Otto replied.
"I... well... I..." She seemed to have a hard time forming words.
"It's, OK Trixie, if you don't vant to say it I'll respect zhat."
She stared at the ground, and seemed deep in thought.
"O-Otto, I... I..." She began stuttering.
"Come on, you can say it." Otto said encouragingly.
"I like you!" She blurted out and then she blushed and looked away.
"Vhat..."
"I like you Otto..." She said more calmly, her cheeks were red as a tomato.
Otto couldn't believe what he was hearing. She liked him? Sure back home he was famous and that caused a few girls to try to hit on him, but Trixie hardly new thing about him, and he barely new a thing about her.
As if reading his mind, "I know we've only known each other for two or three days but...I just do, your the only one, other than Twilight, that didn't just try to get rid of me. Though I guess that's because you don't exactly know what I've done..." said the now tomato red mare.
"Vhat do you mean by 'get rid of you'?" asked Otto.
Trixie began to tear up and sighed.
"Ever since the alicorn amulet incident no one has trusted me. Every town I entered just chased me out, lots of ponies mocked me, harassed me, hurt me, and just down right treated me like a monster, there were a few that tried to... kill me..." She was crying at this point. "One time a pony had strapped a stick of dynamite to the bottom of my carriage, and tried to assassinate me, thankfully I wasn't in there at the time, but now I'm homeless," She choked a sob. "That's why I was in the Everfree Forest when I found you..."
Otto just stood there, he couldn't believe how cruel these ponies could be.
"When you woke up in the hospital, I hoped that I might have finally found somepony that I could have a fresh start with and that wouldn't judge me for my past actions. Everypony else that I try talking to just pushes me away, figuratively and literally." The amount of tears Trixie was producing looked humanly impossible.
Otto walked up to Trixie and pulled her into a tight hug, hoping that the embrace would cheer her up a bit.
While holding the embrace, he felt her and couldn't believe how silk like it felt. He felt her grip tighten and her heart was beating so fast it seemed like it could power an entire U-Boat, and she produced so many tears it seemed she could make a small pond in just a day.
"Trixie, I promise, as long as I live, no harm shall come to you." he spoke softly.
"If any does, it von't go unpunished. Heh, I guess as an admiral in equestria, I guess I sort of have the power to do that." he said chuckling to himself.
Trixie hugged him tighter.
"I-I love you Otto..." Said Trixie.
Otto still couldn't believe it, someone actually liked him and it wasn't because of his fame. He honestly never felt love for another person much less a pony. Sure he loved his parents but that's just because they were his parents. When he thought about it, he actually realized that he had grown some affection for the blue mare over the past days. Otto thought about the possibility of him and Trixie actually living together.
When Otto finally made up his mind and decided to give it a shot, he decided to say he loves her back, but then he got an idea.
He looked at Trixie, she had long since stopped crying, and was now just hugging him. He lowered his head so that he was eye level with her. Her eyes were closed and she was laying her head on him.
Then, using his hoof, he pulled her face into a kiss.
This shocked Trixie at first, but soon she joined into the gentle kiss. He felt her tongue prod against his teeth trying to gain entrance. He opened up and gave her what she wanted, he soon felt her tongue explore his mouth. He decided to do a bit of exploring himself she tasted oddly like coconuts for some reason. He still couldn't believe he was doing this with a fucking pony, but he didn't really care anymore.
**Trixie**
Trixie honestly didn't expect Otto to kiss her, but once her initial shock subsided she lost herself in it.
She poked her tong against his teeth hoping he might give her entrance which he eventually did.
The inside of Otto's mouth tasted like a mixture of salt water and gunpowder (which she would not recommend you try) for some reason, but decided to just focus on the kissing itself rather than the taste. He really wasn't that bad at this, but she could tell he was obviously not use to this.
But like all good things, it had to end at some point. The need for breath became to great.
**Otto**
They parted there lips a strand of saliva hanging between them.
Trixie was the first to speak, "I take it you like me too?" she asked him.
Otto replied by giving her another brief kiss.
"I do." Said Otto.
They were about to pull into another kiss but were stopped by the door knocking.
Otto got up and groaned in frustration, but walked to the door.
He opened the door, "Vhat do you vant?" He growled.
But then realized it was Twilight standing in front of the doorway.
"Twilight?"
"Hello captain, or should I say admiral." said Twilight, which caused Otto to become a bit confused.
"How did you-" began Otto but was interrupted by Twilight.
"I already talked to Celestia, and she told me what happened." said Twilight.
Twilight seemed to notice the quickly drying strand of saliva because she poked at it. "Um Otto, what is-"
She suddenly stopped and looked behind him, and saw Trixie who's cheeks were still a bit flushed.
