Make her his servant. And if she disagrees with anything troy says then throw her in the dungeon. In fact, do the same to Gleaming because she's getting on my nerves too.
Thanks for the new chapter update, my friend. Also, I can think of a number of punishments for Rarity and Rainbow, all of which involve one (1) word: Maid/Servent.
Rarity could be a maid for a month while dash has a restraining order as well as community service for three months. I think Rarity's punishment should be less severe mainly because she at least confessed. Dash is still a part of the harmony thing so even if her attempted murder is pretty high not ounce but twice there is little that can be done in my opinion. However that doesn't mean she can't be stripped of her status of wonderbolt if her behavior does not improve.
Punishments well depends on this Equestria's rules and laws on assault and rape. Rarity openly admitted to raping Troy and Rainbow Not only assaulted troy once but 3 different times once in front of both Luna and Celestia. Without a good foundation on the law of the land so to speak I wouldn't be able to adequately suggest punishments things are sure heating up and what's the deal with Flurry or is this some sort of rebel phase shes going through.
for Rainbow I'd say 1 year community service and suspension from the wonderbolts during the time if she meaningfully apologizes and 6 months dungeon and removal from the wonderbolts if she does not. Attempted murder should be taken seriously
As for Rarity Community service or indentured servitude if again she apologizes and means it jail time if she doesn't
I think motherhood is the perfect punishment for Rarity. Rainbow Dash is more difficult as she needs something severe but not to permanent, so she becomes Rarity's official babysitter for life. When Rarity needs someone to watch her kids Rainbow Dash has to do it barring illness.
How about going for an ironic punishment for Rainbow...? She tried to harm him three times, where two of them were with lethal intent and one of those would have been successful if not for Fluttershy's medical treatment of CPR. In front of the highest authority in their country, who also appears to be their long lost brother.
How about making her his new bodyguard/shieldmaiden? Maybe even go so far as to link his health to her as motivation? Considering how hands-on Stardust was in warfare, he may have been the founder of the Wonderbolts that was more of an elite military commando group. Thus making him the de facto headhoncho in the group. Or maybe their (Celestia and Luna) parents made the Wonderbolts as a group of bodyguards since he were on the front-line... "Rainbow Dash. As punishment for aggravated assault on three occasions, two with lethal intent, you are to from this day onwards to serve in the Wonderbolts. With the reason for the Wonderbolts founding being returned back to the land of Equestria, they are to return to their original duty of protective detail for !"
With Gleaming...... well if she wanted to play guardmare, then give her disciplinary a action as a guard who did something wrong. Maybe even an official demotion from '(Senior?) Captain of the Royal Guards', to 'Lieutenant of the Royal Guards'. Still Princess though.
But Rarity? Considering how their culture functions and how the synopsis describes how sex and nudity is viewed there... I can't see rape being viewed as severe as we do and maybe more along being seen as bad as (severe) bullying. And Rainbow and Gleaming is overreacting to THIS case because it works more as an excuse to "get him", rather than just justification for slighted friend. Maybe something along public apology along with publicly speaking in the school of why rape is a bad thing.
I'm not being nice f*** this I'm walking away but I'm saying this you should have just left the store when you first started this story this is not making no sense at all. I'm sorry even though you're my little brother's favorite fan fiction writer but still I like the first version this the way you going with it with a new version no
There is also Gleamer Shield but I think Cadence has that one cover.
As for punishment, I think Troy will need time to think. I like where this is heading, I think I'm seeing it, Troy is probably thinking. 'I can't be Stardust Soul I'm Troy, but if I'm becoming an alicorn…those that mean that my being as Troy is fading? Is this Stardust some kind of parasite? Is he taking over my body?' Something like that.
I also kind of wonder how is he going to take the whole family thing, is he going to accept it? Go with Celestia and Luna and take them as sisters? Or maybe is too much for him and up to instead lived with Fluttershy a couple of days? Settle in, rest his head, think everything calmly. Who knows maybe Fluttershy can even think of a pet for poor Troy.
As for suggestion of punishment, I would like them to be a surprise, do you mind if I send them to you bia private message?
