On the night before Hearth's Warming Eve, as she slumbered peacefully in her warm bed, Celestia found her dreams interrupted by her younger sibling, who comes to her chambers with an idea in mind.
Artwork by the person on the other end of this link to the image.
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Written for the 'Celestia and Luna December Fanfiction' writing contest.
POPULAR SECTION - 19th December, Friday, 2012. Again? You all must really like me! I love you all! Especially the, ah, lovely ladies among you...wink, wink. XD Merry Christmas to you all!
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This was a sweet little tale! You do a great job showing the great affections these sisters have for each other, and building a nice mood for the overall piece.
My only suggestion would be to make sure not to add commas outside of parentheses, or if you already have another punctuation mark (like a question mark) in place.
Other than that, bravo! Thanks for a nice read.
5398445 I can't write good stories, but I stopped caring ages ago because of trolls.
Also, as much as your advice would be appreciated by another human being, I'm afraid it is futile with me. I AM aware of the fact that you don't put commas outside of a parentheses, I really am. I do it anyway, however, because I write how I choose to write, and because I don't really see the problem with it all. I'm not a professional story writer, and I won't pretend that I am one. Besides, how many people are going to read this anyway? So long as there's pornographic material getting the spotlight, nobody'll care. XD
Oh, and thank you for reading this story. I do appreciate your sparing a minute or two of your time to read this. I know it was an awful piece of writing, so thank you for tolerating it.
Please, from a stranger to his viewer, have a fantastic festive season, and a massive Merry Christmas (with blue neon lights decorated all around!) to you!
5398445 I also wish to point out that I am sure other people do a far more competent job of showing the sisterly love between Celestia and Luna than I have here, but thank you for that compliment though! It's made this night a little bit better for me to hear/read that.
Not bad, UniqueSKD, not bad. Of course, there are numerous other authors out there who could have written this story out a lot better, and maybe even made it longer in length (that's what she said, giggity), but you did alright, I suppose. So yeah, go ahead and pat yourself once on the back, UniqueSKD. ONCE. If you scored better you'd have been permitted to pat yourself twice.
6 out of 10 from me. Over to you, UniqueSKD
5398690 Thanks, UniqueSKD. I appreciate your input. I like your avatar. He looks dashingly handsome and strong and sexy and way more awesome than any of those crappy looking avatars that all the popular Bronies have. So much cooler and better than those things. XD
Not bad, UniqueSKD, not bad. Of course, there are numerous other authors out there who could have written this story out a lot better, and maybe even made it longer in length (that's what she said, giggity), but you did alright, I suppose. So yeah, go ahead and pat yourself once on the back, UniqueSKD. ONCE. If you scored better you'd have been permitted to pat yourself twice.
5398920 Thanks, Rotorix. I appreciate your input. I like your avatar. He looks dashingly handsome and strong and sexy and way more awesome than any of those crappy looking avatars that all the popular Bronies have. So much cooler and better than those things. XD
Woah, just had the strangest case of Deja Vu just now...
And that avatar...
Oh yeah, this one's going in my group.
5398674 Don't underestimate yourself!
This was a wonderful tale, and I had a lot of fun reading it. I also agree that a big part of posting stories on FimFiction.net is simply to have some creative fun and share ideas with other writers here.
Thanks! And a very Merry Christmas to you too (and a Happy New Year)!
5398678 ^_^
That was pretty adorable.
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Can I steal that gimmick?
Nice to see some cute sisterly love from the princesses
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(smiles and bows politely to you)