"Trixie?"
Twilight putting two and two together, and asked, "Wait... Did y'all..."
"Don't ask... Vhy are you here?" Otto asked.
"Well there's somepony in the hospital that you would probably want to meet." she said.
"Vho?" Asked Otto.
"You'll see." Replied Twilight.
"Vell... Vhat about Trixie? Can she come along?" Asked Otto.
"Well... Ok, I don't see why your 'marefriend' can't come along." Twilight said teasingly.
Otto ignored the comment and said, "Vell, let's get going zhen."
They made their way out of the castle, though were stopped for a moment by the guards, whom were asking how Trixie had gotten in, but Twilight dealt with it, and then they made heir way to the hospital.
Otto had to admit, the architecture in Canterlot was amazing, and the ponies there were equally so. Though every now and then he caught a few eyeing his uniform, and a few who eyed his horn and wings.
Otto made a mental note that alicorns were probably rare due to how many ponies gasped when they saw him. Along the way they stopped at a diner for a quick bite since none of them have eaten that morning. A light brown unicorn mare with a dark brown mane and dark brow freckles that made her face look like a chocolate chip cookie, came up to take there orders.
"Hello, and welcome to my diner, how can I help y'all today?" she said.
"Nothing yet, we're still deciding." said Twilight.
"OK, Princess, oh and it's nice to see you again Trixie." said the mare.
"Same here." Replied Trixie.
"Say, I don't think I've seen you here before." she said looking at Otto.
"I'm... new here. I'm not from around here." he told her.
"Heh, well it's always nice to see new faces, what's your name?" she asked the stallion.
"Mein name ist, Otto Kretschmer." he said, for some reason speaking German unintentionally.
"You from Germainia?" asked the mare. (pronounced Ger-mane-ee-a)
Otto had recently realized that Equestria had a lot of towns and country's similar to ones in his world. He's guessing that this 'Germainia' was the equestrian equivalent to Germany. Twilight had told him to keep quiet about being from another world.
"Err... Ja, ich bin von dort.(Yes, I'm from there.)" Otto replied.
"Ich habe eine Menge von germainians hier in letzter Zeit gesehen.(I've been seeing a lot of germains around here lately.)" she said, she spoke perfect German.
"Sie sprechen perfekt Deutsch!(you speak perfect german!)" said Otto.
"Deutsch? Meinst du Germane? (German? Did you mean Germane?)
"Ja, ja..." He said, a bit annoyed. "But how are you able to speak it so vell?" He asked returning back to English since he saw Twilight and Trixie were getting very confused.
"I'm from Germainia as well!" she said.
"Hmm... interesting."Otto said.
"Anyways, would you like to try are germane chocolate muffins?" asked the waitress.
"Sure, I'll take two of zhose and a coffee." Said Otto.
"OK, what about y'all?" She asked Twilight and Trixie.
"I'll just have a fruit salad." said Twilight.
"I'll try one of those muffins that Otto's having." said Trixie.
"OK, your food will be out shortly." the waitress said walking off.
"Danke, miss...?"
"Oh, the name's Cholcolate chip." she said, causing Otto to laugh internally.
"Pleasure to meet you Miss Chip." said Otto.
"Please, call me Chocolate." said Chocolate chip.
Chocolate went around to where he guessed was the kitchen.
He noticed a few other ponies staring at him, and noticed they were staring at his uniform, more specifically the swastikas on it and iron cross medal he wore around his neck. It made him very uncomfortable. Chocolate chip came back holding some plates.
"Here y'all go. Is something wrong mister Kretschmer?" she asked, noticing his discomfort.
"Ja, it's just, a lot of zhe other ponies here are staring at my uniform, and giving me very nasty looks." said Otto.
"Uniform?" She asked, then gasped when she looked at his uniform. "Your a nayzi!"
"Nein, I don't even know what a nayzi is." He said though he had a pretty good guess.
"Well, a few years ago the nayzi (nay-zee) party came to power in Germainia lead by a pony named Neighdolf Trotler," called it Otto thought to himself, "and recently they declared war on a new empire that recently was discovered out in the Trotlantic ocean, the nayzis are the reason I moved here." explained Chocolate Chip.
"Mein gott, wie hat dies welt haben damit viele Ähnlichkeiten an bergwerk. (My god, how does this world have so many similarities to mine)." Otto asked himself.
"What do you mean?" asked Chocolate.
Otto instantly remembered she could understand German, and mentally scolded himself for forgetting.
"Um, vell..." shit shit shit!
Twilight gave him a quizzical look.