8446071 I think Dash's punishment for attempted murder twice and assault should be six months of community service, banned from the Wonderbolts for eight months and also have a restraining order of not to come within twenty feet near Troy while wearing a shock collar to which Troy has the remote for, if she refuses, the sentence her under house arrest for five months.
i think rarity should get a light one sense she just lost control and couldn't resist him like a mare in heat they go nut and fuck anything in sight however rainbow hmmmmmmm maybe have her be his personal servant and have spell or maybe a collar enchanted to bend her will to do anything he asks no matter how perverted like an Obedience Spell/enchantment i mean he is soon to be royalty and she attacked royalty so it can be taken as an assassination of a prince
and the whole thing bout changing into an alicorn i'd ask if it will change my personality if it doesn't i'd say fuck it who cares i'd be in a world with sexy as hell female with body that put his last world to shame and he would also most likely get to fuck as many as he likes to help restart the males of the world
8446964 So you would love to lived in a world where you eventually be reduce to the breeding resource and have the task of breeding at least 100 mares a day?
I feel like everyone is just sweeping the violent reactions against Troy under the rug. Gleaming just threatened him with a spear and got off without even a reprimand. Is he going to be the eternal victim and accept it, or will he eventually stand up for himself?
not sure about rarity. I mean what she did was wrong but she was a big enough person to apologize and own up to what she did. Even in front of the princesses. dash, on the other hand, needs a punishment. maybe make her a maid or something.
And Rarity should make some clothes and watch Troy burn them. She asks what right he had to that and he responds that he had the same right she had when she did it
I got problems with this. The main character needs to get mad at some damn point. He has been lax and at times, a total pussy. When he grew,he should've defended himself from Rainbow. He should stop taking their shit. Also. The entire explanation of Stardust seemed like "McGuffin this and that". The orichalcum bit had me mad and confused. Mad because McGuffin metal that can do everything he wants. And confused because they all thought it was cowardly to use it and weaken Starswirl... anything to win in my book. Also. That ward on the amulet; couldn't it be destroyed by the spear that disrupts magic?
8447084 you are lookin at it in the wrong way and if i was the only male they couldn't force me to do shit cause any damage would be detrimental to bringing back males and i'd get to pick any one i wanted and yes what you pointed out some might see it that way but that is more from the story XY Chromosome
8449921 They can also matrix you out so you don't even know what is happening, harvest your sperm with machines so to make things more robotic and cold
8450117 I think that is going a little far and I don't think they would have that tech sense the has been no makes for if I'm remembering this correctly 1200 years so any tech they would have is for females only
8467177 Troy could be a fragment of that brother and when the soul is made whole again, then the question of will he be the same or different will be shown.
I agree with the people who think Rainbow should be his bodyguard. Mostly because I'm a fan of Rainbow and don't want something too bad, even after all she did in this fic. As for Rarity, her punishment shouldn't be too bad since she at least confessed and (I think) feels guilty about raping him. -Dark
“Yes.” Luna added. “It all happened twelve-hundred years ago. Paradox invaded Equestria after escaping from Tartarus.” She began. Both mares explained about this alicorn I was reincarnated from. Apparently this Paradox guy is some kind of creature called a draconequus whose body was made up of several creatures merged into one. Sounded kinda like a chimera of greek mythology. Anyway, they also explained how brave Stardust Soul was when Paradox invaded. Rather than be behind his soldiers, he was on the front lines where the fighting took place. Fluttershy, Pinkie, and Rarity were in tears when they learned how innocent lives were lost or caught in the crossfire of the war. Flurry was the only one not showing any such reaction since she was just staring off into space. What was bugging me was how she would occasionally glance in my direction. Luna even mentioned how he used to align the stars before she was old enough to take control of the night. What was said next shocked us. Paradox knew that he was losing the fight with how dangerous Stardust was to him. Paradox had a plan though. First, he placed a curse on Starswirl the Bearded (who was supposed to be the greatest unicorn to have ever existed). He then fired a spear-like object at the weakened sorcerer. Stardust, just like Paradox planned, took the blade instead. Before he died, Stardust enhanced Starswirl’s power by giving the wizard a portion of his own. His dying words were ‘Please ensure that everyone was happy.’ before he passed away.
8446491 Yeah gotta agree with this dude it was going fine before but now you should just cancel this story or better yet go back delete some of the bad chaps then rewrite this into a slower paced story cause this is just going way to damn fast.
Don't forget that Rarity burned his clothes.
Make her his servant. And if she disagrees with anything troy says then throw her in the dungeon. In fact, do the same to Gleaming because she's getting on my nerves too.
