Spike has been helping Rarity with her dresses the whole night, but after a concerned talk with Twilight he decides to go away until he can be mature enough to be with Rarity
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Not bad for a first, though I suggest you work on your spacing and maybe see about getting an editor.
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I get what you mean with spacing I shall work on it!
But I don't think I want someone to review my work for this particular story just yet, maybe in the next one
Thanks for reading it btw ^^
5261752 No problem, it looks interesting. I hope this story turns out well.
i have not read it yet, and normally i don´t even like that pairing (Spike X Rarity), but i like that he have to try, to get more mature first. That is one thing, because i normaly don´t like that pairing.
I already give you a thumb up for that.
Ever heard the Pee-Pee Dance?
It's not the first time Spike said Buck it all! Lets see what you can do. Looks all right..............................Run with it.
5262761 well I am aware that he took off in the dragon migration, but I actually kinda started the story very long ago, but only recently decided to go with it, and I just try to keep the characters as I see them and make it a story would read myself
Needs work in the grammar department, but otherwise pretty good.
I'm curious to see where you will take this.
5266956 I am very curious to see that too :b
I agree with you on the grammar. I wrote this a really long time ago and since I'm Danish I still have lot to learn, but as I didn't go beyond chapter 3 when I first wrote it you will see much better grammar after chapter 3. I just wanted to get it up and didn't have enough time to really edit it a lot.
Thanks for your comment
You write better than I do, Have fun and don't sweat the small stuff. Doing good.
5267137 Well it's just about getting the right idea really, and then a lot of elaboration.
I have written for many years but this is my first fanfic and my first time publishing anything at all so I'm really glad you like it :)
So far so good.
Awwwwwwwwww
"Yes, My precious scales"
"one scoop or two?"
I had a feeling that Twilight and Luna were gonna be shipped together...or as the story say in its vernacular they became marefriends. And the last paragraph of this chapter pretty much comfirmed it:
..or in laypony terms, they spent the rest of the night in Canterlot in their castle suite making love to each other, and that occurs after making a cameo back in Ponyville to see Spike and Rarity, who is also now a couple. (We can imply that they teleported to Ponyville and back.) Still surprised that Twilight turns out to be a fillyfooler, a little less surprised that Luna is one as well, but when you think about it, what other pony could truly complete Luna than Twilight? And who could teach to Twilight all there is to know about love between two mares than the princess of the Night herself?
EDIT: I didn't realize that Spike and Rarity got laid with each other at the same time also...I missed that with the emphasis to on Twi' and Luna's implied lovemaking to each other. Well played!
In short, I enjoyed how you showed the feelings changed and shown as they grow and bloom, even with the seed that we forgot but reaped a boutiful harvest with. Again, Good show!
Another thought: I remember that Twilight said that she going to stay in Canterlot for a year while she 'tutors' Luna on modern society since for Luna, culture shock would be a definite understatement, especially when you have to understand that Luna have been out of the look for at least a millennium. Considering how things have shown up at Hearth's Warming (Pony Christmas), I have a pretty good hunch that even when the year's up, Twilight is not gonna return to Ponyville---why would she, frankly? her lover is Princess Luna in Canterlot and after a year of being together including the intimate moments, there is really no reason for Twi to be in Ponyville anymore. Not to mention Spike is his own person independent of Spike, has his own lover in Rarity, as well that he is the librarian of the Golden Oaks Library now, since Twilight is no longer. (Hell you could easily say the tree house is already Spike's)
Prediction: Twilight returns to Ponyville, but just long enough to inform Spike that she is staying in Canterlot permanently with the Princesses (specifically Princess Luna). And that she gives Spike her greatest regards of his life with Rarity now that the two are together. It would be cool that Spike actually grows into a more adult form of himself as well, kinda like the 'heart's desire' wish.
I call you cheater because this story is super effective
Also why are people giving such a good story thumb downs???
Just wanted to make a quick update. This story will continue starting sometime next month. I am sorry it has been so long, but because of writers block and having too much to do. I will start writing again after my exams and I also have another story in the making. Just to let you know :)
6265621 I've wondered that myself
Hehe, I am glad you like it
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Too bad we didn't get to see much of Tiberius.
Wow, been so long since this updated I gotta go back and start from the begining
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And I am sorry for this, it has been several years, but the fact that you are going to go back and read it all (even read any of this at all) makes me really happy :)
This is a good story so far. All of the characters are acting as they would in such a scenario and I really enjoy this kind of concept. I have something like this too, but I simply haven't published it. I believe that Spike would do something like this if given the talk that he was. I am also curious about where Rarity would have taken him to dinner and why had he not run away. I shall continue to read, but good work as far as I can tell.
Hurray! An adorable chapter after all of the sadness and stress.
Twilight isn't half as mature as spike. Maturity is something that can measured with age but by how you handle things. Rarity was what he lived for beyond being twilight assistant and for twilight to reject his chances when it was Rarity who should have done not that she should have the courage to say how she actually feels and take a chance. Who cares what others think? It isn't their business.
Bout time Spike!!
Just ONE actual KISS on the show on the LAST episode would have been asking for to much...right?