He mouthed the words, 'she knows', which took Twilight a moment to realize what he meant.
"Twilight, what does Otto mean by 'his world'." Asked chocolate.
"Uhhhhhh..." Is all Twilight responded with.
"Come on Twilight, you can tell me." Chocolate said egging on the mare.
"Do you have somewhere private we can talk?"
"Well there's the storage room." Said Chocolate.
"OK, once we finish eating we'll talk OK?" Said Twilight.
"Fine by me, though I prefer you come back later and talk to me, I can't really talk right now due to work," she said looking over at a customer. "Speaking of which I need to take the other customers order, so I'll talk to y'all later." She said before walking to another table.
They ate in silence, the muffins tasted like something back home.
They ate for a few minutes before Trixie asked, "Hey Otto, I was wondering. How are you able to keep such a cool head this entire time? If I were you and woke up in an entirely different world I'd be freaking out."
Otto didn't know how to answer her question, in truth he had been freaking out the entire time in his head, but tried to stay under control for the sake of everyone else. He wasn't going to say anything about it, but when he woke up and saw Trixie he would have shot her on the spot if it wasn't for his lack of hands. Speaking of which he didn't even know how he picked up his pistol, much less fired it, outside the hospital and quite frankly he didn't want to.
"Vell, I'll admit it's hard to take in, but I've come to realize some aspects of this world are similar to mine." said Otto.
"Oh? And what aspects would that be?" the blue mare asked.
"Vell for starters, a lot of zhe country's and landmarks names here are similar to ones in my vorld. Like Germainia, it sounds similar to Germany in my vorld, and vell, zhat description zhat silver gave of it, it vas also similar, in my vorld instead of 'neighdolf trotler' a man named 'Adolf Hitler' came to power. And instead of the 'Nayzi' party it's the 'Nazi' party. And zhen instead of zhe 'trotlantic' it's zhe 'Atlantic' Ocean. Also zhat empire zhat she said Germainia declared war on, I zhink I know who it is." Said Otto.
"Who?" Asked Twilight.
Before Otto could answer he felt someone tap him on the shoulder. He turned to see who had tapped him but was met with a punch to the face.
"Take that Nayzi boy." Said a voice, which Otto guessed belonged to the guy who punched him.
"Was der Teufel-Mann?" (What the hell man?) Otto screamed, grabbing at his now blood covered snout.
"Doesn't feel good to get beaten, huh? Well you should of thought about that before you started beating Jews!" Said the voice again, but Otto's vision was blurry so he couldn't see the guy.
"What's going on here? *Gasp* Star, what are you doing!" he heard Chocolate's voice say.
"What? This guy's a Nayzi! Not like he doesn't deserve it." This coming from the one Otto guessed was Star.
"Zhis guy has a name you know." Otto groaned rubbing his head.
"Yeah? Well, no pony gives a buck about what is." Said Star.
"Hey everyone this guys a nayzi!" Star yelled.
When Otto's vision cleared he saw lots of angry looking ponies walking towards him, he noticed a lot of them had a 'Star of David' on them, which seem to have been branded onto them.
Oh, fuck me. Thought Otto.
This won't end well....
Sorry for adding another cliff hanger but I've been working on this for weeks and wanted to get it out NOW
I hope you enjoyed the chapter
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wait how can it be that celestia didn't see he was a nazi when she was talking to him in chapter 4?!?
So I was reading my story and.... GOD ITS TERRIBLE !! Half the stuff I writed is extremely unrealistic.This is going to need some extreme rewriting.
FuuuuuUuUUuuuUUUUUUUUUUUCCCCKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!! I WANT IT OUT NOW!!!!!! OMG OMG OMG OMG
But yes, I love it.
6032079
As the old saying goes, "Before you can solve your problem, you must first admit you have one."
Congratulations for your having experienced that realization.
Yes, your story reads like a rough-draft written in a hurry. Even so, you've done better than I, given that I haven't posted anything at all to this archive. Eh, pay no attention to me--I'm just a pony with a chicken on his head.
It has been ...many years since I wrote fanfic, and I wasn't very good at it even then.
Like the story and stuff, but unless its intended to be like that, your history is a little off. Because Otto Kremesher (or however his name is spelled) learned to speak English fluently at age 17. And there's also more stuff, but keep it coming. And not to brag or anything, but check out some of my stories! They're not that popular (though it TOTALLY doesn't hurt that its in several hate groups) but I think you'll like them. I'm an amateur writer, so please don't be too hard. But anyway, love the story so far. Just love it, and I can't wait until more chapters are released.
Ps: PM me if you need help proofreading your stories. I do e-mail and Google docs.