Thanks for the new chapter update, my friend. Also, I can think of a number of punishments for Rarity and Rainbow, all of which involve one (1) word: Maid/Servent.
What's Dash's punishment gonna be?
Also glimmering shield should be punished for her shit.
Rarity could be a maid for a month while dash has a restraining order as well as community service for three months. I think Rarity's punishment should be less severe mainly because she at least confessed. Dash is still a part of the harmony thing so even if her attempted murder is pretty high not ounce but twice there is little that can be done in my opinion. However that doesn't mean she can't be stripped of her status of wonderbolt if her behavior does not improve.
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I agree with them
Punishments well depends on this Equestria's rules and laws on assault and rape. Rarity openly admitted to raping Troy and Rainbow Not only assaulted troy once but 3 different times once in front of both Luna and Celestia. Without a good foundation on the law of the land so to speak I wouldn't be able to adequately suggest punishments things are sure heating up and what's the deal with Flurry or is this some sort of rebel phase shes going through.
More plz.
Hmmm
damned troy what have you gotten yourself into
for Rainbow I'd say 1 year community service and suspension from the wonderbolts during the time if she meaningfully apologizes and 6 months dungeon and removal from the wonderbolts if she does not. Attempted murder should be taken seriously
As for Rarity Community service or indentured servitude if again she apologizes and means it jail time if she doesn't
I think motherhood is the perfect punishment for Rarity. Rainbow Dash is more difficult as she needs something severe but not to permanent, so she becomes Rarity's official babysitter for life. When Rarity needs someone to watch her kids Rainbow Dash has to do it barring illness.
Now that makes sense
Last chapter was a little bit confusing
How about going for an ironic punishment for Rainbow...?
She tried to harm him three times, where two of them were with lethal intent and one of those would have been successful if not for Fluttershy's medical treatment of CPR.
In front of the highest authority in their country, who also appears to be their long lost brother.
How about making her his new bodyguard/shieldmaiden? Maybe even go so far as to link his health to her as motivation?
Considering how hands-on Stardust was in warfare, he may have been the founder of the Wonderbolts that was more of an elite military commando group. Thus making him the de facto headhoncho in the group.
Or maybe their (Celestia and Luna) parents made the Wonderbolts as a group of bodyguards since he were on the front-line...
"Rainbow Dash. As punishment for aggravated assault on three occasions, two with lethal intent, you are to from this day onwards to serve in the Wonderbolts. With the reason for the Wonderbolts founding being returned back to the land of Equestria, they are to return to their original duty of protective detail for !"
With Gleaming...... well if she wanted to play guardmare, then give her disciplinary a action as a guard who did something wrong.
Maybe even an official demotion from '(Senior?) Captain of the Royal Guards', to 'Lieutenant of the Royal Guards'.
Still Princess though.
But Rarity?
Considering how their culture functions and how the synopsis describes how sex and nudity is viewed there... I can't see rape being viewed as severe as we do and maybe more along being seen as bad as (severe) bullying.
And Rainbow and Gleaming is overreacting to THIS case because it works more as an excuse to "get him", rather than just justification for slighted friend.
Maybe something along public apology along with publicly speaking in the school of why rape is a bad thing.
Both punished with chastity+service to the one whom they 'assaulted' ^_^
I'm not being nice f*** this I'm walking away but I'm saying this you should have just left the store when you first started this story this is not making no sense at all. I'm sorry even though you're my little brother's favorite fan fiction writer but still I like the first version this the way you going with it with a new version no
There is also Gleamer Shield but I think Cadence has that one cover.
As for punishment, I think Troy will need time to think. I like where this is heading, I think I'm seeing it, Troy is probably thinking. 'I can't be Stardust Soul I'm Troy, but if I'm becoming an alicorn…those that mean that my being as Troy is fading? Is this Stardust some kind of parasite? Is he taking over my body?' Something like that.
I also kind of wonder how is he going to take the whole family thing, is he going to accept it? Go with Celestia and Luna and take them as sisters? Or maybe is too much for him and up to instead lived with Fluttershy a couple of days? Settle in, rest his head, think everything calmly. Who knows maybe Fluttershy can even think of a pet for poor Troy.
As for suggestion of punishment, I would like them to be a surprise, do you mind if I send them to you bia private message?
