For millennia I have watched this world, unable to influence it. Then, a thousand years ago, I was freed from my prison. I stayed in the shadows, influencing the world in subtle ways.
Now with Luna's return I reveal myself. They will need my help if they are to survive what I have foreseen. My name is Magnus and I will not fail again.
Disclaimer 1: This is a displaced story. If that isn't your thing please don't read it. No, seriously don't read it.
Disclaimer 2: I will be playing around with Warhammer canon so don't freak out if some things don't add up at first.
Chapters (2)
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Your writing and the the story is great! I actually read every paragraph word for word, I usually skim through stuffed, but this was all great
NO PATHETIC BOX CAN HOLD ME LIKE THIS!!!
That...
Was...
EPIC!!!
A MAGNUS STORY! I SHALL READ AND LEANN THE GREAT KNOWLEDGE OF MY PRIMARCH!
Hell ya, I like this how this is starting. I can not wait for the next chapter.
When is the next chapter coming out? Also,, let me guess, that book twilight was reading about the warp from was the Book of Magnus?
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I cant wait to see their reaction to Magnus's size he was considered one of the largest of the Primarchs at 9-10 ft tall just look at the story cover a normal Space Marnie is about 7.5 feet tall.
Also there's this little mystery i cant wait to the ponies reaction too "No matter how she looked at it, it didn’t appear natural at all. The slope was regularly broken by large plateaus, giving the mountain the appearance of a set of stairs from this side." i bet its a Pyrimid
6790020 Thanks. It took me forever to write though.
6790297 Glad you enjoyed it.
6790440 Beware for Magnus' knowledge can kill a mortal man.
6791299 6791600 Hopefully the next chapter will be out in a couple weeks. I'm afraid I'm not the fastest writer around.
6792452 No heresy here. Nope, not at all.
6792466 Hopefully I can do it justice. Considering they deal with dragons sometimes though it might not be as bad as you think,
I hope you all continue to enjoy the story.
6792537 Oh please, my head has long since embraced the Warp. I CAN TAKE IT!
Also, good job! I fear I won't get as good as you, and from the quality, I suspect something close to Fallout Equestria Quality! Which also means that this will have major time periods between chapters.
The title caught my attention, the photo immediately got me hooked. Thousand Sons are one of my favourite legions.
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Sup tomato-man!
Magnus the red? I'll check it out.
You have my attention! This is the first Thousand Sons Story that I've seen so far, and I've read stories about the Iron Warriors and Night Lords!
Long and well done intro, if not a bit tedious seeing as we all know this story already. You've done a great job improving on the first episode but left quite a few unanswered questions. I expect a lot of exposition coming up, but wouldn't hold it against you seeing as it could fit Magnus' bookworm character well. I'm looking forward to seeing what's up next
For a first chapter... this was amazing...
Keep er' going dangerbrony.
This has been one of the most promising new displaced stories I have seen in a while. I honestly hope you continue this as you have certainly earned my interest.
Sooooo.....it's Magnus' fault
This is a great start
WOW, that was very impressive.
though, was that quote at the end needed?
7544386 Thank you. Perhaps it wasn't but at the time I thought it was a good way to set up the second chapter. I've been having a bit of a rough time getting it to feel right though. Comments do help me, though so thanks for taking the time.
7544689 No need, it was a good read.
Will their be any marines under Magnus control?
7594753 I don't want to spoil anything in the comments but I'd be happy to pm you if you'd still like an answer.
i cant help but hear magnus sounding like the one from the emperor has a text to speech device series.
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I think I rather be surprised.
Huh wha filthy rich serves the primarch of the thousand sons well blow me down
7594972 No kidding
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Same.
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Good work so far! Looking forward to reading more!!
It lives!!!
7595127 What, the story lives?!
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Huh, for some reason I kept thinking of Magnus' voice being like Tenshin's from Warframe.
Magnus has ties with the Rich family? Cool. Hope he manages to make Diamond Tiara snap out of her bully mode.
I don't think he's going to tell you how a Mag-Lev Train works, Twilight. He likely doesn't want some twit using that technology for War after being betrayed so long ago.
7544689 When is the next chapter?
I love this
I need more of this wonderful story, for i am addicted to this.
Oh, how good it feels to have a dose of this wonderful drug that this story is to me
So the Rich family, eh?
When they wake up, things should be pleasantly interesting
I see... So Magnus has had a hand in the Technological development of this Pony Civilization....
I can't wait to see how this pans out
7597253 Well, last time I said two weeks since I thought dialogue would be much easier than adventure and look how that turned out. So, unfortunately, all I can say is it's gonna be a while.
7595127 7595490 Just barely.
7598814 7595100 Glad you're enjoying it.
7594972 7595021 Indeed, I wonder what Applejack will say when she finds out.
One question whats the the planet's name?
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The planet is called Tethra. Sorry for not making that more obvious.
7765043 no you did i miss typed my comment with out realizing it i meant whats with the name why that one?
7767153 Ah, okay. To be honest, I used a random name generator until I found one I liked. I know Equus is used as a name often but I wanted something different to potentially show Magnus' influence and Tethra happened to sound cool and be close to Terra.
7767510 nice
Can't believe I forgot to fave and follow this... Btw, if you ever want to do a Crossover, I'm game!
Also:
Whaddya know, a hoarse horse!
hey um when the next chapter out for you Father of a Thousand Sons displaced fic??
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Hey, thanks for showing interest in the story. I'm not gonna lie this chapter's kicking my trash left and right and I have a hard time motivating myself to work on it. I'm hoping to have at least a little something to post by the end of the month.
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sweet and I'm also following your brother on fimfiction ;)
Is this still a thing?
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it sounds *sniff* and smells dead hmmmm perhaps it is playing dead well lets keep poking it till it wakes up
Yeah no it dead