Thanks,
HumansTanksAndPonies
6105771 To tell, the truth I'm trying to keep this as accurate as possible, though let's be honest, the fact he gets transported to equestria isn't even close to being accurate.
6106952
Don't care love it lol
Jews....What the fuck? How does that work? I don't think Nazis-Jewish confrontation, vendetta, conflict,... is suitable in Equestria...Though, this is your story, and if you handled it right, it won't be weird and unfit.
Also, starting a brawl with an experienced military officer is foolish. Especially a WWII German military officer. German soldiers are very well trained. (Especially when that officer is the admiral of your navy)
And since we have British and German, why not add Russian ponies theme into the mix...Russian sounding cities with horse pun in its name as military centers of Equestria anyone?
Ok, I'm done rambling.
6113153 yeah well, these are the reasons I'm rewriting the story (or will at some point since I'm too lazy right now to do it).
Also I was going to add Russia (Rusha) and America (Amareica).
I like what you have put on table. Can't wait for rewrite!
6565643
And yet, exactly as harsh as my disappointment was.
i have seen this story on my friend' profile page for weeks now and i just realized the stallion is an alicorn XD
6565730 Not sure why i followed you, but most of the time i see a comment of yours on a story, you're a complete fucking asshole about it. Get a life you fucking loser.
6590027
Can I help it if I have a discriminating taste? Really, rather then harangue me about negative comments, you should go look for stories I`ve had something positive to say about. Because, well, if it seems that I dislike most everything, then those few that pass the muster should be groundshaking indeed, at the very least, no?
6590682 I'm just wondering why you can't at least tell people what they did wrong in a respectful manner, instead of 'making them feel bad' or saying how much they suck. Do you know that Michael Morones kid? The one who attempted suicide because he was bullied for being a brony? It was on the news and everything when it happened. Who knows? Maybe you're pushing people further into doing the same if they're thinking of it. IF you don't have anything nice to say or isn't down right rude, keep it to yourself you dick. I'm surprised you haven't been banned yet for being the way you are.
6590682 also, if we're going to be doing this, lets at least not spam this dude with whatever is said, and over pm instead.
6590846
If there were a defined point of being wrong in this particular case, I`d point it out. The problem is that there isn`t - the author consistently sucks across the board. The plot had an interesting premise but it`s been utterly butchered by flopped characterization, stunted narration and hackneyed writing.
As for me being banned - see, I don`t go out of my way to attack people personally. I don`t hate anyone, per ce. If I say something negative, there are grounds for it, and well... being blunt is not a crime.
As for PM - if you have something to say to me, then by all means, use it. If not, I think we`re done here.
6592365 I don't want to get into all the complicated stuff, i just want to know why you are so rude to others. it may not be a crime but it doesn't mean go ahead and do it.
6592480
Ask in PM. Too long and personal to clutter someone else`s story. Also, we`re definitely done here at this point.
6914423
Heh. Now, I understand it might be shocking and unusual for you and your culture, but I was actually a planned child. As in, education planned, funds set aside, no parental resentment about missed opportunities, no scrimping for baby food... Oh yeah, baby, I had privileged childhood. My parents weren`t irresponsible dickheads, as strange as it might sound to you. And, I have to say, their planning and effort were most certainly not in vain - you don`t get a fine lady with discriminating tastes like me just by luck.
Joking aside, your pitiful attempt had been noted and ridiculed. Try some more.
Can you do more please
6113883 Can't wait to see more! Hope you make more very soon! Also...shit Otto is going to have fun.
Come back
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When will this be continued?
Use magic to incinerate them!
8858762
Come back jesus
6031989
Not every German soldier was a Nazi the regular German Military didn’t have any it was the Waffen SS that was full of Nazis.
6063312
Heh, well you see, I live in Texas, and the term we use here is "y'all", and when writing her dialogue I forgot to take into account how they speak in the show. But thank you for pointing it out.
8747108
Well, originally, never, but who knows, I might regain the courage to continue this. It's just that, English and literature have never really been my favorite subject, always preferred math and science. And honestly, I forgot about this story and this whole site in general, so not much thought has been put into this.
Well please do put more effort in to this finishing this story story and please keep on writing these stories.......
I want to read more of them!!!
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Please I need to know what happens next it's literally killing me to know
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Actually, they did. Because out of all five million Soviet POWs 3.3 MILLION were killed. Most in 1941 and before the SS even got involved. https://youtu.be/OeRR100incE
9878212
I stand partly corrected.
Made me ( a german) die internally XD.
The correct translation would have been: "Mein Gott, wie hat diese Welt so viel Ähnlichkeit zu meiner?!"
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