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I think Dash's punishment for attempted murder twice and assault should be six months of community service, banned from the Wonderbolts for eight months and also have a restraining order of not to come within twenty feet near Troy while wearing a shock collar to which Troy has the remote for, if she refuses, the sentence her under house arrest for five months.
i think rarity should get a light one sense she just lost control and couldn't resist him like a mare in heat they go nut and fuck anything in sight however rainbow hmmmmmmm maybe have her be his personal servant and have spell or maybe a collar enchanted to bend her will to do anything he asks no matter how perverted like an Obedience Spell/enchantment i mean he is soon to be royalty and she attacked royalty so it can be taken as an assassination of a prince
and the whole thing bout changing into an alicorn i'd ask if it will change my personality if it doesn't i'd say fuck it who cares i'd be in a world with sexy as hell female with body that put his last world to shame and he would also most likely get to fuck as many as he likes to help restart the males of the world
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So you would love to lived in a world where you eventually be reduce to the breeding resource and have the task of breeding at least 100 mares a day?
I feel like everyone is just sweeping the violent reactions against Troy under the rug. Gleaming just threatened him with a spear and got off without even a reprimand. Is he going to be the eternal victim and accept it, or will he eventually stand up for himself?
That was awesome good for Troy ,how about they join his herd.
Rainbow Dash's punishment should be to be his body guard, with a geas/compulsion to protect him
Rarity though, well, shell have a punishment enough in 9ish months
I get it, you hate rainbow dash, just kill her and be done with it.
That being said, I'm still interested to see where this is going.
not sure about rarity. I mean what she did was wrong but she was a big enough person to apologize and own up to what she did. Even in front of the princesses. dash, on the other hand, needs a punishment. maybe make her a maid or something.
The ultimate punishment for Dash is 1000 spankings in public infringe of all ponyville
And Rarity should make some clothes and watch Troy burn them. She asks what right he had to that and he responds that he had the same right she had when she did it
These ponies are beginning to get contemptuously vindictive
wow, poor troy I don’t think his brain take this infro. what gonna happen next chapter?
I got problems with this. The main character needs to get mad at some damn point. He has been lax and at times, a total pussy. When he grew,he should've defended himself from Rainbow. He should stop taking their shit.
Also. The entire explanation of Stardust seemed like "McGuffin this and that". The orichalcum bit had me mad and confused. Mad because McGuffin metal that can do everything he wants. And confused because they all thought it was cowardly to use it and weaken Starswirl... anything to win in my book.
Also. That ward on the amulet; couldn't it be destroyed by the spear that disrupts magic?
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you are lookin at it in the wrong way and if i was the only male they couldn't force me to do shit cause any damage would be detrimental to bringing back males and i'd get to pick any one i wanted and yes what you pointed out some might see it that way but that is more from the story XY Chromosome
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They can also matrix you out so you don't even know what is happening, harvest your sperm with machines so to make things more robotic and cold
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I think that is going a little far and I don't think they would have that tech sense the has been no makes for if I'm remembering this correctly 1200 years so any tech they would have is for females only
Annndd he is down for the count
I hope something really bad happens to Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Flurry and Gleaming. Just because I want.
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What they all really need is some good slapping, eye poking, and physical slapstick punishment Three Stooges style.
So far, when reading Flurry's dialogue, all I think about is this. Hopefully, a scene like this plays out. That'd be hilarious. XD
i would be asking if they bring there brother back.. what happands to me? do i get overwritten with stardust... am i just a shell.
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Troy could be a fragment of that brother and when the soul is made whole again, then the question of will he be the same or different will be shown.
hey this is pretty fucking good man keep up the great work and ill be gladly awaiting incoming chapters
Incest please.
I agree with the people who think Rainbow should be his bodyguard. Mostly because I'm a fan of Rainbow and don't want something too bad, even after all she did in this fic. As for Rarity, her punishment shouldn't be too bad since she at least confessed and (I think) feels guilty about raping him.
-Dark
WALL OF TEXT ALERT!!!
I don't see Troy screwing Celestia, Luna, Cadence, Gleaming Shield, or Flurry Heart
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Yeah gotta agree with this dude it was going fine before but now you should just cancel this story or better yet go back delete some of the bad chaps then rewrite this into a slower paced story cause this is just going way to damn fast.
Good luck with this. Its good.
When's the next chapter?
excellent story man goes on