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Blitz Habanera Tuscania


Admin of the Prototype group and wants to be known as that one guy who writes the Prototype stuffs.

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He is a man who has carved a path through hell to save the innocents. He is a man who sacrificed them for the greater good. He believed in his superior's lies like a fool and paid for it. He fought the closest thing reality had to the Four Horsemen. He beat Death through a cunning plan and skill. Plague's touch, through which he prospered and became stronger. War, who only beat him through its army of infected. He accepts the fact that he is being punished for the innocent lives he had sacrificed or rewarded for the ones he saved.

In the nothingness he has called home for God only knows how long a voice calls out to him promising salvation. For only one small request.

Reclaim his Empire from those who took it.

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And third time's the charm.... hopefully.

Just off initial looks at the... what's it called, description:

He fought the closest things to the Four Horsemen those being Death who he beat through a cunning plan and skill.

This could be split up into two sentences, like this: He fought the closest thing reality had to the Four Horsemen. He beat Death through a cunning plan and skill.

Plague's touch through which he prospered and became stronger. War who only beat him through its army of infected.

Comma after 'touch' and 'War'. Though if you only use 3 out of the 4 Horsemen, I don't know if using the 4 Horsemen at all is a good idea.

He accepts the fact he is being

that he is being

home for, only god knows how long, a

home for God only knows how long

A Robert Cross story, interesting! Paired with your TBC crossover and Pariah... nice.

5869534 Danke for pointing those out and danke for the compliment, I do aim to be at least sort of original with the genre I am currently spamming. The reason those flaws are there... well mein only editor's been Boovian who's computer was destroyed and those I have asked are only slightly better at catching mistakes then me or say no.

Semi-related note want me to PM you the link to Pariah's story so ya can edit?

Alright, interesting premise, but... well, Cross is already back alive, why does he need to keep obeying Sombra? Backstab that fucker.:rainbowlaugh:

5869708 Nothing else to do right now, besides army of thieves? Why shouldn't he take them out?

5869741 Because he's not an idiot who's just going to flat out trust the guy who screams 'evil', and instead will wonder 'are the thieves really thieves' and all that.

5869755 Regardless of Sombra's evilticity, there's a tangible horde of Diamond Dogs that don't look friendly, rampaging through a city, where the local inhabitants are ponies and the ones the Diamond Dogs are fighting are said ponies, who are in uniform like a military. The Diamond Dogs are obviously not the natives of the city, aren't dressed like military, don't act like military and etc. which is where the term thieves would be easily applicable to them.

The pony guards are acting military like, dressed like it, act like it and are actively protecting the citizens throughout the city.

Interesting,
Keep it up.

This is very good, I would like to see where it goes from here.
Keep up the good work.

Nice to see this updated.

So now, the question is:
Has Cross fucked up?
Or did he just win at life?

Oh boy... Smokey the Pony's back!

For a moment I raised an eyebrow at how easily Cross was butchering them, but then I remembered that this is the same guy who went toe to toe with motherfucking Alex Mercer and lived to tell the tale.

Though I don't think Shining would be so disgusted. He's a soldier. Actual experience or not, he's supposed to be conditioned to handle it if he has to.

6406305 Yeah the reason why I post and work on so many stories at a time is cause I hit writer's block a lot. So I use other avenues of thinking. Right now my block is TCB
6406333 This is from Cross's perspective so it's his opinion that Shining is disgusted by that. In reality it could be the cold efficiency, the brutality, or even the relative ease with which he did it.

I think it would be ironic that cross has the mercer virus in him and it comes out next chapter and he kills sombra, and absorbs him.

6409788 I don't see how'd that'd be ironic. And also, not gonna happen.

I worked for Blackwatch, I have killed to protect my country from threats like this and things far worse.”

Blackwatch is supposed to be "beyond top-secret", why is he speaking so casually about it?

Here are some typos and grammar corrections/suggestions:

The last two were a dual-wielding swords Dog, who handed one of its swords to the weaponless

was

I don't trust him honey, just look at him he looks fit to be a servant of that freak.”

look at him,

β€œAnd it's just like Sombra to prey upon the desperate and if he was dead like he says he was, then I don't think any pony could say they wouldn't make a deal.”

desperate, and

a buffed up, full of steroids muscle builder who decided to dress up like a medieval warrior, being the only one wearing a full suit of black armor it's bull head being the only body part left exposed. Alongside it was an oversized axe, sparking along the ground as it walked

black armor. It's bull head

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Blackwatch is supposed to be "beyond top-secret", why is he speaking so casually about it?

Because he worked for Blackwatch, past-tense. He's died, and as far as he knows, in another world. Talking about them ain't going to cause any problems, and even if it did, he might not care about them anymore.

What is this? A crossover episode?

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