Spike is having trouble trying to confess to Rarity. And hes being plagued by the same nightmare night after night. After getting lost hunting Gems, trying to clear his head, it seems Luna is willing to help with the aid of an old friend. Turns out Spike isn't the first dragon to have fallen for a mare.
<work in progress, could use an editor haven't done a fic in years. fluff>
Art by Ishmi and the Kings' men https://m.facebook.com/IshmiAndTheKingsMen?_rdr
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Chapters (2)
I love where you are going with this,i'll definitely follow it. I did notice a few spelling errors. I could edit for you if you want. just message me directly. I might not catch everything when it comes to punctuation, but I can certainly fix spelling errors.
A little work and run with it,
The Next chapter is in the works, and hopefully I'll have a title Picture soon.
I am very much enjoying this set up so far. Not sure how long this story will go on for, but I'll gladly follow it's progress, I wish you luck.
5171458 at least a few chapters and one or two back story chapters with Luna
seems like only half a chapter, to be honest
5186817 personally I think it is a half chapter. Lol sorry but I felt like I needed to post something. And try to get me out of this funk I'm in
5186829 I know what you mean, but I think I still got the record for longest time between chapters in a story (Apr 24th, 2012 to Mar 8th, 2014)
5186848 well I'm suspend for a week I'll try to gain more ground and do a Topaz back story
5186857 suspended? What did you do this time?!
5186863 this time?
5186873 I have no idea, I'm just having a bit of fun (it's been a while since I had the chance)
Unless the 2nd chapter is finished.
I am happy to see an update for the story. Although I will not comment much on it since the chapter is incomplete. I will wait until the proper adjustments are made. I will say though I'm intrigued on what exactly is going to take place during the party.
I also find it interesting that Celestia and spike have this supposed mother and son relationship. Many people do it for Twilight and spike, but this is my first time seeing it involving Celestia. (then again, I haven't really looked a whole lot, so I'm unsure if it's really as uncommon as it may appear to me.)
5200194 I'm glad you like it. Like I said I was going through a rough spot with work but I plan on working on it today. Now I always saw Spike seeing Celestia as a mother figure because she would be taking care of him before Twilight could since she was a young filly
KEEP RUNNING !
5219851 thx I should have it finished by tues night along with the start of chapter 3
5186848
I think I just beat you.. (March 2012 to November 2014..)
Anyways, this looks decent enough. I noticed quite a few errors in spelling and grammar, but no bad. I shall be watching!
5291785 yeah its hard to post it from my phone my laptop has been. Well shared with my family so I see less of it. And my editor has disappeared so I could use another
5292720
I can understand that, as I have had to do the past 2 chapters of my story on my phone.
As for an editor, might I suggest this. It's a group intended for people needing editors.
The artwork in the story are both gone
Pace is a little off, too fast. You need to slow down, take some time to describe what's happening. The emotions, the thoughts, the setting. If you slow down, you can draw the reader in, let them get invested in the story and characters. As it is... its jumpy, jolting. Shakes you out as soon as you start going in.
6315492 I appreciate your feed back